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Matthew Penn


I write imaginary stories about cartoon horses.

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It was another boring summer afternoon for Apple Bloom, who usually spends them sitting at home and plucking the petals off of white sunflowers, but all that changes when a pony riding a unicycle passes by Sweet Apple Acres.

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6816133

It is. It's a simple story about puppy love and heartbreak. At least it is to me.

6816133 Although there is a possibility of a follow-up.

There is no resolution, no denounment, and no resolving of any conflict, despite the fact that you tagged your story as "completed".

Your story has no ending. It stops, but it doesn't END.

So either you change the "completed" status, or please, add an ending.

Until then, this gets a downvote from me.

6817409 That's fine. I'm glad you took the time to read it. Thanks for your input. I rarely get honest critiques for the things I write :twilightsmile:

I feel like Granny Smith's heart was broken by a unicyclist when she was younger, and I wish we got to learn about it.

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