Coco Pommel simply could not stand it any longer.
This is a stream-of-consciousness look into a possible way events transpired just before the end of "Rarity Takes Manehattan." It is also a look into the mind of someone who perhaps cannot think terribly rationally all the time.
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It was... beautiful.
3764605 You're... Beautiful...
3764717
Yes, I am
Well, that was interesting.
I loved it, but I had one thing; if ponies can feel anger and revenge, murder must not be to uncommon.
Just read it, and I think it's mmkay. Different first person writing style than most things I read and write, so it was quite the adventure. I could see Coco Pommel being a serial killer now after reading this, I think you could have potential in writing a series with her like that. Especially on how you went deep into her thoughts (well you should do that anyways if you're writing first person) which is another thing that made her feel like serial killer even more.
Woah. This is your first story? Damn, man, that was nice. Now I'm always one for a dark tale, but without sounding too nit-picky, the cursing felt a little out of place. I know, I know, that seems like small potatoes compared to, you know, the bludgeoning murder, but I think their relatively clean mouths would've provided a really eerie contrast to all the dark shenanigans. Other than that, solid piece of work.
hmmm murder is bad... but I don't feel like she did a bad thing.... is that normal?
.... mmmkay...
I guess helps that I don't like the mmmkay thing... I really REALLY don't like it...
but truthfully this is a really good story!
I like the whole Tomb thing that you use for this too!
Murder is bad, mmkay. You shouldn't kill others, mmkay.
Yikes. That really was something special. I think you hit the nail on the head with the stream-of-consciousness writing style; you did a great job of following how such a superficially sweet pony like Coco became so twisted inside. And let's face it, who wouldn't turn that way after years of Suri's abusiveness and 'mmmkay'ing?
A very well-written story on a difficult subject, indeed!
Oh lawd. Oh lawd. Oh lawdy.
This.....I don't even know. You sir, you receive an upvote.
3764605 so you're the parasprite..
3767756
what gave you that impression?
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Your pic is also a parasprite
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You must be the parasprite
3767795 You shoulder heard me vocalizing my previous comment
twas funny
Suri gets murdered?
Sew what?
(See what I did there?)
Well... that was that.
First person narrative worked out quite nicely. I'm not usually one to read a dark fic, but this one surprisingly didn't feel 'dark' at all. Aside from Coco being, well, insane, and the ahem murder, the overall tone of this whole fic wasn't necessarily 'dark'. It felt... right... yes, right, let's go with that.
All in all, I enjoyed it. Mmkay.
Good for Suri. I haven't even gotten around to seeing the episode but I can't stand her.
hm
So, how many think suri is diamond tiara's mother who left her behind saying "I don't need this, mmkay!"
3771326 I'm a fan of that theory...and also that Grace Manewitz is Twist's older sister.
that was great i loved it keep up~
Your 50th like
Crazy good my friend I liked the feeling that I was in Coco's mind as she was pushed over the proverbial edge by Suri. Dark stuff
Not bad i give it a good 8.1/10
Gr8 m8: 8.8/10; would probably read again...
That’s the thing about stress on people. Too much causes them to snap like a spring. And of course, no two people snap in the same way.