First entry for Kilala´s contest:https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/438340/contest
Based on this fun fact:
"When Claire was younger, she was fed up with how everypony would talk about how dangerous and scary dragons were. She was shocked when even Rarity said dragons (other than Spike) were dangerous. She refused to believe they were bad and when on a vacation to Ponyville with Rarity and Illusion, she went into Everfree to find one. Illusion followed to make sure she'd be safe. The dragon ended up being quite dangerous as predicted and Rarity, along with Spike, who came later, had to save the two children."
Let´s see how I can pull it out.Hope you like it, senpai!
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5598790 good one
I think you meant to say "and there's just so much patience that I have", there were a few other errors, but this was the first one I noticed.
There are so many errors it actually hurt for me to read it, please remember the rules of typing things up. I'll leave you with two reminders, spaces always come after periods and you should always pay attention to the context of the words.
5691024 thanks, I´ll try
5697498 that's all any of us can ask of you. I really do want to read the story, but it kind of went passed my 'error threshold' before I got all that far. Feel free to use the term, I don't hold rights on it.
I just can't let this slide, I think you meant to say "They walked for almost an hour, but finally found a huge cave and got inside of it, where they found hundreds upon hundreds of gold and gemstones. Crystal Clarity did not think twice before she started eating." You should always pay attention to punctuation, after each punctuation if you are moving on in the sentence always put a space between the punctuation and the next word. Also your wording here didn't make a whole lot of sense.
I liked the concept of the story, and the story itself, but the punctuation errors pushed my "error threshold to its limits"
5714094 ok, thanks