Equestria has flourished in Luna's absence. That's a good thing, right?
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I like the setup/backstory for cannon. I found the level of perfection presented a bit perplexing (ok, I meant stretching suspension of disbelief, but alliteration... ) but some of that can be explained by usage of unreliable narrator. That is to say Luna looking for larger signs of strife or fear directed at herself which was not present, and so glossing over faults not directed at her. That isn't to say I'm looking for a dark and gloomy equestria by any means, but the all pervading perfection feels phony.
Regardless of that quibble, I quite enjoyed this story, thanks for writing it!
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6339969 I hear you. My thought was that Equestria only seemed perfect to Luna, fresh out on parole as she was. I'd imagined that S2E4 was the first time she'd socialized since her release, so her impressions may have been skewed by the acceptance she eventually found there. But then Tia had that line... I told her not to say it, but I'm clearly not the boss of her.
This is all assuming that Luna spent the entirety of Discord's return dunking scrubs in CoD, of course.
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Oh, we're talking CoD level communication is her baseline? Ok, now I'm totally with you about Equestra being pure as the wind driven snow.
Cool beans!
There are precious few stories which serve to make canon episodes better, and this is one of them. This is the story behind the story, and feels all the more real because of its pedigree. Well done!
I can't believe that it's taken me this long to get around to reading this! I'm terribly sorry that I didn't because this is a wonderful one-shot and is beautifully written. Luna is my absolute favorite pony because of things like this. She's complicated and deep, and she struggles with things most of us do at some point or another. Regret, guilt, anger, disdain, self-loathing, disappointment, fear, sadness, it's all there in the way she speaks and thinks, and this story is subtly heart wrenching because of it. Very well done, no surprise there!
I thoroughly enjoyed this story you have shared, and appreciate the layer of feeling it adds to the tantabus episode.
Sharing my favorite moment from this story is easy, since I was forced to pause at this line due to its power:
Bam! You got me right in my humanity!
Masterful lines such as this are what I read for.
Luna lives knowing that she actively tried to destroy what she now cherishes and adores. But that is the tip of the ice berg. The kicker is her inability to ever take credit for Equestria being a paradise. Luna, Princess of Equestria, Guardian of the Moon, and Watcher of Dreams, will never be able to look at Equestria and say "I helped build this." Even a thousand years after this story takes place, she cannot take credit.
It is like... like working on a group project, but you procrastinate on your part and don't finish it on time. Your group pulls together without you, and creates the project of your dreams- something above what you thought your abilities could ever help produce. Then, they choose to add your name to the submission anyways, and the teacher gives you an A+. The teacher is such a big fan, in fact, that she shares the project with the rest of the class, and the other teachers. The whole time you know you are riding on borrowed glory, but your group insists that you would have done the same, and that it is okay, and that you have been forgiven. They tell you they know they will do better next time, but no matter what you can never go back and make it better this time.
Except, in Luna's case, that was the only project she ever got the chance on, and she feels like she will be riding that borrowed glory forever.
See! The feeling it took me a whole paragraph to describe you summed up in a sentence. That is true art, and i thank you for sharing.