Spitfire and Soarin were just accepted into the Wonderbolts, but must practice and train before they can start any shows. This means the two newbies will have to spend a lot of time together and get to know each other.
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I felt the ending was rushed and Spitfire was a bit out of character, though I thoroughly enjoyed the story. Nice work.
Thanks! I was getting tired at the end and about to go to bed and just wanted to get it finished. xD
Great story, I say it deserves a like. I only saw a few things so here they are.
Feels not fells
Um shouldn't be capitalized and that seems to be to many commas.
Pegasus shouldn't be capitalized.
Breaking not braking
Try
yet I didn't want to.
Also try to indent, I know it's some simple thing that you may not care about, but look at any published book. It has them indented. Just something to think about. Anyways, if you want any help in future stories just tell me.
Till the next one
-R
Is there going to be a sequel to this?
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I'll agree with you, except the Pegasus part. Really, it's just a matter of style.