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After Rainbow Dash accidently crashes through the library window and interrupts Twilight's newest spell, she is split into six ponies, each representing a part of her personality. These ponies will be sure to have their fun, much to Ponyville and Rainbow's friends dismay.

Cover art made by me. Here it is on Deviantart

Edited by Crowscrowcrow (thanks again, mate)

Featured! Here's a picture, thank you to all those who liked and faved! (9/8/14 - 12/8/14)
Featured! A second time! Here's the pic, thanks y'all (23/8/14)

Chapters (5)
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Comments ( 540 )

Nice concept, but good grief do you need an editor. I'll see if I can have a crack at it after some sleep.

so far so good, but I agree with Azure Blackstone that you could use an editor.:twilightsmile:

Wooh at last it is here, and I already can't wait for the next part. :rainbowlaugh:

Poor emo dash, she finds someone she likes that's nice to her and she's immediately pulled away.:rainbowderp:
Lust Dash, everything I was hoping for in that scene. :rainbowlaugh: I especially like Rarity's already caught on.
Joy, as by her own admission pretty much Pinkie Pie, I'm actually very surprised her first course of action was to, uhm, 'visit' Rarity. Although that may have been accidental due to the crash. Come to think of it, so far Joy is the only Dash that crashed, is Rainbow Dash's joy while flying the cause of her crashes?:trixieshiftright:
Mischief, I wonder how she will behave, considering she presumably has no 'joy', it makes me curious if she will find pranking unsatisfying if she's unable to really laugh afterward. Who knows, she might actually be the first to want to merge again, or she might try more and more extreme pranks to make herself laugh.
So far Anger is the most intriguing. Unlike the others, she does not quite behave the way I'd have expected her to, so I wonder if there's something going on.

As for AJ's accent, I think you did great. The only thing I would mention is...

Applejack sighed, “Hi Dash.”

AJ never says 'hi' she usually uses 'howdy' or 'hey'. :ajsmug: (okay, almost never.)

Very nice concept. I've been waiting for someone to do this kind of idea. You do need an editor to check your story, but the idea is solid.:twilightsmile:

Sad Dash reminds me of Marvin from Hitchhiker's Guide to the Galaxy. Also, great story so far, keep it up. :pinkiehappy:

A few grammatical issues, but the premise is really interesting.

This is awesome same goes with the artwork. Great job.

Wow, it is already popular? Better start reading this piece of shit. (The good kind)

This is gonna get awesome/ crazy real fast

:heart:love it:heart: it got to me more:pinkiehappy: right:fluttershysad:

Yay another chapter! Read it and liked plus favourite it too. Great!

4818999 Heheh, your picture includes three stories that are in my favorites :pinkiesmile:

I cannot think of anything other than that episode of Jimmy Neutron... I think it was "Call in the Clones" ?

Either way, I'm using them as the character voices.

A few problems with capitalizing the first letter of every new sentence, but frankly, I liked the concept too much to get too distracted by it.

I really like the idea, even though it totally reminds me of that episode of Teen Titans. A few problems with the capitalization, punctuation, and grammar though. When you finish the story you should proof-read it before submitting. I'm also a big AppleDash fan, and I'd love to see what you do with that in the next chapter. I know I'll be looking forward to it! :)

Dang, this story is already popular, AND featured!:pinkiegasp::pinkiehappy:

4819275 Because jimmy had those clones, and one was all happy.

Great concept, good start, a little fast but looking forward to more.

Damn Fim, I'd love to see the look on your face when you wake up. :rainbowlaugh:

Have you read Rainbow Responsibility Danger Diane Dash Pie?

Hmmm... I like it. Please continue good sir.

Enjoy the t tea, Rarity!
P.S. tee hee, titty
-JD

Awesome line. Did she just insinuate that Rarity enjoys titties?

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaand featured.

Good job :twilightsmile::pinkiesmile::twilightsmile:

I guess they got a dash more work than they expected! AHAHAHAHA HAHAHA hahaha haha ha...

LOL, this totally needs to be an actually episode xDDD

(Before reading)
Concept reminds me of Seven Of Seven, so that's neat. I'll give this a shot.:pinkiehappy:

Why not refer to them by color?

This morning it was 7 likes to 1.

Now it grows to 58 Likes XD

While short in overall length so far and using a rather intriguing concept, I'm loving this story already. :rainbowdetermined2: Can't wait for more.

it does remind me of Seven Of Seven as well.

for that reason here is the theme song

hope you like it

People are talking about how this reminds them of all sorts of stuff like Jimmy Neutron and Teen Titans... and something called seven of seven...

And I'm just sitting here thinking of another fimfiction story with this exact same premise.
Yeah, this story isn't a copy paste, (which I'm gonna be honest is the only reason I checked this out) in fact, it's doing part of the things better in some regard. Well, except grammar, but that's easy to fix.

4819563 I was just about to comment that! With the 6 ravens! Did u read my mind:duck:

4819563

Ouch, I feel sorry for you...
Lemme try to help: fc03.deviantart.net/fs38/f/2008/336/2/0/Multiple_Personality_Disorder_by_spotty_bee.jpg
Hopefully now it just reminds you of this episode of the actual Teen Titans. :raritywink:

You require a proofreader sir. But the story's concept is sound.

4819581 :derpyderp1: OH GAWD IT'S SO WEIRD AND FUN BUT WEIRD AT THE SAME TIME
:twilightsmile: Nice deduction, by the way.
:trollestia: Almost like... it was a HEX of events!
:ajbemused: 'Kay, I'm gonna shut up now. :twilightsheepish:

Don't worry, guys, Twilight has a mirror which lets her sort out emotions, right? :twilightsmile:

Couldn't help but be reminded of the Teen Titans Go episode Colors of Raven
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And the Teen Titans episode that Colors of Raven was kinda based on, Nevermore,
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Anyway I'm liking the story so far! Can't wait to read the next chapters! :rainbowkiss:

4819581

Ya I like the old one too, but I honestly pick the TTG, because I like when the whole team interacts with her personalities as the old one with only cyborg and beast boy interact with her personalities in the hand mirror. I know the new one it just some chibi animation filled with comedy unlike the old one, but I like it, it entertains me with their retarted-ness because almost all characters act retarded. (Mostly Robin)

this actually seems like a good episode idea! hope to see more

4819056 I concur with your hypthosis.:twilightsmile:

4819560

YOU SIR! I found English Dub of that anime! Any idea where I can find Japanese with English Sub? Oh man you sir have found one gem of an anime! Only thing that's missing is the original Rainbow which is different from the Anime!

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