"She was beautiful... To me, neither the sun nor moon could compare to her grace. But her beauty ran deeper than the skin. Her soul was akin to a diamond amongst pebbles and her presence was so gentle and kind. But life called her elsewhere, she came and went like the subtle breeze of a summer night. Slipping in and out of the lives of anypony lucky enough to have met her... where she ended up between then and when we met again, I cannot say. But I'd like to think she finally found what she was looking for."
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D'aw.
dunno, happened way too quickly to have any sort of impact on me. Like, hitting my feel's knee with a hammer, you got it to jerk a little but that's it.
maybe if you got a sledgehammer and used it to bash in the rest of my feel's proverbial body with it... like, a chapter for every instance, how she met her (starting with something like "I got the job because I could use the money" and ending it with "But I stayed only to see her smile at me every day")...
Like, this has potential, and could be made into a bigger work. Is just that... well, I don't want to say 'wasted' potential, but...
ugh, you asked for feedback, and I gave it. Sorry if I sound discouraging. The story was sweet, but I really like it when a sweet/bittersweet story leaves me smiling and crying my eyes out. I just smiled.
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I can see where you're coming from with it. But I didn't really want this to turn into a longer story, as it's kind of a straightforward point in time. The reader doesn't get all the details, because only the stallion knows all the details. Though I suppose the story could certainly go more in depth with it. I'll look into it when I have some more time.
I wrote this in like an hour or two late last night, and had nobody to proofread it for me at that moment, so it certainly appears to have some bugs to fix up. Thank you so much for the feedback!
This... this was very sad, and well written, but I have something to say,
Her hair was long, and hung in curls the color of roses. Her eyes sparkled like water at sunset. The soft pink hue of her coat
Pink mane, dark pink if it's rose colored. Pink coat, and blue eyes.
she simply smiled. Oh, how she smiled.
She had a special smile.
Conclusion: Pinkie Pie.
Hi there! First of all I want to say this is just beautiful and sad
This is really sad. This is really beautiful. I don't know what to say. This is an amazing story.
This has to be one of the saddest stories I've ever read, and I've read a lot.
I've given this story a thumbs up and a favorite. This is just to sad and beautiful not to
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Thank you for writing such a beautiful story!
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I'm so glad that you liked it so much, and it makes me happy to hear feedback like this. It makes me feel all warm and fuzzy when people enjoy the stories that I put a bit of myself into, so truly, thank you for enjoying it. 
Aw, thank you so much!
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Your welcome! And thank you for writing this. It truly is amazing. As long as you keep writing what you like, you can't go wrong :3
(Also this is unrelated to the story but I like your profile pic :3)
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I can send you a link to the original drawing if you wanted to see it better. The tiny jpg really does it no justice.
You're welcome as well. :) I enjoyed writing it. Oh, and thank you! My fiance drew my profile picture for me.. It's of my OC/Sona character, Peekaboo!
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Sure I'd love to see it!
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http://wild-mint.deviantart.com/art/Peekaboo-Commission-Bust-560931739
Here you go! Sorry for the late response, the past few days have been hectic for me!
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That looks amazing! I faved and even wanted the guy. (His art is awesome XD)
Also it's okay, :3