Apparently abandoned by his mother, Horizon sits alone in front of the school, waiting for her to finally show up.
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Haha. Time goes sooo slow when your worried and bored. Especially when your still a kid.
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Kinda, it was pretty good.
I love stories like this! Short, sweet, and original!
awwwww, i loved this!
Its like me when I am in class.
Reminds me when I was a kid.
Very nice job.
I'm only 20 minuted late
Good story, tho.
This reminds me so much of that episode of Arthur where Brain and Binky wait for their parents after football/soccer practice. This story is the exact pony equivalent of that episode.
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Anyone else remember that show? Geez, I feel old now...
Plus, how do I remember names and details of a kid's show I haven't watched in years?
Also, on a more related note, I liked this story
nice
So he could have played ball with his friends anyway.
Short and Sweet!
It's pretty good. A little on the short side, and you got to the point a little too quickly. Plus, some minor grammatical errors.
All those aside, I still enjoyed the story. Good job
-- Jack
@Fireseeker Yeah I thought of that episode, too. ^_^
You had some capitalization, grammar, and punctuation issues throughout the story, and I feel like you could have been more descriptive. You could have gone into more depth on Horizon's relationship with his mother, why exactly she was never around...background stuff like that, to make the story more fleshed out. It's a good idea, though, and very cute.
(Also, this didn't end up being really tragic, so I'd tag it differently, too.)
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lol thanks
short sweet simple, but i was expecting more also you might want to check your grammar and spelling all in all thats
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Have a yay!
..... you know what? have two more! 
691438 Wait how did I see the only a few minutes late coming? Waiting for a little bit does feel like an eternity though.
Though there were a few mechanical errors, I did enjoy it! I know it wasn't tagged as comedy, but somehow the title and description almost made it seem like it was going to be one, at least to me. o.o
I can certainly empathize with some of Horizon's feelings though, those racing thoughts... (maybe it's the anxiety)
His poor mother though! :c Oh, how scared I would be to be a mother...although people already see me as one so I can't escape >.< Anyway...I think you captured that childlike mindset pretty well. >w<
And I liked the characters, despite how short it was. I almost want to see them star in another story ^.^; It just felt like there was certainly much more of a story to be told, with all the leading information you packed into just over 1000 words (perhaps that also hastens the pace, having all these pieces of information at once).
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I certainly agree; while I imagine it was meant to be short, I feel that this had the feeling or the potential of being part of (the introduction to?) a larger story.
If you'd like, I can offer edits or grammatical/stylistic feedback on this when I'm more awake...though being an old story, I'm sure it's not touched upon very much.
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(hehe, not to mention I also feel old when some of the people I've met more recently have gotten into MLP:FiM 4-5 years after I have o_o)
Yes, I do remember that show :P But I didn't watch much of it so I wouldn't know that episode >.< I am fairly old now though, compared to many of my friends, come to think of it...
(err...sorry, I got carried away with replying; I blame tiredness >.<)