• Member Since 31st Oct, 2011
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PatRoison


I'm an aspiring writer looking to cut my teeth with short stories, and what better way than to write about ponies?

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Caramel has had feelings for Applejack ever since their chance encounter in Manehattan. By bizarre happenstance, Caramel arrives at Sweet Apple Acres. Years later, his feelings are still strong, and it isn't until after some encouragement from Mac that spurs Caramel to make his move.

A certain pony also has Big Macintosh's heart. This one is the hyperactive and random Pinkie Pie.

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 45 )

You know Caramel is Apple Jack's and Big Mac's Cousin.

Caramel x Applejack and Pinkintosh shipping. I've noticed that when it comes to Caramel half the community make him a member of the Apple family and half don't. I can see the reasons for not making him an Apple. He doesn't have an accent, his mark isn't apple related and Caramel can mean other things not just Apples, plus during the Apple family reunion in the first episode Applejack said Caramel and pointed at a mare, so yeah like I said the name Caramel is very vague. - Sorry for getting to analytical.

While I like CaramelJack and I really like the story, Mel comes off a little stalkerish.

As for Pinkie x Mac, it's one of my favorites in terms of rare shipping pairs. I liked this fic since I saw it on Deviant Art.

i was in a horrible mood earlier but reading put a huge grin on my face :pinkiehappy: now i can go to bed happy, thank you!
btw :eeyup: :heart: :pinkiesmile: is a great idea

Read before...and read again. You never cease to amaze me Pat! :pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy::pinkiehappy: (They don't have flutterhappyplz...I'm disappoint) :scootangel:

I found the pacing to be a bit rushed in chapter 1, but the story isn't over yet, so we'll see.

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I looked up Caramel and Caramel Apple on the MLP Wiki.

Oh wow, my mistake apparently there are 2 different ponies that go by the name Caramel, didn't help they are both earth ponies.
The Carmel in the story I confused with Caramel Apple fromEpisode 1 Season 1
It also did help that a few fics here on this website took the Station Caramel as an Apple in the story.

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Haha, its ok. Frankly, I wasn't 100% sure if Caramel wasn't an Apple so I had to double check on MLP Wikia too.

Can't really blame you if I had a lingering doubt.

So far, I'm liking this story alot. Gonna say that I haven't seen a Pinkie X Macintosh fic yet and new ideas like that are always welcome, in my book. Looking forward to the rest of the story! :twilightsheepish:

Good to see these ones again, I should likely get around to adding more of mine also, well the less dark ones anyway.

Can't wait to read the rest of it. :) :rainbowkiss:

ooooooo here we go Big MacXPinkie Pie:eeyup::pinkiesmile::trollestia::rainbowkiss::raritystarry:

I don't know why no one has commented on this. This was a cute little story and although there were a few little mistakes, I very much enjoyed reading it. :ajsmug:

I have to admit that I'm a FlutterMac shipper but I like this. the story was as sweet as the first chapter. I eagerly await more from you.

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I did not help that sevral of the fan fics I read made the same mistake of the Male Caramel as a member of the Apple Familly as well.

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In this story, I'm going with Caramel not being a relation. Seems to be unclear on the show.

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Thank you very much. Thinking back on it, yeah, Caramel could come off as a little creepy. Would've been a really different story if Applejack reacted differently.

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Thank you very much. It's awesome that I was able to brighten you mood. :yay:

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Thankee! It's a shame that the best we can work with is :yay:, but we make do.

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Thank you very much. I can't really place it, but I thought the hyper energy of Pinkie fit well with the stoic stability of Mac.

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Thank you very much. Dancing sniper FTW!!!

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I think your one shot stories will be awesome additions. Especially the Hearth Warming one.

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Yup, an unlikely pair that makes sense, to me at least.

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Thank you very much. I appreciate it. :pinkiehappy:

550955 Well, whatever the case, I like it. Looking forward to seeing how it goes.

550970For some reason Big Mac could be with anypony:eeyup:

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Nice way to extend the comments in your story I see, I combined them all into a single one, should probably single them out like you, but I obsess over being neat with some things :unsuresweetie:

DAAAAAAAWWW, that one is so cute. Also I like the the fact you brought in an almost unknown background pony. Keep this up.

Nothing more to say but: Keep this up, it's great.

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Thank you very much. I look forward to continuing this series. :pinkiehappy:

MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :flutterrage:
Btw, I really couldn't see how Mac and Pinkie would work out, but I like the way you wrote it; it actually seems like they could really fit together now
:eeyup: + :pinkiehappy: = :heart:

:eeyup::heart::pinkiehappy:=:rainbowkiss:
YesyesyesyesyesyesYES!!!!!!!!!!

Cute, decently written, but wasn't Caramel AJ's cousin? :applejackunsure:
Although the way you presented this makes it seem like they're unrelated, an OC would've been maybe a better choice. Worthy a thumb and fav, though.
Though the writing is a bit dry for my taste, it did remind me of Ernest Hemingway. Straight and to the point, no bothering using extra adjectives.

Admittedly, this was pretty good. A marketable improvement from the first chapter. Still very dry though, in my opinion. And, though the characters were mostly in character, I couldn't help but feel that's not what they would say in exactly that situation. The pacing also needs work, it slows down and speeds up almost randomly. Like I said, still worth a thumb and fav, but take this as a challenge to make this one of the best Pinkintosh ships out there.
ah swear I'm not just reading this because I'm on a Pinkintosh binge

While it feels slightly rushed, this is quite enjoyable. Any chance of it being updated in the future? :twilightsmile:

Do I look like a pony with a plan?
The Dark Knight reference? :trixieshiftright:

I really liked it. Such a heartwarming story. I look forward to reading more. :eeyup:

Two wonderful and well told stories in one package. Carmel keeping the photo was precious. Pinkie throwing the party just for Mac was in character and did a wonderful job of setting up the later events.

I found this story thanks to the group MLPFanFicWorld: Fim Fiction Division. I always like to tell authors how I found their stories. I'm certainly glad I found this one, it was great.

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No, that would be breburn. Aj and Caramel arent related.

Does anyone else think that this song fits a lot of Applejack Romance fics, or is it just me that thinks that?

5336027 Yeah that is really fitting with Applejack. Thank you for sharing the video with me.

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