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I am just a simple guy, creating stories for the fun of it.


The Cutie Mark Crusaders embark on another journey into the Everfree. This time they actually find something... Or, rather, someone.

Note: This story takes place before the Crusaders got their cutie marks.
Also, this story was made for the Everfree Northwest scribblefest. I thought I would give a shot at it and see what happens. I Hope you all enjoy!

Chapters (1)
Comments ( 30 )

Very nice and well written story. Gotta do more of them.????

7007163 Are you asking if I will do more of them? And thanks mate, I'm really glad you enjoyed it!

7007174 Yeah, I hope that you'll do more one shots. And the question marks in my previous comments were my phone trying to do the "tumbs up" emoji (seems like you can only use the pony ones here).

7007219 If you look at the bottom of my main page most of the stories there are gonna be one shots. So yes, I will be making more.

Also, Pony emoji's are best emoji's! :pinkiehappy:


Good opening.

Capitalize the second halfs of their names; Sweetie Belle, Applebloom is one word.

like he'd been through nuclear fallout

how so? Shivering from radiation sickness, burns on his body, hair falling out?

(Reading on)

7019139 So how should I go about correcting this in your opinion?

Get out of hear

. here

7019181 Alright, thanks mate, I really appreciate it!

Overall; a good story!

7019188 Again, thank you! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

7019150 that depends. How do you mean he looks? Raggedy? Disheveled? Sickly? Perhaps you could say that "he had the look of a well worn Penny, that had seen many miles and it showed in the grit and dirt of many miles. Yet through it all still held its luster of value."

Just a thought.

7019200 Sounds good to me mate.

Video for Mockingbird is no longer available.

we like our privacy and don't have many opportunity's to communicate with other species.

Never use an apostrophe to pluralise.

7023053 The video works fine for me, it might be banned where you live.

Anyway, thanks mate, I really appreciate it.

Nice story. Glad I gave it a shot.

Just wanted to let you know I posted a review of this story — and 13 other entries in the Scribblefest competition — over at my blog.

Good luck in the competition! :twilightsmile:

7063233 I appreciate the review. I disagree with a few statements, but I appreciate you giving it a shot mate.

No worries. Not every story is going to work for everyone, and it's clearly found some fans here, so take my thoughts with a grain of salt. :twilightsmile: As I said, this does do some interesting things even if I bounced off of it.

7063559 Everyone's got their own preference.

A simple, and better than decent, story. In spite of it's length and lack of to-the-death fight scenes, it's easily worth the time I spent reading it. Good job.

7073495 Appreciated mate. This was just suppose to be a simple story that people could get some enjoyment out of, and it looks like you got some mate.

This was very well written! I enjoyed reading it.

7197996 I'm glad you did! Cheers mate!

7198376 You are quite welcome, my friend.

7023053 Hey, I know this is 2 years later, but does this link work?

Came here from the reading, and what a delightful fic this is. I love how much character Mockingbird has, and how the whole story has this inviting, comforting quality. Good stuff, and I need to read more of your fics.

Thank you so much for taking the time to read it, and I'm glad you enjoyed it. I can't say many of my other stories are of the same quality though.

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