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TwilightTK
Hi, um, im a brony, obviously... I've wrote some stuff before, but I'm new to the fanfiction world. Creative criticism is appreciated.
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Why must people do these things?
CMC Clop?google.ca/imgres?um=1&hl=en&client=firefox-a&sa=N&rls=org.mozilla:en-US:official&biw=1366&bih=643&tbm=isch&tbnid=NuQRmLXyJAm3hM:&imgrefurl=http://www.platformnation.com/2011/09/05/star-wars-blu-ray-changes-what-do-you-think/&docid=LfSvM2oMmPhxMM&imgurl=http://www.platformnation.com/wp-content/uploads/2011/09/darth-vader-noooo.jpg&w=500&h=343&ei=5SucT4aSAumiiQKGpLhT&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=499&vpy=182&dur=168&hovh=186&hovw=271&tx=125&ty=100&sig=117120034275433492872&page=1&tbnh=119&tbnw=156&start=0&ndsp=21&ved=1t:429,r:2,s:0,i:84 ....?
This is loli clop done wrong... just... completely done wrong...
The fic definitely looks rushed. It's just like "Oh, we did one action, now let's move on with the next one without a lengthy explanation of our surprise!" sort of deal.
While I won't judge about pedophilia fics (Everyone has their fetishes and such), I know for a fact this isn't a very good one... I've seen better.
Why...why?
Pedophilia and bestiality, mixed together in a delightful concoction that is sure to make you pine for the sweet release of death.
I don't like you.
my gawd
I find this funny
Not one for the pedo fics but google.com/imgres?hl=en&gbv=2&biw=1440&bih=710&tbm=isch&tbnid=duIlmqHgBQP2mM:&imgrefurl=http://www.ragefaces.com/i/not_bad&docid=aq3L0qycZPZoFM&imgurl=http://www.ragefaces.com/i/not_bad/img&w=640&h=476&ei=vHycT6v8JM2O0QG5vJDyDg&zoom=1&iact=hc&vpx=347&vpy=118&dur=1762&hovh=194&hovw=260&tx=154&ty=118&sig=110757492769929394379&page=1&tbnh=146&tbnw=196&start=0&ndsp=19&ved=1t:429,r:1,s:0,i:100 if you cant see it look up NOT BAD
Okay... Im not the only person that has made a cmc clop. And im also not a pedo. Its not that, cuz its not real. If you have a prob with it, check out my blog, and reply with what you want. I did rush it a lil bit because i didnt get much sleep last night. Plus, saying i should die, well, doesnt that right there deserve some karma? The reason i had both the CMC tag with AB, SB, and S was because, well, who seriously cares? It doesnt change the story at all. And whats the difference between a fictional pony having sex and a fictional filly having sex? Its fiction. Its not intentional, they dony exist. Im just another clop writer. And how is it MY fault? You people saw it, clicked on it, read it, knew it was clop, AND continued to read it? And you think im an asshole, a weirdo. Thanks for the fucking critism, have a good day.
well that was the widest boner i ever got
really guys...if you don't like CMC clop or whatever you wanna call it, DON'T FUCKING READ IT! Personally it's just too weird for me so I'm not going to read it but I'm not going to sit here and say how bad it is...
>>Dark0592 THANK YOU! Someone actually makes sense!
514399
I was never against filly clop to begin with... I was pretty neutral about it, actually. The only problem I have is that it was rushed and just seems... well, rushed. You didn't take the proper time to flesh out the details, and that can make or break a story, despite the type of fetish you were aiming for. Time, care, and attention can mean a world of difference.
Also, calm down. Insulting the critics (If there was even any critique going on anyway) isn't the wisest idea... some of us are trying to help.
CMC clop and other characters would only be acceptable and normalized as a good story if it were done right. (Don't think too hard about what I just said, even I don't.)
The story itself for CMC clop is kind of cliche if you ask me. It's the CMC doing truth or dare during a sleep-over or something, and the dare that either one of them are given leads up to sexual activities that they wouldn't usually get up to.
The pacing for the story isn't really that good, if you slowed down the story and atleast added a little bit of development for the fillies to actually slow down and experiment before they plunge into booty sex then you can get the reader hooked by a secret "crush" or they are all just sexually curious of their own bodies or something like that. Details and information leading and creating their choices in the story would have to be told and made so that we know why they are doing this.
Some clop-fics are for the smut and they just go straight into the sex, but what makes certain clop-fics interesting is the development that leads up to the sexual activities, why are they doing it? Are they going to react in a plausible way? If they are found out, how and what the characters going to react and do? There is certainly a lot of things to be thought out in a clop-fic. (But hey, I've never written a clop-fic and I possibly wouldn't. But when I read a clop-fic I see some development to the characters and their choices for the booty sex. it's the usual stuff I see in one. Don't know about anyone else.)
I wish this was written better...
I.. ehh... ugh...
What in the name of all that is Celestia is WRONG WITH YOU!?
514399 This is horrible...... it lacked any real sex...... Least im not pretending i didn't know what i was reading so i could feel better about it afterwords though
you know what? im just going to go out on a limb here. i fucking loved it.
DEAL WITH IT! 
..hehe she smelled like fresh plastic..
no me gusta
Ok, first attempt! GO...
wait what? That was suppose to be clop? It was a make out session with confusing wetness and vague pussy licking! The plot was a typical clop plot but you fail to deliver!
That aside, now I kinda wish I followed my original "Whoa, Foali fic, instant down vote" reaction. would have saved time.
>>Ravenmoon05, I'm guessing thats a 'What is this, ugh, hmm, and like' cycle?
Personally, I don't really know what to say.
It's a good fic and all (I'm not saying I'm into cmc clop or clop in general) but like other people have said, it needs some work. But good job!
Needs to be about 20% more everything.
And there are a million things on fimfiction WORSE than CMC clop, so don't even listen to that stuff
i1.kym-cdn.com/photos/images/newsfeed/000/264/076/745.gif not my taste