...our meeting (2)
...our meeting
I was sure that was the last chance I had to fix the whole problem. I wasn't about to let it go to waste.
Gathering what little strength I had left I managed to once more stand on all fours.
My legs trembled and twitched at the inconsiderate demands I made to them. They demanded rest, but I begged for their help just for a little while longer.
As the smoke curtain cleared I was able to see a blurry figure move towards the giant crossbow I saw the hoofworkers of Märisch work on.
Of all the the presents Theodore was the only one still thinking of Spike as an enemy.
I ran towards him through the lines of hesitating soldiers using what was left of the smoke curtain to my advantage.
Every step I took hurt like having a needle pierce the bottom of my hoof.
Despite the hatred I felt towards Theodore, I was unable to do more besides tackle him. Fortunately I was able to bring him down to the ground, gaining so at least some time.
"Tome? What do you think you are doing here?
How did you escape?
Bah!
It doesn't matter now. Get off me already! You dare interrupt me in the middle of a battle?"
Unable to come up with any new words, with the ones I had used before proven as useless, exhausted and about to faint all I could do was use my head. I smashed it right in Theodore's mouth.
"Gah!"
I drew blood immediately after the first headbutt. It ran down my forehead and out of Theodore's mouth. It's pearl white teeth were covered in the reddish mixture of his blood and his saliva. He cried due to the pain, but his eyes also reflected his anger towards me.
"How....how dhare yhou!?"
His lips quickly swelled and the words that came out of his mouth became harder and harder to understand. As a pony not accustomed to fight his body was quick to react when hurt. I must admit that I was like that once, but the many fights I got into in the pub had accustomed, somewhat, my body to the pain.
Nonetheless I was unable to put a decent fight against the healthy cardinal.
He smacked my face over and over again while I headbutted whatever part of his body I felt closer.
Naturally his hits proved more effective than mine and after a while of wrestling he got the upper hoof.
Theodore hit me relentlessly, with a fury I had not seen in him ever before. Often he quoted sentences from many important soldiers and commanders that partook in the great battle thousands of years ago.
Luckily for me, despite the anger his punches had, with the passing of time they became weaker, once more surely due to the lack of exercise in Theodore's life. Noticing then that he wasn't inflicting as much pain as he expected, and being painfully aware that his strength wouldn't last any longer he reached for a loose stone in the ground and lifted it over his head.
"...this will be the last one. It'll be the last blow, the last battle, the last day of war. Those were the words of the commander to his soldiers.
Let this be the battle that puts and end to the war. Let this be the one that will claim victory for Canterlot, Equestria, and the Princess!!"
The Cardinal was out of his mind. I wondered if by the time I met him Müllhound, under that mask of faith and devotion, already lurked this murderous, fanatic madness.
Our eyes met. I then looked at the rock. It was obvious my skull would not withstand to be hit with it. It'd surely split open like a melon.
When I looked back at him, Theodore's eyes were still fixed on mine. For an instant I thought he'd be unable to do it. Maybe, despite the madness that controlled his every movement, he still saw me as his former friend.
But then I realized that he wasn't hesitating at all. He was merely preparing himself mentally to assume the guilt brought by giving the deathblow with his own hooves.
Suddenly the earth shook once more. This time it wasn't caused by an explosion, Spike or the cannons. The earth merely shook because it felt like it apparently. But it did it so violently that the mountain above us began to crack and split. Fissures started to appear on every wall of the mountain and many of the soldiers began to care less about the fight and more about their own lives.
"What are you doing? Come here!!!"
With a single swipe of his tail Spike pulled towards him the soldiers closer to him as well as Wild Rose, protecting them from the falling rocks and debris.
The earthquake was my window. As stone and dust fell around us from above and while Theodore was distracted I headbutted him once more, this time in his defenseless stomach. The rock fell behind his back and both of us had again the same advantage over the other, namely none.
"Tome!"
Wild Rose called my name. Certainly it was because she wanted to get me to cover me under Spike as well as the others.
The earthquake continued. Neither I nor Theodore were close enough to Spike to refuge ourselves beneath him.
The strength released by the earth under us was unprecedented. Somehow it was as if something wanted to emerge from the center of the earth.
Theodore finally fell, and laid right next to me without being able to move a single muscle. We both, former friends that had attempted on taking the other's life were now at the mercy of luck, for if a single rock, large enough, were to fall upon our heads there would be nothing we could do besides hope it would kill us instantly.
"You...you...damned..t-t...traitor..."
"You...murderous...cleric..."
I laughed and coughed a little of my blood. For some reason I couldn't stop thinking that before all this happened we preferred to be less formal when we were alone.
As I looked at the ceiling of the cave while countless tiny stones fell upon us, I couldn't stop noticing that for some reason the rock started to lose their color. Maybe it was the blood loss or a simple delusion, but the stones even started to look transparent, to the point where I could distinguish silver clouds, the stars and the full moon above us.
"W-what...what is happening?"
"The...the cave..."
"....it's disappearing!?"
The comments of the soldiers made me realize I wasn't seeing this. The mountain, the sealed mountain was fading away, literally being disappearing from existence as if it had never been more than something we had dreamed about.
In vain I tried to think about the possible reasons for what my eyes witnessed. If it weren't for Spike's words, I'd have believed that I was about to wake up from a dream and that I was still in my little house in Müllhound, waiting for the mailpony to deliver to me the decision of the sect about my transference to Märisch.
"They did it! They have finally defeated the unnamed evil! Everypony, look, Canterlot is rising again!"
As Spike said. The pearl white towers of Canterlot emerged from the ground as a sign of victory of the princesses over the unnamed Evil.
The Castle and its city and the mountain they were on thousands of years ago were again for the entire world to see.
Unexpectedly the Sun rose in the horizon and joined the Moon in the sky submerging the world in twilight.
The world felt then somehow different. It was so strange. It was as if something we didn't know was missing had returned and had showed us once more what the world used to be like.
I looked at Theodore. We were both covered in blood. The expression in his face was of shame and disbelief.
"I told you...we just had to wait...imbecile..."
Theodore didn't show me his face anymore.
I turned to my side and saw how something else seemed to emerge from the depths.
"A town?"
"Some day these walls will fall completely, the kingdom will rise from underground and all the citizens of Canterlot and Ponyville will awake from their slumber.
When that time comes, Tome. Come visit me. I'll surely have a place near a small town you have surely heard nothing about.
I am sure you won't miss it. It has a fashion store shaped like a carousel and a bakery that looks like a cake. It also has a large oak three that serves as a library and huge fields of apple trees."
"So this is Ponyville, huh, Spike?
Looks exactly like you described it.
I'm already...looking forward to visit you there...
My friend...
I'll go as soon...as I feel my legs again..."
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Sigh...
this is rather disappointing.
I thought people would like this story.
4602497
Hey, don't give up so soon, it takes time for people to notice and read it.
4602585
You know what? You are completely right.
It's kind of silly to wait for your story to suddenly become popular and have over a thousand comments in a single night!
4603254
Well, there is a button that lets you add a youtube video.
It's right next to the one that lets you add images.
I for one quite like this.
Spoilers! Don't read until you've read Story!!!
..... wow this story was amazing! I cant even think where to begin!
...... okay maybe i can. First off, the story itself is awesome and the grammar is very good. That's the simple part.
Now i can get into detail how great it was. I really like how you wrote the OC's and Spike in this story. At the start, I was completely lost on this story. I couldn't make heads or tails of it until I got a good grasp on the main OC: Tome. Great guy by the way. Spike can agree
Anyways, you're description of him was great. You explained enough about him where we could visualize him in action as he proceeded in this story. His background was good enough but i was still slightly lost on the whole town business.
..... good point. Anyways. I like how Tome was displayed as a real pony and not a hollow one with simple minded goals. How he deeply care about history and even was willing to believe Spike's words was great. I also liked how he wasn't one to just go out and run his muzzle about everything. I did hate that he told Cardinal (I prefer calling him that) but it was understandable that he did and good he realized his mistake and wanted to correct it by any means necessary.
Indeed. I Also really liked Wild Rose. The image i had of her was a sexii one-eyed beauty that looked tough with faint scars. her dialogue was nice and Her actions are awesome!
Yeah, didn't expect that but really glad you put it in there. However that along with many other things mentioned in a sec really makes me hope for a sequel.
So, next I will Talk about Spike. Awesome job on his character. You did that part perfectly. The part that got me to liking it most is because most readers might have made him completely different over time, but I really like the fact that you just made him a larger child version of himself but still showed he has matured in important aspects. Those are well hidden and most wouldn't notice unless they are true Spike fans.
..... Ahem, anyways great job with him. I also want to say that I hope this story is unfinished because I really hope i can read more of this: what happens to both Tome and Cardinal(not too concerned with the latter), what happens when they all wake up and how they will react to the changed world and Spike, How Spike will react after not talking to them for so long, How equestria(if its even called that anymore) will react to the return of all their princesses, and others.
I will say that this story was definitely worth the read and I'm sure most will agree.
9 out of 10 for Sad
10 out of 10 for AU
10 out of 10 for Adventure
10 out of 10 for grammar
10 out of 10 for overall story.
Thanks alot for the good read and hope to see more great works from you! A like and a fave your way!
Nice. Just nice. Glad to see you took this route. A nice little compromise. Still if you want my opinion look to 4603537 on my thoughts.
P.S. It's only been 8 hours. Even I just woke up 2 hours ago. If you really want more views. Take this to the descendant. If he ever recommends anything I read it. He's got excellent tastes.
4603704
Glad you liked it.
As you know at first the story was supposed to be a sad one, but after thinking about it a lot I decided to give it an alternative many seem to like.
Also...who is the descendant?
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You don't know The Descendant? He's an author on a lot of fanfiction sites. He recommends some pretty good stories. Yours is defiantly one of them.
4604523
The unnamed evil is gone forever. The fact that the princesses and Canterlot returned is proof of it.
I have to say that even I didn't have a clear idea of what the evil was supposed to be.
It was like a shapeless corruption of everything that was good.
I won't say anything about Theodore's punishment. Mostly because I'm not clear about it myself.
In one of the endings I imagined him and his army marching full of pride towards the princesses. Claiming they had slain the unnamed evil when all they actually did was murder Spike.
I am 100% sure none of the princesses would be very happy about it.
In the other ending, Theodore saw the extent of his own fanatic madness. I was thinking that maybe he would work hard to make amends for his actions.
4603537
Woah...I am really glad you liked my story that much.
Actually, after reading your comment I came up with an idea for a next chapter.
I don't want to say too much, but I'll give you a musical hint:
Wow, that was fantastic! Had some interesting characters, especially Tomb considering he managed to get a good deal of character development in a 15,000 word story. And Spike, he was characterized pretty well, I like the idea of him keeping his 'chldlikeness' even after 2000(?) years.
Though I gotta say, that was a heck of deus ex machina at the end there, but it worked somewhat. Give it a 8/10 for the good length, great back story, and of course Spike, but the good ending was a bit, sudden and even though I hate downer ending... yeah, it felt strange. Good story either way!
Signed,
--Pyro The Faithful Reader
4605534
.... that gave me all the hint i needed.
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Fudge Yeah It Is!
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I'm glad you liked it.
The sequel is password locked? :(
4868768 Why is the sequel password locked?
Loved it but how does one access the sewuel?
4605534
I wanna read the sequel how can do that i wanna know what happens next
This story is amazing, you should be proud. I have read over a thousand stories, and yours is one of the best.
Looking through the oldest stories in my read it later, and I came across this gem! Thanks for the wonderful story!
Given how difficult it would be to write an entertaining sequel I can guess why it's locked. Still, you've done some fantastic world building in this piece, and kept my interest throughout this whole story! You've done a fantastic job with this and it's a shame you haven't written new stories since this one (at least at the time of my posting). I really do hope you come back and write some more for us, even if it isn't a sequel to this story I'm sure you could make another world just as entertaining and fleshed out as this one.