Derpy's Daily Diary

by DashieReviews

Day 3

Derpy had apparently found the sheet that she ate last night at the end of her bed... No talk on this please! Thank you.
Derpy had went downstairs to only then realize that she had work today, delivering letters to everyone in Equestria. She then waled outside to check her mailbox. (Post ponies get mail too!) Derpy had a look through her mail and picked up her map of where she had to go and deliver letters to today,

Apparently on work days, Derpy likes cheese sandwiches for lunch. Plus she got to use any pin she wanted. Derpy walked over to the post office, got her bag and set off to deliver her letters to all the ponies in Equestria. First letter, Rainbow Dash, Cloudsdale

[quote Rainbow Dash, { ~<>~ }

Cloud Nine

Outer Cloudsdale

Equestria Derpy set off to deliver the letter to Rainbow Dash. On her way, she had met Twilight. Twilight was asking how her diary was getting on and if the notes helped. Derpy explained about the notes and why she ate them and it worked. Although, she didn't tell Twilight about what she found at the end and of her bed this morning. Twilight was happy the Derpy was still taking interests in diary writing and the way of expressing herself to a book and quill.

Derpy had left Twilight and flew over Ponyville until she could just see Cloudsdale. She had then arrived at the door of Rainbow Dash's house and put the letter in the mailbox. Derpy had then left quietly and left Raibow Dash to take her own time to get to her mailbox.

Derpy then took out the next letter and read the destination.

Mr & Mrs Orange, {~<>~}

Orange Apartments

Manehattan

Equestria

Comments

[TheGreatSmooze]

It's hard to follow the narrator's thoughts with him constantly interjecting. It would be much more cohesive if you told the story straitly, without any interjections or asides. It's a nice idea. Good luck to you!

[DashieReviews]

Thanks for the tips both of you

[graceyadorable]

4247207 now it is really good!
Thanks for being open minded with my ideas.

[DashieReviews]

4248302 Thanks!

[graceyadorable]

4252471 um i think you mean you're welcome...