The cleaned up story from my Ponyfinder game, Heralds of Luna. In the wake of Discord's reign, six ponies must save the Royal Sisters and restore order to Equestria. Facing down Diamond Dogs, the hordes of chaos, and the ethereal deer, they serve the Princess of the Moon in her efforts to secure the defeated Spirit of Chaos and bring harmony back to the world.
Log was converted from d20 chat format to this elegantly crafted story by Pav Feira and A Dragon Dreaming, who you probably know best as those guys I'm awesome at stealing credit from.
Cool idea. I'm putting it on my Read Later list.
Amethyst Shard 10/10, would hug.
Finished The Introductions, And I Can't Wait For More
Oh deer.
I am... intrigued! Until the adventure starts rolling, I cannot tell which side(s) the deer are on, and thanks to Ruby and Masquerade's chapters I can't even tell if the princesses are real. I'm definitely looking forward to the results of this RPG.
Now for some cleanup:
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missing period.
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pegasi, though pegasuses is more appropriate to its Greek roots. Yes, yes, I know the show uses it, and there's no real plural for the singular Pegasus anyway, but nyeh.
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it?
creates
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Missing period.
says
Capitalize it when it's used as a name.
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weight?
Missing period
it is that will
more or most?
Missing period.
should Vanishes be capitalized? Is it the specific name of a spell?
Missing period.
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it's
Capitalizing equine... Depends on whether they're referring to the species (lowercase) or a proper noun, such as if they call themselves the Equine race/tribe. (uppercase) It's an interesting question, really,which involves delving deeper into their culture.
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Thanks for the list! When me and ADD were editing this for submission, we were primarily converting the chatlog format into prose, but we were intentionally avoiding the urge to rephrase sentences, tighten up pacing, or other second-draft edits, in order to preserve the "performance art" nature of the RPG session. We were looking for punctuation and wrong-word-spellchecker errors, but as it turns out, it's difficult to ignore one type of editor thinking without turning off the other. tl;dr my bad.
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MFW vindicated
Since we're using Pathfinder for this campaign (and our other completed campaign, whose chatlogs are currently receiving a similar treatment), then yes, this is the name of a spell, thus the player capitalized it, and similarly I left it alone... However... If our previous campaign was any indication, most spellcasting described the casting and the effects in prose, so referring to spells directly by name like this was few-and-far-between. So you could make the argument that this happens rarely enough that the capitalization is pedantically distracting. I'll run it by the Jaxmaster 9000.
The number of times I've had that argument/discussion... further complicated by being set 1000 years before the show and being spoken by a deer, considering their Other status in this universe.
4399748 It seems scattered sources on the net did use pegasai, but that doesn't mean they were correct. At the very least, pegasi is the terminology the show has decided upon.
Okay, how do you put anything on your read Later List.....can't get it to work.
Any who, great introduction, it'll be interesting to see how things play out. Although, I feel bad for the Diamond Dogs they always seem to get the short end of the stick. Heh, maybe the main cast can find some redeeming ones. I hate seeing an entire race stereotyped.
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To add things to the read later list, simply click the clock directly to the left of the story title, the one that is dark grey on a lighter grey background. It will change to a white clock with a blue background - this indicates the story is now in your read later list.
If this isn't working, you might not javascript permissions set right - beyond that, I can't help you.
4448230 Thank you.
Maybe. Thanks for your hard work and editing Pav!
-Matt -
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Amethyst doesn't believe they existed before the events of Discord - nor does she believe the Elements of Harmony nor the Crystal Empire did - and this coming from a new crystal mare.
Of course, she's not entirely certain that she existed.