Derpy Doo, heavily-pregnant, is taking part in the town play of the Rejuvenation Festival, a very important time that celebrates the birth of Laurelore the Firsticorn, the first alicorn ruler of Equestria. Mayor Mare and friends organise the event and, when the big night comes, are fully expecting something to go wrong.
Princess Celestia, meanwhile, comes to Ponyville for some mild respite and watches the play.
And a lonely traveller, finally having found his true place in the universe, returns to Equestria to help an expecting mother.
What happens will change their lives forever as on this night, just as it was many centuries ago, a very special foal will be born in Ponyville.
Based on the Vicar of Dibley's Christmas Special.
(Rest in Peace; Emma Chambers, John Bluthal, Liz Smith, Gary Waldhorn, Trevor Peacock and Roger Lloyd Pack who brought laughter to my home and RE Lessons. You will be missed)
Cover Image by Beavernator, one of the best MLP Artists out there.
Sequel here: https://www.fimfiction.net/story/350367/old-fences
Cover Art (By me) here: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/755433/cover-art
Does anyone know if you can add more than 5 characters on the main cast?
My! This really is quite exciting!!
7633957 Thanks. Glad you like it.
That was fun. Shame you couldn't have had Bulk Biceps step out of character to help, so we could have had someone saying:
"Are you sure it's a good idea having Tirek take care of Laurelore?'
7637447 Ah blast!
I might edit that. Thanks for the idea.
7637571 Okay, a few lines in, I've added the line. Thanks. That was not an opportunity to be missed.
I would almost feel sorry for that poor excuse of a Mare, if Doctor Whooves found out about what she did, much less what she planned to do!!
7641023 Oh she's not finished yet.
7641781 Not sure whether to "Like" as it means more story, or Hate, because it means I have to "see" her again @.@
7641828 Oh trust me, if she does appear, she's in for a very cathartic bashing so worry not. The next part of this features Derpy working up the courage to go back to Canterlot where a certain gentlecolt finds out about what she was put through. It will not end well for Aunt Magnifying.
I don't demonise canon characters. I create my own demons. I was worried I made her a little unreal but you always go overboard on your starter villains.
My Derpfic Storyline largely explore the theme of Derpy coming out of her shell and finding out about all the good ponies out there, all of whom stand up for her against the Countess and...others.
7641878 Maybe she was a little overboard, but then again it's fine. I mean it's not like there aren't certain villains that you just love to hate, and hope that they die a horrible and painful death. I mean everyone was happy when Jabba The Hutt died, because he was such an unloveable and disgusting villain, as just one great example.
Besides, it's not like there aren't more similar people like that today, as much as I hate to say it.
The important thing is your villain WORKS. She's over the top, but not in a way that is unbelieveable. Plus you have set it up so that when she falls, your audience will be filled with much happiness!
7642375 I'm glad to hear it.
Thanks for all your support.
Do you know if Beavernator does requests?
7673914 I don't unfortunately but there's no harm in asking.
Thats the way, defend your friend!
Derpy had it Hard enough already and sending her into the madhouse and killing dinky would break her
Take that countess!
7757089 Glad you like it and thanks so much for the Fave!
You're awesome!
If you want to find out more about Derpy's struggle and how her friends fought to keep her safe, you can read the sequels if you want.
You can't You used to be able to, but now you can't. Just use the Other tag instead.
7797230 Okay, don't worry. I'll make do.
Speaking as a young vicar who is, expectedly, a huge Vicar of Dibley fan, this was one of the most entertaining yet perfectly balanced with seriousness stories I've read in a long while. Well done.
7809215 Thanks. Glad you liked it and thanks for the fave.
You're awesome!
God bless you.
But, the statue. Why the mayor forgot about the statue
I'm guessing the statue got the countess.
7966188 Well, one, the birth of Dinky is altogether more captivating, I think I'm safe in saying.
And two, if there's a cross between Discord and the Weeping Angels, for the sake of everything living on the planet, don't think about it too much!
7966236 Look, I just threw it in for a reference.
Countess gets her just desserts later though.
You CAN add more than 5... with permission
It's unlikely though
Still
Overall, a good story
The Doctor Who references were so
And you nailed him down (although being crazy the Doctor is fairly easy to nail down)
And anyone that doesn't get them, oh well.
And Derpy is best pony
A few good funny moments too
And Celestia + The Doctor ship and Derpy!
YES
A blue box can't fix everything
Good luck for future stories though!
Wait, the Doctor is in this?
grins
This is going to be good
grabs some popcorn and starts eating it
LOL
LOL, take a hint
Doctor Who?
*dies of cuteness overload*
I want to punch the villain in the face
8173180 Your feeling is shared with a great many readers.
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LOL
8173167 Yeah, I was actually surprised that ship didn't have much attention.
I mean, both of them are immortal and control powers beyond anypony's understanding.
But yeah, the Doctor's kind of 'been around' if you catch my drift.
Well, that existed. My only complaint would be how the narrative feels longer than it is, which is not the best thing for stories longer than 8k words.
On to the next one!
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Fair enough.
But enjoyable overall?
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I would say yes, it was enjoyable overall.
Nice, I liked how you ended this. You are really good at enticing your audience. The play itself reminds me of the nativity story. I'm hooked until the next chapter, till next time Purple.
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Thanks, Cherry. Great to see you!
Yeah, it's essentially their version of the Nativity.
(If it was Celestia and Luna's birth it would just look egocentric and besides, in my headcanon, nopony actually knows how they were born.
I don't know if you're a Doctor Who fan but I hope youb get the references.
Let me know. Your feedback is greatly appreciated.
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Well, I couldn't have Celestia and Luna. That would be egocentric.
But I'm glad you liked it. I hope you enjoy the rest.
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Still, the Fausticorn appears a lot in MLP fanworks.
While she's something of a Messianic Archetype in Equestria, the story isn't exactly like that of Jesus.
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Yeah. While Rememberly the Bonnycorn was betrayed and nearly murdered by her own court, that's more based off Julius Caesar.
Laurelore is based off several 'Chosen One' archetypes.
For more information, there's the forum on the Rejuvenationverse. Explains some history.
As for the Satan equivalent. That can be found in the first chapter of the sequel.
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Okay. Hope you like it.
I say, that was an incredible read! I know the Countess would be bad, but sending somepony, any pony with sanity to a madhouse...... That's pretty dark. I was also taken aback for Ditzy Doo being born a noble.... Now that was unexpected. Keep writing Patch! (Btw, I am a history fanatic too.
I like learning the lore of the world, so thank you for explaining the basis of what it was like!)
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Thanks Red. Glad you liked it.
Yeah, the Countess grates on everyone but that makes her downfall so much more cathartic.
You'll find more insight on Derpy's upbringing and Glanders Gate in the sequels.
And if you're a history fan, there's plenty on the Group Forum.
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Thanks, I'll definitely give it a look at it.
Hey, that's pretty good!
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Thanks.
BEST STORY EVER!
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Thank you very much.
Feel free to take a look at the sequels if the themes are to your liking.
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Got it. Sequels, here I come!
I get that reference.
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Welcome, fellow Blackadder fan!
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De dum de dum de dum.