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AlexTFish


Christian steampunk optimist gamer brony...

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Mayor Mare commissions Rarity, Fluttershy and Pinkie Pie to drive away a roc that's nesting near Ponyville. Will they be able to persuade it to leave? Or will the threat of bad puns become too great?

Came sixth place in the FimFiction Feghoot Festival!
Thanks to Lofty Withers and Sixes And Sevens for prereading and editorial suggestions.

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Rocs actually have a poor sense of smell, but excellent eyesight, especially for colours.

Never mind the whole "molting pheromones" thing. Though I suppose that says just how potent that particular smell is.

In any case, a very fun adventure, all the more so for avoiding the low-hanging, homophonic fruit. Thank you for this, and best of luck in the judging.

Comment posted by Isseus deleted Jul 18th, 2019

I thought the Roc was laying an egg. What a disappointment

Oh God...that ending pun...

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You monster.

This pun probably counts as a crime in some jurisdictions.:rainbowlaugh:

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Oh, it wasn't the roc that laid an egg.

J/k. Good feghoot.

Greyed story :rainbowlaugh:

Not only did you avoid the low-hanging fruit for the punchline, but this was a solid slice of life all around. Everypony was characterized well and got some focus, which probably helped it come across as a self-contained story in its own right, not just the setup for a joke. :pinkiesmile:

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Thank you! Nice to see people are still encountering this silly joke story and enjoying it :twilightsmile:

That wasn't the ending pun I was expecting. I was figuring that somehow Rarity and the others caused the bird to fall out of the sky, and afterwards, Pinkie would say the area was safe but ponies traveling through it would have to "Watch for falling rocs".

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