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you don't see the cleric beast to often nor do you see the pursuer (yes I know that the pursuer is in ds2 he just happens to be my favorite boss in all of the soulsborne franchise)
I like it! Though you might want to get an
editor
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can you point out the spots that need to be worked on?
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The Pursuer is a pain to get rid of, in SotFS no less
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it is his name for a reason
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But appear in every single corner is not healthy
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well you are like the tuoghest 'prey' hes had in a while
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Yeah, and the fact that he drops some titanite, but the Pursuer couple is a kick in the balls (sorry for the language)
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i got thicker skin then a feminist so no worries and He is still my favorite boss despite his flaws and the fact that you can beat him before going into the arena is a nice touch
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I still like the janitor samurai better
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well he does have those clean sweeps
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Or the freight train attacks
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i could never quite parry him
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Try parrying Manus
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no thanks I tihink for him i'll just use a tower sheild
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And great magic shield, for stamina reasons
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of course
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I probably missed some and some of my suggestions to fix the various errors are probably wrong, but those are the ones I noticed after reading it
I honestly like the story regardless of errors and I only noticed most of them after reading it a second time.
I did notice you use more full stops than necessary
Keep up the good work and please never use the word yea for it irritates me greatly
P.S I apologize if I have insulted or offended you in any way with anything I have just said
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Oh you're perfectly fine. Thank you, I'll fix these after work.
I... Also don't like editors because the last one I had said my story was trash. I like to listen to the feedback of my commenters to see if I can improve things.
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Well in that case I look forward to the next chapter and I'll be sure to keep my eye out for any errors to inform you of
Keep up the good work, you write good stuff
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Well to more important task in, for you to find all of those is very nice of you, some were grammatical, others were flat out forgot words.
It's hard to keep track of what you're writing about since I don't go into the whole story pre-point. I do what some people might call, winging it. There is no rough draft, I feel like if I don't grab your attention with this, it's a failure. I have a head so chuck full of ideas that i have stories lined up that I don't know how to start yet.
My whole process is throw paint at the wall and see the picture I can make from it.
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I know the feeling, thats exactly how I write stories and I know how easy it is to miss things
Especially when somebody points out a mistake, even after you've edited it yourself and you just go "how did I miss that?!"