So a Scottish teenager, of about 14 years old, is sent to the land of Equestria. Trapped in unwanted territory, will he learn to cope with Ponyville’s inhabitants and learn the magic of friendship? Go on epic adventures, aid the mane six on their battles and make some friends along the way? Or will he carve a darker path for himself, seek power and become the tyrant to overthrow their benevolent leader?
Also, this story is actually an RP with my anti-brony Scottish friend, so expect it to be random XD.
Any and all sorts of criticism is appreciated, and I’m not kidding, even if you are a hater feel free to hate! Who am I to take your liberty of speaking your mind?
Chapters (3)
You had my attention at 'Angry Scotsman.'
I jist hope ye gie him the accent tae gan alang wi' it.
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Hehe, Thanks for the fav, and that is not a bad idea, ill see what i can do
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I've written four HiE stories where the human has a Scottish accent — so if you do decide to add one to your story, then I'd be happy to help you out (if you need it).
Just bear in mind that not every reader likes accents, especially Scottish ones.
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Welp, thanks for offering. I'll let you know if I need it!
What.
well that just happened...
Title had me hoping for something funny, because Scottish is the best accent for angry shouting.
Instead I find a checklist of bad HiE cliches.
Twilight teleports in a human without any reasonable precautions, or thoughts to the morality of what she's doing? Check.
Human is a child trying too hard to be edgy? Fuckin' check.
Rainbow Dash is too violent and stupid to function in a civilized society, and attacks the human on sight? Check.
Human becomes the center of the universe because contrivances?
Tentative check.
5754600 Well, how bout that! someone who actually thinks I'm making this as something serious. Look, I dont blame ya, the idea has been done, and redone again, and then repeated so many godamtimes it can fill a black hole. I GET that, so allow me to clear things up, mmkay?
1. Twilight's lack of morale doing something that is both ludicrously dangerous and can completely fuck someone's life in numerous ways was just the excuse to start this bloody story, and I'm not sorry.
2. Why am I not sorry? Well thats because this is just my warm up, I"m trying to get used to write a story, and learn to do so requires experience, which is what this story is for.
3. Ok, I will admit, that rainbow dash thing is wrong, and I'm glad you pointed it out for me, it might help with future projects. However im not changing that scene.
4. Why is this child (technically a Teenager thank you very much) soo *edgy*? It's because this story is NOT something I pulled out of my rectum, NOR was an idea thats been eating at the back of my mind for weeks. This was me, asking my VERY anti-brony, scotish, friend the random question of "what would you do if you where stuck in equestria, you know, the place with the ponies you hate so much?" and he was like "I would kick the first pony I saw". I even have the entire roleplay we did on skype for reference. I'm like the dungeon master, putting situations in front of him, he is the protagonist that decides to do the weird, stupid, random shit. that RANDOM tag isn't there for fuckall reasons.
AND 5. About that description... and I'm gonna quote you "Human becomes the center of the universe because contrivances?" Thats a troll description to mislead the unsuspecting, and I'm afraid you fell right for my venus trap. He will be whatever he wishes to be, aslong as I let him, and he dosent fuck himself over, we are not done roleplaying juuust yet
On a side note, I'm trully sorry I made you think this was something worth your while, in fact I'm only posting this so that I am able to see the reactions people get with the random crap I throw at them, let me know if certain behaviours are wrong (thank you again for that), and to gain sugestions on how to better both my writting, my story and my shenannigans.
I do hope you have a fantastic day Iron Sky, sorry for wasting your time and eyes.
Okay, that's actually kinda funny.
If you could translate that into the fic, you might be on to something.
Characters need some depth and motivation before the audience can give a damn about them.
5757758 well, I would be more than happy to do so, if I knew what the fuck I was doing. Care to give me some advice and/or suggestions on how to go about it? if not then I'll try an research it myself and plan it into the story
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I would suggest going back to the beginning of the story, and adding a scene that shows a small slice of the guy's normal life. Establish that he's annoyed by the popularity of brightly colored cartoon horses. Establish that he's content where he is.
Then his reactions becomes perfectly understandable, to the audience.
5761289 Done, edited in the first chapter so people can get a little bit more about why he is who he is, and also, I'm not kidding, he has a fuckton of cats
Good god this is interesting. Please more soon?~
6092883 I just need to get off my lazy ass to do so. Autumn has my hands full...