arcane new to site only seen season 3 going on four so please no spoilers
luna find a new alicorn, and to her surprise, he has a secret to hide from all of the pony if they find what how will they react. The fillys have been disappearing night after night with no trace with all this the mane six are looking into the recent night case and find something they fear that can be stronger than nightmare moon.
This story was a idea of a friend he been though strange thing even had his eye blend folded for two days in a row if you have a question just ask
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*sees title of fic*
*sees author's name*
*sees alicorn OC*
The grammar, wording, sentences, syntax, indeed, the English in general here is so bad that I struggled to read more than a few paragraphs in. This could be the greatest story ever written and nobody would ever know because the text is so incomprehensible. A full rewrite and the attentions of a good editor are sorely needed.
This HAS to be a trollfic. No real story is ever this blatant in its failure.
6557046 I'm guessing you meant to say 'I prescribe a full rewrite'. It's funny there's a grammar issue in your comment about grammar issues.
6557264
Irony is indeed a bitch. Corrected.
not really new to the to this not trollfic see little weak alicorn on her so her is the weakest alicorn in equestria by the way the second chapter is out
"This story was a idea of a friend he been though strange thing even had his eye blend folded for two days in a row if you have a question just ask"
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Wut.
6557046 Might I tl;dr you, kind Sir, and just say:
This. Sucks.
6557264 That would, in fact, be an error with spelling, not grammar.
don't tell me I just said he blend himself on his on and that right it would suck it my first story.
lsseus you don't have to say all that if it suck say it suck
You may want to think about first writing something in your native language, whatever that is, and maybe moving up to English once you've learned it better.
thanks elric of melnipony but people will not read it my friend don't read my story because of the it and i will try to make it better when i get more pratice
6557938
Just out of curiosity, what is your native tongue?
spanish
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Entonces, este grupo tiene personas que pueden hablar español. Recomiendo que usted lo visita. Pueden ayuadame.
the last part is ayuadame not ayudar lo
you said help him not help me but thanks
what is this
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That's all just my high school Spanish; of course there's going to be some errors. My apologies.
it fine
6557442 There is a button. Use it to reply to comments.
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Also, get an editor. And a translator.