Fluttershy is shopping with Rarity in the Canterlot Market when she sees what she calls "the most beautiful mare in Canterlot" walking by and said mare offers her a smile before continuing on her way. When Rarity hears Fluttershy's description of her, she decides to ask her friend Fancypants for help in finding and meeting the mare.
Fleur de Lis is heading to her agent's office, after being called in at the last minute to review some contracts, when she sees a cute yellow Pegasus looking at her in the market. Not wanting to be late, and not sure how Canterlot would respond to her dating another mare, she offers the mare a smile and continues on her way. The next day her brother comes by, and after talking with her about a business proposition, tells her that there's a mare, a friend of Rarity's, that saw her the day before and now wants to meet her.
A Flutter de Lis story, told from both Fluttershy's and Fleur's perspective, inspired by a picture and a few stories I've read using a similar concept.
Been a while since a story of mine failed moderation. In this case, though I just screwed up a closing italics tag ( should have put but instead put [.I]. I don't blame the mods
Interesting ship and story concept. I enjoyed what you wrote and it was well-written in my opinion, so I'll definitely follow this story to see where it goes from here. Nice work!
Very nice work! I do love a bit of FleurShy.... Love it... A moustache for you!
I'll stick with this under the condition you never use the term lesbimare ever again. It's just not necessary. A few formatting issues. Missing commas, abrupt scene breaks (try a horizontal rule), basic stuff like that. Potential, for sure.
That being said... is this (Fluttershy x Fleur dis Lee) a thing? If not, can it be a thing?
I apologize if I spelt her name wrong. It took me forever to get my voice-text to recognize Fluttershy, and I don't think it knows too much French.
5430944 Sadly you're going to be disappointed on the lesbimare thing. I hate the term fillyfooler, and in context it doesn't really work (being an insult), and I seriously doubt canon is ever going to provide a name for gay mares, so I use the one that, to my mind, works best when I need to talk about homosexuality in the MLP verse,
Moving on, Fluttershy x Fleur de Lis is a thing, yes, though a very rare thing ( I think I'm the only one who has ever completed a story about those two getting together), It actually has a group that should be showing up on next group promotion site post, if all goes well.
Well, not bad so far from what I've read. I feel as though it's a bit fast paced and the two different perspectives right now would've been better off if it was fleshed out with more thoughts to go with the respective pony to make it feel less repetitive and more unique to each side. Otherwise, it has potential right now and I must say, I don't think I've ever seen the "Fleur is Fancy's sister" yet.
5452899 I admit, I had the same thoughts, but I couldn't figure out how to fix those issues, for some reason, though I think the stress of my car burning down then car shopping did make figuring out how to improve this much more difficult.
I just read over the description and my goddess this just sounds so hot. Its rare to find a good Fleurshy
Ha. Classic Rarity at the end there. Though I do agree that the two perspective chapters were quite fast-paced and seemed repetitive due to the lack of first person perspective of each, this one seemed to have much better pace and flow. I look forward to reading this story. And dont think I didn't see the foreshadowing of Rarity x Fancy.
In addition, I wish you good health and hope for the best for you.
Hoping to rrad more of this, maybe Fluttershy could show her animal expertise at the shelter thing. Like the cat that Fleur would adopt us buillied by other animals because it either looks different or a missing limb or simply a very frightened kitten that had been recently been rescued from a bad home or the streets. I dont know and Flutters does her animal magic being all natural to the point she forgets Fleur is there with her.
Maybe a stuck up Stallion could try and hit on Fleur and Fluttershy eventually gets assertive and gets in front of Fleur when other ponies start to comment on Fleurs sexuality. Flutters gets all puffy and open hers wings trying to be as imtimidating as she can be before she agrues with the ponies turning into a very brave Pony because she turns into a brave pony when her friends need her and oh boy If someone she likes *wink wink* I darely only look between my fingers! oxo'