“I’m sorry…Initially, I never meant to set hoof into all your lives—especially yours, Twilight Sparkle…If all of you will miss me, then let the darkness in my heart embrace all of you…I’ve seen the light…And now my terror shall reign upon all your lives…Thank you for the love you all gave me…I must repay all of you…with my Dissonance…”
Magic, Generosity, Honesty, Kindness, Loyalty and Laughter
VS
Illusion, Greed, Deceitfulness, Malevolence, Faithlessness and Sadness
An arcane Alicorn questing for the influences and virtues of Harmony, Iwano Imagination has set hoof in Equestria in a mission to conquer his newfound dark element: Dissonance. The adventure of Iwano with Dissonance in his spirit will solely reflect Equestria's fate and his friendships with allies and foes. Twists and turns, returns, mysteries, the unexpected and amazing dangers will all no doubt be orchestrated by Dissonance, as Iwano’s black-tainted heart will be tested to choose the path of pure light…or pitch-blackness. The Mane Six, pony folks, Luna and Celestia will each be having their own challenges that they would never forget from the friend with a gray heart…
Twilight Sparkle distrusts the newcomer. Ever since his arrival, Twilight can't help sensing a feeling towards the green Alicorn. To trust him or intercept? she asks herself. As she ventures through his heart while masquerading with friendliness, she would trigger Equestria's newest and most powerful threat combined. Will she ever trust and save him?
Rarity fancies the newcomer. Falling for the arcane sweetheart, she wants to get their hearts together. As she ventures through his eyes, she would find his true gem, and her scream. Will she shine in the beautiful blackness?
Pinkie Pie loves his crazy attitude, though hidden. It's like she never partied with somepony so hyper...yet destructive. As she ventures through his smile, she would discover his true cackle. Will she make him smile truly in the end?
Applejack has to stay strong. She must, even if it means enduring the new pony's misdeeds. As she ventures through his words, she would find his hidden evil. Will she lift the unforeseen destruction?
Rainbow Dash despises his skills. She prides herself as Equestria's best flier, but will this Alicorn take her title? As she ventures through his winds, she would unmask the speed of his darkness. Will she surpass his wings of blackness?
Fluttershy is scared of him. She's worried that he might hurt her next, but doesn't realize that they could be the same. As she ventures through his feelings, she would unlock his heart, and release the monster. Will she tame the beast within him?
Celestia feels weak. She trusts the mysterious visitor with a shining hope that he would be saved, but felt her heart shattering of sunlight. As the bearer of the sun, she must brighten the hope of Equestria against the new evil. The sovereign sun shall burn by the green flames . As she ventures through his power, she would face her darkest opponent ever. Will she defeat the great threat?
Luna has nightmares. She can’t choose whether to hate or trust the green Alicorn, all because of her nightmares. The serene moon shall embrace the bewildering dark moon. As she ventures the arcane Alicorn’s dream, she would find the “star” deep under his blackness. Will she face the Alicorn of her nightmares?
Cover Art by: MRNEIN9
I like the story so far keep up the good work
You're the very first to comment on my novelfic. OMCelestia!!!
Uh.. Question, What is IW? What is SAA? Is he somekind of Inter-universal explorer?
4283743 I knew somepony would ask those kind of questions. If you keep reading, you'll understand. You might also notice some unfamiliar characters being mentioned by the protagonist. But you'll pretty soon find out. That is why he's described as "arcane"
...why all the moderates?! Almost every color you mention you place in the moderate category, but all the colors in the show are bright, vibrant, no "moderate" at all. Moderate just implies that the colors are dull and grayed. Also we know what the ponies in the show look like, so for Applebloom you can just say something like "red-maned filly" as a description, or for scootaloo "orange Pegasus filly", or for rainbow "prismatic mare" or something like that. It makes the reading go smoother and even though using colors like raspberry for twilights aura may be more accurate, that doesn't necessarily make them better. Just use light purple for that instead, people still see it as the same color but they don't need to read about a few thousand different words for what's basically the same color. When introducing new characters however it would be okay to do a full-description and use things like "coal black coat" and "cherry red mane", basically comparing the color to something else like it instead of using the item as a color itself, I.e.
"A tall, coal black Pegasus stallion with a beet-red mane and cerise eyes"
Versus
"A tall, moderately coal-colored Pegasus stallion with a beet mane and cherry eyes"
See the difference? The first one flows better and paints a better picture than the second, along with being easier to write and understand.
Please take this into consideration and edit these changes into your story. Really other than the problem that I addressed it's really good, and remember, even though YOU may understand it perfectly and know what's going on, the READER probably doesn't. Thank you and I hope you have a good day.
4445650 I just want to give the specific coloring of each character
I'll just edit once I'm done with the whole novelfic. Despite your "corrections", how's the story so far? Plus, the story is based on Iwano Imagination's point of view.
Spacings.
4833161 I want the my story to be like other novels I've read.
When I look at the view count and then the folders the story is in, I guarantee you'll get more attention from putting it in more folders than what it is in now.
5195994 Perhaps I should start doing that. I just don't like it, sort of.
Major confusion