My name, is Jesse Howitser. I was taken away from everything and everyone I loved in one, single night. This is the story of my journey to find a new life. A new life where I can rebuild from my past, and from the evils I have faced throughout my time here. But the question remains, and every night it pounds throughout my mind, how can I rebuild? How can I even hold onto a hope of doing so, if I am not trusted? For my new life here is a horrible one, full of sadness, pain, suffering, and war. But I will do my damn best, to see the deed done.
Or, if it comes down to it, die trying...
Chapters (15)
hmmm this seems good...
5964380 I personally think it is a little rushed. But I'm glad its getting more likes than dislikes.
5964906 feels fine to me :D
5966664 Thanks bud
5967244 Np ^_^
she done fucked up!
5991820 thats for sure
5992068 That is part of the story that must be uncovered. So I recommend reading the story carefully if you want to know the full story. However of course I plan this story to go on for awhile. So far there is no end in sight.
The ponies are reeeeeaaaalllly pissing me off I this fic. I know they can be arrogant and narrow minded, but this is just too far, it's their fault everything happened this way, yet they still blame him, they really need a wake up call. Keep up the good work!
5992068 Both are, and others. What did they expect to happen when they corner a creature with weapons, capture it, put in a cell, do or try to do test on it, cause it to a good amount of pain, just to sit there and be sunshine and rainbows? You know the saying "never corner a scared animal" Because after all that is what he / she is. But you would think Celestia and Luna have lived long enough to see the signs of that and other stuff. That they are not complete morons.
And to Jesse what did, jesse think was going to happen after you attacked them. Even though they attacked first.
5992198 Believe me when I tell you that they will indeed get a wake up call. A rather large wake up call.
5992266 The truth of the matter is that Jesse willingly gave himself to the ponies because he saw no other option at that time. The test was just meant to be a scan that would have detected how much magic he had within him and if he was a danger. However, the test went wrong and in doing so created a sapient Frankenstein Jesse (Without the ugly). And with power enough to break harmony itself.
maybe she will finally leave him alone
5995659 Maybe. But only one way to find out. ON TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!
5995670 AWWWWW YEAH!
5995673 I am going to try and get a chapter out every day.
5995677 that would be awesome ^_^
5998598 You know, that is actually a pretty good song.
some peace! awwww yeah :D
5999689 Sadly that peace will come to an end shortly. TO THE NEXT CHAPTER!
5999689 Hey, I am going to be leaving for a few day so I wont be getting any chapters out in the mean time.
6002080 Ok, i'll be here when you come back, to read it :D
Still a pansy.
6008241 Why still a pansy?
Nice job!
6038435 Thanks
Woah, woah! *heavy breathing* ... May I recommend you slow down your writing, *trying to catch breath* ...it may improve the quality of your story and garner more likes If you spread the events out a bit more instead of rushing through it all. You may not be doing it intentionally but you seem to focus allot of events and what not into a short timeframe, thus making sure your events are more spread out and detailed can help make your audience feel more involved with the story and feel less shoved along.
*gasping for air*
P.S: I'm mainly making these suggestions based on what I've read and seen in well received and loved fan fics, your story has potential to be something interesting, but for that to happen and the story to make an effect on the reader, you need to slow down the event calendar
*passes out from oxygen deprivation*
6044309 lol. Actually when reading the chapters over I noticed the same thing. And that is the reason that I am increasing the word radius. Thanks for the comment and opinion
*breathing normally again*
6044370 no problem, happy to see its already something your already working on improving
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Spooky scares from the scary skeleton!
I think you mean scars, like the injury the joker has.
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As Phoenix Wright here demonstrates you have made another mistake.
I think you meant write, for Wright is by definition a constructive worker.
6045010 Hey, hey. Cut me some slack. I try my best
6045010 Truth be told though, I did ask for it didn't I. Thanks for the comment and I will try to correct as many mistakes as I find within the chapters I write. (I got it wright this time
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I am already resorting to google for this ...
Anyway another mistake of you right there.
You did not have it right, as right is written without a w.
PS: i sincerely hope you did not do that on purpose.... right? ... Right?
6058967 Nope I didn't do that n purpose
And you don't have to resort to google for any of this. I know when I am wrong and In those cases, I am wrong.
5967244 ....Why is that you`re profile picture?
6070524 That my good sir reprosents the people being hurt in this world. Why i chose that is because I was heart felt when i saw it.
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I hope this was just a mistake
seeing as its a chapter off and blank, hope must of posted the wrong one
6079717 Actually I messed up and so now when I post a chapter, the real chapter that is being posted is the one before it.
6079802 Actually I messed up and so now when I post a chapter, the real chapter that is being posted is the one before it.
6079830 Actually I messed up and so now when I post a chapter, the real chapter that is being posted is the one before it.
6079830 The real chapter that is out is chapter 10. I have royally screwed up. But, truth be told I kinda like it. So enjoy! (Ill be sure to fix this next time.)
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6014352 Do I really need to point it out again?
6085906 point out what?
6085906 OHHHHH, its you, I didn't know you still kept up the hate thing but o well.
I don't know if I am reading a story... or running a marathon at full speed. Pretty sure its the marathon.
Also, the main character seems like a dick on a power trip. He already attacked three ponies after saying he would not. Yes, two of them held spears towards his neck... after he tried to just barge past the city gates, but that was not a 'in defense of himself' attack.