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Midnight Dash, an average day alicorn, gets facehugged, but will the chestbuster kill him????? Please tune in, this is my first story ever, so please bear with me. P.s. for those people who are picky, if you have nothing nice to say then do me the favor of not being a dick and dont say crap..
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Not that unique.
Yes, yes it will. You can't survive chestbursters. You are going to die.
4431075 and be reborn as king of the Gary stus
Dude: your story doesn't look like you put too much effort into it. I haven't even opened it and I'm already seeing misspellings and typos (and a plot that seems rather iffy), so I don't think many people would bother.
I think you best ignore any comments so blatantly made by people who haven't actually read the story.
That being said, this story needs serious work. About the only salvageable thing is the initial concept. I suggest reading through the site's nifty writing guide, the link is in a pop down tab if you hover over the FAQ link.
After that I would take a long trawl through a web site called TV Tropes starting here: So You Want To: Write A Fanfic
As for spelling and grammar, I am atrocious with it myself so I'm not the person to help but I can tell you you need it. Fortunately if you can get a decent chapter or two down plenty of people will be willing to help even if some others are immediately turned off by it.
So best of luck.
the xenomorph facehugger actually doesn't kill its prey, because it needs the prey alive for the egg.
dont worry i didn't dislike it, because i want to see where this is going.
4431718 i know that, i need to fix that on the summary, sorry for the confusion.
4431664 thx for the positive critizism, ill do what you said.
Please edit this so I can understand it a bit better, as I didn't understand, some typing errors I saw to.
4431816 alright, can do
4432368 lmao, hey what can i say, im gifted.
4433007 I know alicorns are like gods, in my further chapters i will explain, so keep yur mouth shut.
4442133 stfu, i bet.you prolly screwed your first story too.
4442133 "beginning the break apart" im pretty sure its "beginning TO break apart" you dared me and i found one, WWWOOOOOOOOOOOAH WATCHU GON' DO, WATCHU GON' DO, WATCHU GON' DO, nuthin, thats right
4442445 And where exactly did you find that? 'Cause I sure as heck didn't find it.
4442542 the first paragraph of the first division.
4442551 Thanks for catching that. Doesn't change the fact that a monkey can write better than you, but thanks nonetheless.
Yeah i may write like a monkey but, my eyes are as keen as an eagles is when it comes to my mind set on something.
4442634
So I'm guessing your mind wasn't set on this story of yours. The concept is interesting, the execution leaves much to be desired.
4442847 maybe your right, i've gotten started on a new fanfic, this one seems like its gonna turn out better though.
People, don't be rude, mmkay? This is, as he said, his first story EVER. I bet you didn't do Shakespeare worthy work on your First Ever story. He needs encouragement, not rude comments about Gary Stu's and Alicorn OCs. As for the writer, a good idea would be to go and capitalize the sentences maybe, and the word 'I '. Also try not using the chat format in writing. :3
4452706 thx for the encouragement I'll read over it and fix it.
Well, to those who shall give me another chance, I am writing a crossover of assassins creed and of course mlp, and I'm getting help from one of my most favorite writers of all time, DarkPheonix, and also check out his story dominant species.
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Kill me,