Ya boy DN is back, start expecting new stories in upcoming months. Just a guy who likes the show and many different anime
Hopes Peak Academy. The most prestigious school in Equestria. Twilight being invited was not a mistake, she was Celestia's smartest student. The high school would be the perfect place for her, right? However, the headmaster, Monokuma has other plans for the students invited to this prestigious institution. A certain game, that no one would ever want to play. A certain game involving a certain crime.
Presented in the Equestria Girls Universe. Contains blood.
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You have a lot of potential in making a DR story, but there are a couple of things you're doing that take away from the overall enjoyment of it. First off, the pacing is too fast and the writing feels rushed. You also skipped the intro and the first Free-Time event, which you shouldn't have done because in order for the story to flow well, everything must be included. There are also a bunch of grammar mistakes here and there, but nothing too major.
Overall, pretty good. I'll be keeping an eye on this one.