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A Random Guy

Sometimes I forget I have the social skills equivalent of a dried up worm on the edge of the sidewalk.


Rarity shows Applejack a side project she’s been working on for a while now. There are still a few kinks to be ironed out.

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There’s a feral that keeps attacking our chickens. Which reminds me, I need to talk to Fluttershy about that one.”

><; I was just playing with the chickens, PLAYING! Please don't tell Fluttershy! I dun wanna get the stare again!!!

Lol! All kidding aside, this was a fun read! Tho, dat ritual for the book.......;>> Fave and Like ^^

6403362 Why, thank you for the appreciation. It was as fun to write as it is to read.

But seriously, stay out of my coop.

6403387 Heh heh! No prob at all!

O _O ........ *spits out a feather* ;^^ 'kay.....

And this is what happens when you don't research your project. You might end up redoing someone else's idea, create life, or end up being less than your baby sister.

6404760 And let the irony arise if someone already made the same story before me, and someone made the same story before them, ad nauseam.

6404830 I did get a kick though that Rarity created a living book. She probably did create something special there and doesn't even know it.

This had some good moments. Applejack's line:

“An overreaction needs an under-reaction to balance out, or else harmony will fall and Discord will turn us all into cats.”

was golden.

The punchline just kind of fell flat for me, though. I can't fully put my finger on why.

Part of it is that the entire ending scene with Sweetie Belle felt like it came out of left field and didn't really flow naturally from the previous events of the story. After the build-up with the book revealing its self-aware nature to Applejack, the sudden transition away from that idea was kind of disappointing. At that point, I would have been more interested in seeing some sort of ridiculous, over-the-top fallout a week after AJ decides to help out the book.

This isn't a bad story, by any means, but it feels like it needs something to make it more coherent.

6421932 I wrote what felt right at the time. Actually, I've been playing with the idea of a sentient spell for a while. I might explore the concept mmore in depth in the future.

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