There is a new Jewellery Boutique in town. Apparently, it had the strangely odd name; “Five Magics”, which isn't the expected name for a jeweller's shop.
There are a few items in the window, just to show who and what they were, nothing fancy. It's bad business to put your finest there, anyway.
The common items are kept in drawers under the counter and the most in the vault, while the real treats had been hidden away in special rooms out of site.
The once kept secret, are the once you have to ask for specifically, the once that gave the name to the establishment in the first place.
Chapters (2)
Wanna tell me why I just read a story about someone buying a shiny rock? I mean... you know, so I feel like I didn't waste ALL of my time?
Okay, this is... boring. Honestly, just BORING. Forget the horrendous grammar, whoever the hell those characters are, and the little to no explanation of the premise, this is just... BORING. Boring, boring, BORING! And I've looked over this single chapter a few times, and I STILL don't get what's supposed to be happening besides "buying a necklace," which is ONE WORD. And what's with that title? I mean, really, I'm legitimately confused by it...
Really, I am completely and utterly confused.
4420518 Since you are actually writing this, I'll answer you, on the small chance you actually care enough to read it.
Boring = Detailed.
If you don't like details, maybe you should choose stories with shorter chapters?
Single chapter, and Incomplete, mind you?
The necklace is merely detailes of a side story, it is the Equestrian Blood-Ruby that is important.
If you haven't noticed, Gems have a connection to Magic.
I was about to elaborate on this small detail later, if and when I get to it.
The Premice is connected to these 'Five Magics', and the 'Gems'.
Without spoiling the story too much, these gems are tranceforming people into specific types of Ponies, and possibly taking them to Equestria.
4420516 Gems are merely polished Rocks.
The Five elements are merely Gems.
Gems has been conected to the magic throughout the show of MLP.
If I get the impression you are not reading these responses, I can and will delete them.
I'm not asking you to like this or any other story, mine or otherwise.
Still, what does it take to hide a story from someone like you?
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I did indeed read your response, and all I wanted was a logical answer, which you gave. No reason to get snippy with me. I just like to write (speak) with a hint of sarcasm. I apologize for that.
And I'm not sure I understand what you mean by,
4421872 This is a possitive surpirse in my experience.
After the responses I get, I guess I can get just a tiny bit touchy.
I have the impression it is too much to ask of some to be respectful?
Just hope the explanation made sense to you, so you can see a bit more of what the story is about.
If I can take a hint from your Avatar, I guess I can see more of what you mean?
If you don't like the story, it would be nice to have an idea why.
Maybe the last part should have been directed at your 'Friend'?
If you noticed that the stor is only posted at a rather 'Exclusive' group of my own making,
I guess a search could turn up the story?
I'm curious as to what made you choose the name for your avator, though.
From your profile, this is hardly one of my better stories in your eyes?
it isn't marked either Action or Romance, is it?
I do have several stories that sports either or both these categories.
I guess a good Sarcasm has its place, when used right.
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Probably, if you mean my sarcastic nature compared to my avatar.
I just felt that it didn't really matter to anything. Like, I read the blog post about it, then I read the first chapter, and I was like... this is dull. I like first chapters to throw me in the action. Exposition is good, but 2,000 words of it, is not, IMO.
Probably... we're not friends.
I... guess...?
It's Japanese. Mondai is the equivalent of 'no problem' and Shunketsu translates, 'genius.' It's my interpretation of Shikamaru from Naruto.
No, it isn't. I checked this story out cuz someone told me to. I don't normally downvote, or leave negative comments (aside from recently) but I felt that I had to on this.
I may or may not check out your stories. If this string of improper grammar and structural error persists, however, I may be inclined to stop reading. That ruins it for me (and another reason why I didn't really like this story). And yes, sarcasm does have its time and place.
4422017 the Avatar looks like 'Maud', at least at first glance? she seems to have a Pashion for Rocks, right?
The blog is supposed to help me keep track of details about the story.
Clasically, Exposition and Action doesn't mix, just as it probably doesn't mix well with dialog?
I like to explore outside of the Box. it this works for you, or anyone else is up to you.
That was supposed to be one of the Sarcasms, I do have a few of these, since they tend to open up your eyes more then dead-pan statements. In this case, I guess it was the other poster it refers to?
The only direct links to the story would be my page, blog and group.
I am not a follower of this particular show, as much as I love Anime in general.
Not sure how much this would show in my stories, or the list of them?
Sadly, my Japanese has a bit more to wish for then I ould have liked.
Oh ok.
That's good.
Yours is among the more constructive once I had for quite the while.
I'm trying hard to keep the grammar at top level, but it is a problem to avoid every little problem from time to time. If this is bothering you is up to you.
This should be less of a problem with the newer stories.