I love My Little Pony and Littlest Pet Shop. My favorite ponies are Rarity and Rainbow Dash. I love to write fanfiction, but I need to learn to pace better.
Ponyville hosts its very own transgender pride festival, but Rarity still feels that the residents weren't as accepting as they claim to be. She goes to the festival as an ally and plans to tell her friends later, but her plans don't work out.
The sex tag is used because genitalia is mentioned. There are no sex scenes direct nor implied.
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I could imagine Pinkie as pan.
Lovely story, you could use a little work on exposition in the first chapter, though. It gets tedious to read through paragraphs of text.
5646527 Umm?!
5646704 Thanks for the story, it was really good!
Pinkie seems to have that pansexual vibe, and her color scheme is the same as that of the pansexual flag. I'm glad you as well as some people liked it. I expected it to be hated a lot more. It is out of my usual genre, and it's more educational than entertaining.
Interesting,
I like it, liked and faved.
This isn't too shabby; I suppose the reason why it has so many dislikes is due to it not really having much of what's inside the characters' heads or their feelings.
If you'd like a suggestion of things to improve upon, I would suggest description and pacing
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Description and pacing. I really suck at those. If there are great places online to learn about them, then I haven't found them. I found complicated stuff, but I don't learn reading complex things.
Good job.
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Heh, I see. I dunno, maybe try and find someone who writes really well and just read plenty if their work? If not that, you could look at a writer's school sort of group.
Just ideas.
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I have tried reading other works, but I don't seem to notice pacing. As for groups, I don't have any groups near me. I looked.
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Never mind, I guess.
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Oh, sorry. I live in a pretty rural area, so it's hard for me to find stuff. Do you know any reliable and free sites that could help? The ones I could find either didn't help with pacing at all or helped with too slow pacing.
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I think the only things I can think of right now are on this site, the groups Author Support and the School For New Writers
I like how PinkiePie comes out and say. "I'm pansexual!"
You should make a sequel for Scootaloo.
You should submit this to the transgender-bronies(http://www.fimfiction.net/group/200830/transgender-bronies) and LGBT(http://www.fimfiction.net/group/206553/lgbt) groups
Hm, I certainly like the idea, but the execution is a bit off. The term "transsexual" in itself is questionable (many trans people do not like the term due to the pornographic connotations, but this is a neither here-nor there kind of thing).
Besides that, the pacing is a bit funky, especially in the first chapter. Everything is quick and blunt, and reads more like a life lesson than a story (something which may be okay in fimfiction, but it's more like an episode than a fan story). Also the definition of pansexual is kind of... out dated.
I like the FtM Scootaloo and genderfluid Rainbow aspects (and of course trans mare Rarity). And pan Pinkie is a sure way to get my approval for sure! ^-^
I love this story so far! :D
I was expecting more actual story and less of a description on how to treat transpeople/ponies.
Whooa
just wowie
I understand what you were going for, but it feels very weird for characters to act ooc for the sake of exposition. I cannot imagine a world where Fluttershy would ask such an intrusive question, regardless of how uneducated she is on trans issues. And Pinkie should know better, she is consistently characterized as someone who values the sanctity of secrets!