You, and you alone, have the chance to save the target of your adoration; Rainbow Dash.
Despite what forces lay ahead, you keep flying for her... to her.
Don't read if you will only thumbs it down for the perspective.
This was written as a challenge to myself, to write a "good" story in a 2nd person perspective.... which I haven't really seen. I hope this qualifies as good.
For the best effect, read this with the lights off, and aloud :)
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Tell me what you guys think! If you thumbs up, tell me why you liked it and any flaws you saw.
If you thumbs down, please tell me why as to make the story better, and to make myself as a writer better. ^-^
I really liked this one, it was short, touching and it also leaves me wanting more but at the same time it's hard to go anywhere from here that any of us hasn't seen before. I think you should upload some more short ones like this.
As for flaws, I didn't find any but then again..... I'm the last person you wanna have check over your flaws xD
Si jaseve wux mrith nomeno:
Keep up the good work ^^
(I know you've probably heard that alot but right now it's the best I've got, so deal with ti xD)
I liked it. Short, sweet, and cute.
And if anything, I like the 2nd person perspective. It's different but also rewarding. It makes you feel closer to the story.
I thought it was a little to short and the emotion wasn't described as well as I would've hoped. Otherwise it was pretty well written and nice grammar.
Its not bad, quite sweet, with only a few errors. Did I feel anything for the characters? No, there wasn't enough time or reason to create an attatchment between me and them. If you made it a little longer, and gave some more insight into the main character's mind, then maybe. I was kind of apprehensive with the sad tag as well, but it doesn't really come in to play.
It's a good effort, and I like it. Thumbs up.