• Member Since 16th Oct, 2014
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Bigbook29


Just a simple person, who really love the MLP fan-base, along with several other things.

Comments ( 33 )

I feel sorry for him.
more please!

MORE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

What is wrong with twilight?! One of the first things she says to him is his height?
Hahahahah!
more please!

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Well.....meeting a Great Old One face to face, even as a Avatar can cause anyone to say something stupid.....Twilight just proved that.

whelp you had me on the edge of my seat the entire time an now theirs no more chapters:pinkiesad2:

CPO

Seriously, no one has commented on this? I am disappointed in you all. This was a good chapter, I look forward to the next one. :D

Good but needs an editer.
Also nazoteph seems a bit too cocky.

Interesting, I like the concept but this seriously needs an editor.

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Also, the effects of insanity come off as rather greatly over-exaggerated and forced.
They also just seems to be the usual cheesy side effects you get in half baked cosmic horror story's and lovecraft-lite.

Think abit more realistically about this.
And, if I may do a shameless promotion here; I would like to recommend Sunless Sea and Fallen London as good places to look for an example of realistic, lovecraftian madness.

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That's fair. Honestly I do want to give much more of a 'wrong haunting feeling' with this then I had before. Problem is, is that a I'm a little too short in, to really give that...at least for now, as I'm hopping to push it for later stuff. Mainly with other ponies, like for example Apple-Bloom having nightmares and what not (for example). And while so far, I don't think I was clear with this...but um, Twilight is 'insane'...scared and worried...yes, insane...not more then she already was. The Diamond dog was insanity and honestly I think I toned it much more down then what idea I'm basing it off was like.

I am trying to go for a Lovecraft feel to it for the insanity of characters, as well as something else...think of 'The Crossed' levels of insanity. I was thinking I could use it like that as a way to give a more...'destructive' and more in your face about it all. Something that can spread around like fire in almost a instant, and cannot be cured at all. And honestly while 'Lovecraftian' Insanity is always amazing to read and write...I need something that affects more people, as Lovecraftian....only works mainly on....an 'individual'.

I hope you know what I mean, and thank you very much for the "shameless promotion" as maybe it well give me better ideas in how I can go about this. Maybe I'm being a hack, and falling flat on my ass for all I know, but I hope at less this is entertaining for you.

Is this story dead? I think its dead. * pokes with a stick *...... Yeah, its dead

...I will not murder these children...I will not murder these children...I will not murder these children...I will not murder these children...

Why not ?

This was a good story, too bad it died

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Sorry man, just...life getting in the way of it all.

Well maybe when the sea of life settles you could give it another go?

This... Gave me the inspiration I so desperately needed! May Nyarlathotep bring some chaos and excitement in your life, sir!

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I'm very glad for that. Not for the bringing of chaos, I meant for inspiration. I like to see someone better than me, actually go through with this idea.

9216939 May I take Zushakon as my own Great Old One?

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You can go right ahead, I don't mind at all.

Ehh. I've never been a fan of the anthropomorphising of Great Old Ones. I just seems silly to me that beings beyond human comprehension could somehow feel boredom and familial attachments.

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