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This story is a sequel to Condemnation

Luna has had a hard time adjusting to life in Equestria since her return. And after talking with Cadence about the Nightmare Moon incident, Princess Luna is left with some unhappy feelings when she pays a visit to her sister. It's time they really talked about what happened 1000 years ago.

P.s I'm sorry I'm awful and too lazy to get this proofread or edited. :ajsleepy:

Prequels:

With Tears in Her Eyes

Condemnation

Sequel:

The Flower's Grove

First Published
11th Jan 2017
Last Modified
11th Jan 2017
#1 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

I saw your thread, and if I was not balls deep in my own story, I'd proof-read the fuck out of this for you. I read like 5 lines of the second chapter and it hooked me.

Once I get off work, I'll be giving this a read... or at least that's what I say. I'm horrible with promises.

#2 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

>>7860181

Thank you! I hope it keeps you hooked in the more you read, I'll be the first to admit it's really not in the best condition for reading at the moment, but even having someone read and offer up feedback on what they liked or didn't like helps out a lot! (It's also okay if you don't end up liking it when you get the chance to read it, that's just how it goes sometimes, haha.)

#3 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

>>7860198 I can guarantee you I'll like it. From what skimming I did it was very well written, and Luna and Celestia are my favorite characters, especially when they're in conflict like this.

#4 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

Nice job. Good rulers are rarely good people. But Alicorns are a necessary evil for Equestria. Ponies are both unable and incapable of ruling themselves.

#5 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

>>7860397

Thanks! :twilightsheepish: I'm glad you liked it, and that you appreciated that I didn't make the princesses the idol of perfection! This little story seems to very fairing relatively well so far for an unedited little story that was just sort of penned out in an evening.

#6 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

It's not bad, but I dislike the whole what we saw wasn't what really happened bit

#7 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

>>7860471

I can understand that, and that's exactly why I placed it under an alternate universe label. I know lots of people prefer canon only material, but I like having fun with the what-if's and possibilities of how things could have happened differently without the constraints of keeping everything PG for the show's sake.

Wow... :rainbowderp: Just purely amazing.

#9 · 10w, 6d ago · · · Penances ·

And thus the Tantabus was created. Luckily there's one more sequel, you got me hooked on these stories :twilightsheepish:

#10 · 10w, 4d ago · · · Penances ·

If this is a trash to you, I don't know what would be an ultra epic fic for you. It's pretty well written :twilightsmile:

The story is contemplating something that has been repeated many times already. Still, it connects the events and gives us insight on new things.  

I have an issue just with the part where Luna suddenly switches from "I" to "we".

#11 · 10w, 4d ago · · · Penances ·

>>7864430

Thank you! I'm happy to hear that you liked them! I'm not very confident in posting my work, especially without an editor. But there's some times where I just feel the need to write, and I'll pump something out in an evening, which is pretty much the case with most all of this series. I'm glad that despite lots of edits and grammar corrections I need to make that they seem to be received wells o far.

As for the "I's and We's" I sort of like to imagine that Luna often struggles to pull herself out of her old way of speaking, especially when she's upset or distracted. It wasn't written out very well, but it's my attempt at trying to throw it out there anyway.

Again, thanks so much for reading, I'm excited that many people seem to be enjoying them! :twilightsmile:

#12 · 10w, 4d ago · · · Penances ·

>>7865081 You are welcome. Trust yourself more and never stop writing as long as you enjoy it :twilightsmile:

Also, don't harass yourself so much in the descriptions because your stories miss editing. Better don't mention that.

#13 · 8w, 14h ago · · · Penances ·

Almost made me cry reading this again, full of amotion. You are very talented, again, thank you for the great story.

#14 · 8w, 10h ago · · · Penances ·

>>7911471

Thank you, I'm really glad you enjoyed it. I think this one is the most choppy and in need of edits of the four parts of the story, so it makes me really happy to hear that people seem to enjoy it overall. :twilightsmile:

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