Fluttershy and the Mask

It's the day of Nightmare Night and as always Fluttershy is scared...until she finds a particular mask floating on the nearby creek.

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Honest Wisdom

Honest Wisdom #1 · May 7th, 2014 · 1 · ·

Sun princess+chaotic artifact=end of the world!!!!

Nukesandwich

Nukesandwich #2 · May 9th, 2014 · · ·

Somebody, PLEASE make some fanart for this revolutionary idea!
Also, THE BIRTH OF TROLLESTIA!

wildrook

wildrook #3 · May 28th, 2014 · · ·

Mr. Cake: Pinchy Leg? Oh my...HONEY, GRAB THE KIDS AND MEET ME AT THE BUNKER!

Twilight_Shimmer

Twilight_Shimmer #4 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

I will be honest this story has great potential if you added more content and slowed down the flow of the story. That aside it was a funny read

edwinflores428

edwinflores428 #5 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

5112456 Thank you very much!

Twilight_Shimmer

Twilight_Shimmer #6 · Oct 8th, 2014 · · ·

5112940 Very welcome ^_^ On a side note, Just imagine what the mask would do to an Alicorn Like Luna Celestia or Twilight

ponylover2

ponylover2 #7 · Dec 18th, 2014 · · ·

5112940 r u going to make the next story with princess celestia and the mask the sequl for fluttershy and the mask because I love this story

nightwalker

nightwalker #8 · Feb 21st, 2015 · · ·

I like the ideas presented, but wish they had all been run out longer.

If you ever wanted to go back and rewrite this, I think the biggest improvement you could make would be having Discord come in much later. Have Fluttermask be something that her friends accept, like "Oh, this must be Discord's way of helping Fluttershy overcome her social anxiety." and work with that idea. Have her not be as explosively off the wall like here, make her more like the second time Stan tries it in the movie, at the club, and have her more in control, just without inhibitions. She pranks better than Dash, she's more random than Pinkie, she can obviously bend reality like Discord, things like that. Only have Discord come in towards the end to see what all the fuss is about, and tell them this was never something he planned when they explain what's going on. Also, I figure the idea of chaotic Fluttershy would be something he'd find rather attractive (“Oh my, she’s practically as chaotic as I was!” Discord exclaimed. "That's... really hot, actually."). Given that her powers are similar to his, and that she might not want to give them up, would be a great excuse for a town-wrecking showdown between the two chaotic beings. Or near to.

The ending was great. You give a mask that's only powered during the night to the one being that decides when it's time for the day. Brilliant.

I gave it a like. I think it's a better germ of a story than an actual story. I'd like to see it given a longer treatment.

G57Steve