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Scootaloo has been through a lot in her life, and no doubt this has been her worst experience.
It was her fault... What has she done?
She thinks to herself as the rain falls around her in the darkness.

Chapters (5)
Comments ( 47 )

Not too long, I know, but I came up with this and I couldn't get any "The Background" stuff out while this was in my head.
Happy 2:00 am :facehoof:

I forget to make it rated teen, now i have to wait pretty much a day for it to be re-checked.

very nice, cliff hanger is making me want more.:moustache:

I got teary eyed reading this.
It's a good story! :twilightsmile:

Make another chapter, please. Not only cuz this was really good, but also because it has so many unanswered questions, like all the things Scootaloo was asking.

Umm... I don't know if you can die from being in the rain for that short of a period of time, so I'm assuming she just fell asleep, but then it said that it was her final thought and... *exasperated gasp* I'm confuddled. :derpyderp2:

She hit her head on the tree reaallly badly

I like this. It's really sad, but does seem like something scoots would accidentally do. Although, I think that the repeated stomping of SS was a little much.

367343 Somehow I didn't read that part. Nooooowwww it makes sense.

More likely, she's suffering a mild concussion. Slipping into unconsciousness is normal for an injury like that. She probably isn't dead.
Or, I hope she isn't dead. I'd like to see this story get a proper ending.

367685 I was thinking the same thing. Thanks for speaking my mind for me.

We'll see, if much more people ask for more, I might be forced to continue this.
Also, it is sort of implied it was worse than a concussion with the fact that she was bleeding
But I'm glad you guys/girls liked it, that's what matters.
Btw, there is 1 minor error in logic I'm waiting for someone to notice, yet no one has

367813 I have, I'm just waiting for someone else to!

Since her facilities were still working fine when she first came to, the injury on Scoot's head was probably nothing major. Even if it was, she'd probably survive if Dash got her to Urgent Care quickly enough.
Maybe I'm just overthinking? :twilightsheepish:

I want to know what happens to Scootaloo after Rainbow Dash found her. Please add a Chapter 2!

For the love of... Just make another chapter! :scootangel:

Oh yes write another chapter.... I want to know what happened!! :rainbowwild:

Eeyup, I also think you should write another chapter.:twilightsmile:

Bollocks. I can't complain really, I had a story going kinda well and it sorta fell through the cracks on my end. I know how it is, don't worry 'bout it. Well anyways, best of luck in your future endeavors!

~CSB, peacin' out

No Problem!:twilightsmile:

Can't wait for Frostbite then!:twilightsheepish:

371834 Well, then I guess we'll have to deal with the cliffhanger :/ I guess the ending is up to our own imagination? xD
And now, I await "Frostbite"..... you better not have given us false hope :rainbowwild::scootangel:


Was the mistake "Scootalie" looked back down"? :scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel::scootangel:

No, but that should be fixed.
It's that she's rested on an oak tree, in the middle of sweet apple acres

A second chapter is required for this story. As you have said on my story "Great job man!".

Damn my ADHD
I've worked on 6 stories, to about 50% done for each, but frostbite is the one that has the least progress.
I swear...

This is thrilling, you've got to continue this story. It's absoulutly worth reading more than once

I really liked it! I think there is a good sequel to it too...
it would be awesome to actually make it a longer story...
keep up the good work!

close to 500 views! :D

Yes, yes!!! :pinkiecrazy:
What will happen next?! More drama?! Sadness?! :pinkiehappy:
I cannot wait!!! :pinkiecrazy::rainbowlaugh:

i love this story, but there were a few mistakes. here one:
Staring out the, window Rainbow Dash watched as they lowered it into the hole.
It should be:
Staring out the window, Rainbow Dash watched as they lowered it into the hole.
keep up the good work and I certainly hope there will be another chapter!:heart:

This is turning out to become one great story, should be featured on equestriadaily:derpyderp1:

well, i think the story got turned down from EQD.
But, whatevs, no big deal.
After the break ends, and my ADHD continues, I'll start paying more attention to the story, as that won't be what I'm focusing on... or should be.
Whats been going on now, is that I've been trying to focus on the story, but my brain wanders.
Now, I'll try to focus on school, but my mind will wander to this.

It's marked as complete is it over or what?

I really like how you are developing the relationship here with Scootaloo and Rainbow Dash. It seems to me that it really fits RD's character to protect Scoots.....Can't wait to see what happens next!:ajsmug::rainbowderp:

Short as hell I know, but I wanted to get this out while I work on the final chapter.
Atleast it's something :3

Yea... I should probably add some sort of 'more visible' transition

It's not perfect, but i think it's better. I added a couple sentences to the beginning of the chapter.

love it!
keep up the good work:heart:

Comment posted by TrebleBass deleted Mar 24th, 2013

Finishing always counts for something. :pinkiehappy:

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