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Techorse is a pony from a different planet who comes to Equestria one day. But when his old master Wizard and his team of mercenaries want to sell the ponies back home as pets, it's up to Techorse and the mane6 to stop him!

Techorse was written in the summer of 2011 before the second season came out. It was designed to follow the canon and format of the show as closely as possible while adding some new material to keep it interesting. Originally posted on my fanfic.net account, pename Spirals95, it was met with generally positive review emails. The book is over 117,000 words long in length.

I hope you enjoy reading this novel as much as I enjoyed writing it, and keep watching my homepage for the follow-up short story series!

Cover artwork by Veestormcourage

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 24 )

OH MAH GAWD! So many chapters :applecry:. Stalin don't think he will be able to read them all!

:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:Amazing. Words cannot describe it. You sir, are a wonderful writer and I hope to see much more of your work. I'd give you an infinite amount of moustaches (out of 5) but I'm only allowed to put 20. This deserves way more views than it has.:moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache: okay, I'm tired of mashing the left mouse now.

My god... This whole story was just.. beautiful :raritycry:

A Friend of yours sent me here, so i'll give this story a try.
Sounds very nice so far :yay:

Do you plan on uploading the rest of the Techorse series? :moustache::moustache::moustache::yay::yay::yay::eeyup::eeyup::eeyup:

Well, after looking at just the first page a bit, I can already see that the writing is superb and the storytelling along with the accuracy to canon pulls you into this fic unlike many others can. This will take quite awhile to read, and I can literally see the author's dedication, mainly because there is more than 40 chapters. I'm looking forward to reading this piece, as I know the author from Dota 2(my username: Fluttershy). I shall provide any feedback I can, positive or negative. :derpytongue2:

Comment posted by Somebodymcthatguy deleted Jun 6th, 2013

Well, just finished part 1, and I must say, this is quite the story. But, I must be somewhat professional, so have a bulleted(moustache) list!

Things I liked:
:moustache: The Mane Six act like they would within the show, at least from what I've read so far.
:moustache: Unique and interesting characters, such as Techorse and Wizard
:moustache: Overall great storytelling from multiple points of view.

Things I disliked:
:facehoof: (example: "insert sentence here," he thought to himself) This and similar sentences were used every other paragraph, plus It's incorrect to put "s around thoughts, those are for when you say things silly! :derpytongue2:
:facehoof: Slight lack of detail and descriptions, however this is a minor gripe.

Overall:4/5 moustaches :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::facehoof:
And yes, this is Fluttershy from dota 2, I shall message you ingame mister author!
I look forward to reading more of this, it's better than many books I've read!

Lovin this book, I'll try not to comment too much, but before I forget,

Techorse replied, “There are still65 other humans besides Wizard walking around capturing your people for their own entertainment."

65 humans?
Man, they sure have their work cut out for them!


Hope you enjoy your read-through. Feedback is always appreciated. :pinkiesmile:

I'm trying to imagine what the mech looks like. But I keep defaulting to the mechs from avatar :ajbemused:

"But I do envy you a little. After all, you do get to hang out with a bunch of naked women."

I never even thought of that.
(Just to point out. It took me a while to find an I'm jealous now picture)

Wait, what?

The blast made the Plexiglas panel underneath her disappear, and she fell into the cockpit with him.

The fiberglass canopy burst off with plastic explosives and Schadenfreude flew up with his jetpack towards the hole.

Are there two canopies?

There are quite a bit of errors in this chapter eg. Clestia instead of Celestia.

Pinkie Pie began to sing, “I know! Let’s sing a song to pass time! 99 bundles of hay on the wall, 99 bundles of hay! You take one down and pass it around, 98 bundles of hay on the wall!”

I started singing too XD

Just finished reading it, you need to go through the story there are some confusing mistakes but other than that

The best part was the 2001: a Space Odyssey reference with PAL. He even has the right letters to be a 9000 series computer just have to add the number and we get PAL-9000 good friend to HAL-9000

Twilight gave him a confused look and said, “Magic can’t be understood. It’s impossible to. You are either born with it or you are not, it comes from inside you.”

This sentence really bothered me and seems really out of character. If Magic cannot be understood then it cannot be studied. Also all ponies have magic. And why would a scientist, even if the pawn of a Magician, know more about magic than Twilight this just makes no sense at all.

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