After a month, when Caramel found Applejack and started to work on Sweet Apple Arces, he started to see, how Applejack was changing through his eyes. She wasn't the same mare he expected and he started to feel, if he really doesn't belong to her....
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Just check spelling, grammar, etc, and then this is perfect. I like the story.
Good story. Just proof read. That is all!
I give you a thumbs up because this wasn't an usual shipping (but I usually don't like love stories). And as everyone else says, find a proof reader.
I saw a small error, but other than that, really great story.
He didn't ate anything
ate should be eat.
Don't worry, everyone makes mistakes.
Hello! Have a review. Caramel/Applejack (CaraJack?) is a ship I have a feeling used to be more popular than it is now. I just wish he'd actually talked to AJ about it rather than spending the entire time in tears. I also wonder whether the author is a native English speaker, since phrases like "The newest model were having an auto-hammering" are nonsensical.