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ideas-happen

ideas-happen #1 · Oct 9th, 2013 · · · The Challenge ·

I like this, especially that it's in the point of view of Twilight. It's a pretty interesting concept, so I can't wait to see more!

ThunderChaserCreate

ThunderChaserCreate #2 · Oct 9th, 2013 · · · The Challenge ·

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I love writing as Twilight. She's most like me.
And, thank you! Glad to see one fan already lined up!

LunarDiurnality

LunarDiurnality #3 · Oct 10th, 2013 · · · The Challenge ·

Not to be annoying, but I've spotted a few grammatical errors.

and her screamed shrilly

I'm pretty sure Spike is a boy... but not based on his scream

took delight in having scare him

past tense, my dear.

Other than that, I LOVE IT!!! I can't wait to read more!!!
Also, I would be willing to be an editor if you would like.
I'm also looking for advice on how to make my stories really awesome, so if it's okay, please share your wisdom with me!

I love how your portrayed the characters. Ooooooooh I'm so excited to find out what happens next!!!!
You just got yourself a new fan!!!

ThunderChaserCreate

ThunderChaserCreate #4 · Oct 10th, 2013 · · · The Challenge ·

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Oh, I would love to have an editor to pick up the idiotic pieces!
That'd be awesome! I'll be checking in on your stories tomorrow.

LunarDiurnality

LunarDiurnality #5 · Oct 10th, 2013 · · · The Challenge ·

3325197 Great! Thanks!
Looks like I gotta do some uploading tonight
I only have a few that are more than just character sketches and summaries.
But I look forward to your advice.