Silent Love
It was a quiet, peaceful day in Ponyville. The skies were clear, the lakes were glistening, and the birds were singing, this was Fluttershy’s favourite type of day. What a beautiful day, she thought as she started out the window of her cottage.
“Are you sure you don’t want to come for a walk, Angel?” She asked, turning to her pet, who was munching on a carrot on the couch. “A day like this should be shared with somepony, and the girls said they’d be busy today. Can you please come?” Fluttershy asked one last time.
Angel stopped eating for a moment, shook his head rapidly from side to side, and cheerfully continued eating.
“Very well,” Fluttershy sighed. “I’ll be back later, try to behave while I’m gone,” with that she trotted out the front door and closed it behind her. She took a moment to take her new setting in. The smells, the sights, the sounds, all felt perfect for her. It was definitely going to be a peaceful, calm, and ordinary day with no disruptions.
“Hey, Fluttershy!” A high pitched voice called out from beyond the bridge.
Well I guess ordinary does contradict no disruptions… for me at least, Fluttershy thought, with a small giggle.
“Hello, Pinkie” Fluttershy called back upon seeing the familiar pink mare bouncing up to her. “I thought you were busy today?”
“Oh I am, Fluttershy, I just came to ask a favour,” Pinkie explained.
“Ok Pinkie, I’m always willing to help. What do you need?” Fluttershy asked.
“Well my sister Maud… you remember Maud right?”
“Oh yes, very hard to forget… her,” Fluttershy said, blushing at the thought of the gray mare.
“Um… ok,” Pinkie said, a little confused by Fluttershy’s blush, “anyway, I need you to pick her up from the train station in like fifteen minutes, and entertain her for a few hours.”
Fluttershy’s smile widened and her blush deepened, “I think I could manage that, Pinkie, but if you don’t mind me asking, why won’t you be able to get her? Not that I mind, I was just, um wondering.”
“Like I said I’m really busy today, I only have a short break to ask you if you could tend to Maud while I’m busy,” Pinkie explained. “Which reminds me… I really gotta get back, so you’ll be ok spending the day with Maud?”
“Yes!… um, that is to say, I think I can handle it,” Fluttershy giggled, trying not to sound too enthusiastic about spending the day alone with her friend’s sister.
“Okie dokie lokie, guess I’ll catch up with you later then,” Pinkie began bouncing back down the path away from Fluttershy’s cottage. “See ya later, Fluttershy!”
“Goodbye, Pinkie,” Fluttershy called back. She began making her way to the train station, and used the time to think. Oh my… a day alone with Maud, I could take her on a walk through the forest. I’m sure she will appreciate the serenity of a place like that on a day like this, it could be very romantic. Fluttershy let out a small, excited eep as other thoughts started to cross her mind.
Now now, Fluttershy, we can’t get ahead of ourselves, this is Pinkie’s sister we’re thinking about here. We don’t even know if she feels about you the same way. Just put those thoughts aside… don’t think about her soft, gray fur, her beautiful, violet mane, and those turquoise eyes I could stare into forever… oh my… this is going to be harder than I thought.
The train came to a screeching halt at Ponyville station, giving Fluttershy a small scare as she was still deep in thought.
Oh my gosh, she’s here! Ok, deep breaths, Fluttershy, you can do this.
The doors to the train slide open, various ponies started to exit and scatter throughout the station platform.
I can’t do this! Got to find somepony else now, apologize to Pinkie later.
Fluttershy began to quickly trot away from the train, but stopped when a voice called out to her. “Hey, Fluttershy,” the voice said in familiar monotone manner, which for some reason even unknown to her, Fluttershy found pleasant. Perhaps it was the calm feeling behind the voice which seemed to follow the sound into Fluttershy’s ears; this feeling even managed to calm Fluttershy enough to face the mare of her affection. There she stood, the mare who captured Fluttershy’s heart after one brief meeting, and had been in her dreams since.
Fluttershy realized she hadn’t said anything yet and had instead been staring, mouth agate. Fluttershy broke from her daze and noticed Maud blushing slightly, even though she had her usual deadpan expression.
Is she… blushing? M-must have had some spicy food on the train or something… yeah… that’s it.
“H-Hi, Maud,” Fluttershy stammered as she finally managed to say something.
“So where’s Pinkie, and your other friends?” Maud asked.
“Oh um, they were all busy today, so Pinkie asked me to tend to you for the day,” Fluttershy explained “… if you don’t mind, that is.”
“Fine by me,” Maud said, almost cracking a smile. “What did you want to do?”
“Oh well, I was about to go for a walk through White Tail Woods, would you like to join me?”
“Sounds good to me, I often enjoy going for nature walks, and it could also be good for Boulder. He doesn’t like riding trains and can sometimes get a little skittish. A walk should calm him down.” Maud explained, pulling her pet rock from her pocket and placing it on her back.
“I’m glad to be able to help Boulder relax. I’m also quite glad that you came today, with my friends all busy and usually uninterested in such things, it’s nice to have somepony here to enjoy a nice, quiet walk with on this lovely day.” Fluttershy said as she began to trot away from the station and towards the nearby woodland.
“Agreed,” Maud said as she trotted up to Fluttershy’s side. “It’s always been difficult to find somepony who also appreciates the beauty and serenity of nature as I do, even when I was a filly.”
“Yes, I can imagine Pinkie wouldn’t be the best source for a relaxing time.”
“I love my sister, but sometimes she can be a little…”
“Loud?” Fluttershy asked, finishing her sentence.
“Exactly,” Maud smiled, a small giggle escaping her lip.
“You know…” Fluttershy began, as she turned to Maud, “you should really smile more, you have such a beautiful smile,” She finished with a blush.
“I normally don’t smile unless I have a particularly good reason,” Maud turned her head to Fluttershy, meeting her gaze; “I guess I just have a good reason to now.”
Fluttershy and Maud began to slow down almost to a complete stop as they stared into each other’s eyes. The two were so distracted; they hadn’t even realized they were already in White Tail Woods.
“So, um… what’s the reason?” Fluttershy asked in a tone so hushed it could almost be a whisper.
“I’m not sure,” Maud answered in a tone similar to Fluttershy’s, “I just a good feeling about…”
“About what?” Fluttershy asked as she stepped closer to Maud, their sides just barely touching.
“A-about… I… never mind,” Maud shied away and turned her gaze forward.
Fluttershy thought it best not to pry, she’d been in a similar situation to Maud, and knew she didn’t appreciate it when others pried her. Fluttershy merely sighed and turned her gaze forward.
Let’s just find something else to talk about, shouldn’t be too difficult. Good thing I borrowed that book on rocks from Twilight.
The two ponies slowly trotted through the forest, conversing on anything that came to mind, everything from the sights around them, to their friends, to, of course, rocks. A conversation Fluttershy was more than pleased to have, now that she actually knew more on the subject. While enjoying her conversation with Maud, Fluttershy was slightly put off, as she could tell something was on Maud’s mind.
I know I thought it best not to pry, but something is definitely bothering her. No matter how I feel about her or how she feels about me, Maud is still a friend, and I should always help a friend in need.
“Maud, you know if something’s on your mind, you can tell me.” Fluttershy said, glancing at Maud in the corner of her eye.
“It’s nothing Fluttershy, really,” Maud assured her. Fluttershy came to a sudden stop; Maud took a few more steps before realizing Fluttershy was no longer at her side. Maud turned around and saw Fluttershy staring at her with concern, “It’s nothing,” Maud repeated.
“You’re as bad a liar as Applejack,” Fluttershy giggled, “come on, Maud, tell me… please.”
“Fluttershy, I… I think…” Maud stammered, trying to find the right words. “I think that I like…”
Fluttershy’s heartbeat quicken, this almost sounds like… it couldn’t be… could it?
“Fluttershy… I think I like you, not like a friend but… something more.”
Fluttershy gasped, oh my gosh, did she just say…
“Now I know that you probably don’t feel the same way, you deserve somepony pretty and smart and-” Maud was cut off by Fluttershy gently placing a hoof over Maud’s mouth.
“Maud…” Fluttershy began, in a gentle whisper, “… you are very pretty, and smart, and well…” She leaned forward and planted a small kiss on Maud’s cheek, “… I like you too.”
Maud blushed, this time with a smile, and she raised a hoof to her cheek, still feeling Fluttershy’s gentle lips still against her.
A blush and a smile at the same time. She really must have liked it, Fluttershy joked to herself.
“Um… I’m sure you’re going to want to spend some time with Pinkie this afternoon, but if you’re free tonight… would you like to come and have dinner at my place?” Fluttershy asked.
“You mean like… a date?” Fluttershy gave a small nod in response, “seven ok?”
“That sounds perfect… would you like to continue our walk for a bit?”
“Definitely,” Maud said, stepping to Fluttershy’s side. Fluttershy responded by draping her wing over Maud’s back. The two enjoyed the rest of their time together in a comfortable silence, each pony thinking about what the future might hold for the pair, a romantic dinner, many more after that, perhaps much more along the way. For now they were happy to wait for all that, perfectly content in the presence of the pony beside them. Their soulmate.
The Daisy Chain has started 
Please tell me what ya think, good and bad.
Now on to the prompt. Next writer will be Crowscrowcrow, beyond that is tbd (if you are one of the writers for the group, tell me your availability so we can get this moving as smoothly as possible). So Crows as this functions as a chain who already know one of the ponies you'll ship, but now I must decide the other.
The next ship is: Maud Pie x Applejack, have fun 
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Needs some minor editing, but really enjoyable.
Now how do I find the next one?
Fluttershy has excellent pattern recognition.
The idea that Fluttershy taught herself about rocks for the sake of being able to talk to Maud about her interests is just so adorable.
Maud Pie x Applejack, coming up as soon as I figure out how.
I don't usually say this for stories, but this was... fun!
Don't ask me how, but it was just fun! It's a wonderful chapter! Also, Crowscrowcrow... Maud X Applejack huh? Wow...
You're just lucky they didn't pick Maud X Rainbow Dash or Maud X (Shudder) Pinkie Pie...
4593887 the next one will be posted on Crowscrowcrow's account, I will be putting up a link here for the next one, probably all future chapters will have a previous and next link so it's easy to follow
4593942 heh heh, yeah she does
That's how I'd hope it'd come off as
Enjoy Maudjack
It was almost Mauddash for a second, but this will be interesting to see 
4593995 Thanks, it was fun to write, took a while but still fun
You have no idea how close it was to Mauddash
I couldn't decide between the two because both seemed like they'd be funny to see, but in the end I settled on Maudjack 
4595727
I felt it came across well, it was sweet.
Heh, I certainly am.
. It took me 11.200 words to describe just a single short evening. 
The hard part is the word limit, because let's be honest, I couldn't write something short to save my life
I'm going to try to finish it tonight.
4595814 Thanks mate
You do like to write things long
Tonight huh? Damn you work fast. Well just give me a sec to try and sort out the next writer, it was going to be UnlicensedBrony, but I haven't got ahold of him yet, so we may need to go on to the next writer.
4595853
Well no great rush, I can hold off on posting for a while anyway.
Well, that went well, I think.
I hope when my turn comes I get something really weird.
4596503 Thanks mate
and thanks for favouriting 
would you like to go 3rd? Crows has already finished his story (he works damn fast
) UB was originally 3rd but I haven't heard back from him on the subject, so if you're ready, you can go third, UB will go later, I'll tell Crows that you're third and that he should publish his story when ready.
4596612
Is there no one else who joined the prompt?
4596803 there's also SonicMlpGamerandArtist, I put everyone in the order they joined, so it originally went Me, Crows, UB, You, then him, If someone's unable to write at the time then they can just inform me and I'll make the necessary arrangement to move on.
So if I don't hear back from UB, you'll be next, If you're busy then SMGA will go. So will you be able to if needed?
4596847
I suppose.
4596921 alright, guess I'll wait maybe a couple more hours, if I don't hear anything from UB I'll send a message to you and the others informing them on the change in order. I'll get back to ya later
Hmhm, cute
This will be fun, I'm sure. I'm kind of hoping I get something really strange when it comes to my turn, though I'll probably regret that later 
This seemed maybe a bit rushed near the beginning, but slowed down well enough near the end. I do wish it was a bit longer. That being said, it's very cute and fluffy, and it leaves you with the warm and fuzzies.
4600363 Indeed pacing was my biggest concern, but as long as it leaves you warm and fuzzy, I consider it a success
4600387 Pacing comes with practice, my friend. Lol. And once you think you have it down, something happens to throw you off. Like me with Let the Sun Shine. I have never received so many complaints about pacing.
4600387 P.S.: Maud has best pony eyes. Hands down.
4600395 guess it's a good thing I have like 10+ story ideas, lots of practice there
4600400 She does have very nice eyes, but I love AJ's
(though that's probably the part of me that loves AJ being biased 
)
4600493 And the award for cutest reaction to creepy goes to...
Screw you all, it's Lene!
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So when is it going to be my turn
4600551 don't you look at me like that lene!
4600757 undetermined at this point, i'm kind of working it as first to join first to write, the quicker people write the quicker it'll be your turn, if someone's unavailable we'll come back to them later but no one is unavailable at the moment.
4600887 Lol. Do you know of the DeviantArt comic she's from?
4600906 mka
4600943 Can't say that I do, I really should get on DeviantArt more often
4601757 Lol. I'll send you a link when I get to a computer.
4600400
Gotta agree with you on that.
I haven't sen a pony with eyes like Maud's before. One of the reason's she's best Season 4 pony.
4717048 Maud is definitely best season 4 pony, but I still like AJ's eyes
4602238 Hey Bassie just realized, you never sent me a link for that art work on the 'lene' character
I haven't read this yet, but I think you'd do a good flutter dash ship! Or a rainbow pie ship! Or rarishy! Or twi dash! Or apple twi?! What about lyrabon? Fluttercord? Celestia cord? Pinkie cord?! Raritwi? What about apple spike? (Applebloom x spike)?
4717658 yes. Maud and flutterbat are best season 4 ponies
4828046 They certainly are
4828041
I might do some of those ships (if they're requested a lot), for now I'm writing 6 Shades, plus there's that spin off we discussed on the other page, and since I created Daisy Chain I kind of act as an administrator for it (speaking of, I should probably talk to the writer whose turn it is).
Let me know what you think of this story when you're done
I liked the story, I didn't love it like some but you did a good job all things considered
. Maud is my favorite pony so it's only natural I'd have criticisms with how her character is portrayed in this. Granted, Maud's personality in my opinion isn't as suited to shipping as many of the other ponies. She's blunt, literal, has an interest in rocks bordering on obsession if not beyond that, doesn't care what other ponies think about her actions, and doesn't show her emotions the same ways other ponies do. In many ways she resembles a rock herself, from coloration to personality. 
. I hope this helps with future Maud ships if they come up. 
Rocks are blunt, strong, direct, simple, and subject to gradual change over time. If rocks are described in an anthropomorphic sense they may be called patient, calm, dense, intimidating, occasionally reckless (like a rock slide or avalanche), and stubborn to list a few. These are also all things I can see in Maud. If you stick with the idea that Maud started liking Fluttershy romantically the last time they saw each other it would make more sense for her to question what these feelings are at length and likely even to Fluttershy's face. Most people are confused when they first have anything remotely resembling romantic feelings let alone a pony who's lived on a rock farm all her life and at best learned about love from her parents.
Again, regardless of my criticism, you did a fine job with what you had to work with and even I have trouble figuring out how to deal with Maud ships; though I do think the longer, the better with her. Even with my thorough analysis of her character there's always possibility for error as well so even I could be wrong about all of this
On a completely separate note, I wish Maud had an emoticon
6360600 Thanks for the compliment, and I understand the criticism. Maud is certainly the type of character that would benefit for a longer story, but for a short fic I wrote as quickly as I could, I think it turned out ok
I think if we didn't already have a Applejack deadpan (
) a maud emoticon could work well in it's stead.
6360973 Thank you for taking my criticism to heart. There're a lot of people online who might've not even bothered to read my comment due to its length or my own rambling.
6361127 Anytime someone takes the time to write a comment I take the time to read it
I may not always reply for one reason or another, but I'll always read it 
Okay.
I didn't like how Maud's character was portrayed in this story. It was also a bit rushed, so that played a role... She just seemed to have to MUCH emotion, if you know what I mean. I'm going to leave a neutral, no thumbs up or down.