After Twilight refuses the offer of a lifetime, Celestia becomes hostile towards her. Celestia being making threats against Twilight. Against the ones she cares for the most. Twilight needs to figure out what's making the Princess act the way she is, but her options are limited: Risk her life to solve the tyranny, or face the wrath of Princess Celestia. She will do whatever she can to fix Celestia. But she may have to fix herself along the way.
--SIDE NOTE--
The title (and chapter names) of this story were inspired by Mumford and Sons "Broken Crown" and I'm gonna make that song work with this fic.
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This is very interesting. I'm looking forward to more. Though, I've noticed some grammar errors, like changing from past to present tense. For example, at the end "'Now, Rainbow.' She says," it is present tense there, at the very end, it goes back to past tense "Twilight jolted up at the last two words. 'I've been out for how long?!' She yells," It goes from jolted to yells. Past and present. Other than that, this is pretty good. It kinda ruins the way I think of Princess Celestia though, I doubt that deep deep inside her she would "behead all who deny or defy her". I mean sure, we all get ticked off, and not even the princess is perfect. But I just found that a bit over dramatic. Just my opinion. Anyway, keep up the good work!
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Thanks for the feedback! I'll try to fix any errors of the the sort soon. And as for the "over dramatic" bit, I said that this was inspired by Broken Crown by Mumford and Sons. It's an intense and (with the right mind, or a mad one like mine) dramatic song. I don't mean for things in this to have too much drama or go from subject to subject faster than Pinkie, too, though with a mind that has 8,011 things on it as once, that's hard to do.
Again, thanks for the feedback!
This has potential to be a good story, keep up the good work
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Thanks!
Deep down (but not too deep), Celestia was a cruel, remorseless monarch, who would behead all who deny or defy her.
yeah... no
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That will be apparent soon. Thanks for that, though.
Short chapter, but it was great
. But i'm terrified of Celestia now. 
. This is a great improvement from chapter 1 though. I'll be checking this story every day so keep up the good work (:
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The chapter will be made longer in the future, it's just what I could get done in a short time span. And thanks for the compliments
Also, would you like to suggest anything for the next chapter (when I get around to it, that is)? I'm trying to incorporate others into this for reasons I can't explain.
Either way, thanks!
Yeah I've been liking it a lot the princess is my least favorite pony (plz dont judge meh) and I would love to see a cod splinter cell mlp type of thing... MOAR!
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I hate her too. As for the Splinter Cell thing, I'm gonna make a little reference for that suggestion. Thanks!
It might be a little interssting for them to get caught, or have some one find out and join, that would be cool
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I'm which case, something might happen. Thanks for the suggestion!
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slow WAAAAAAAAAAAAY down
that is all
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It's slowing down, or the subjects need to slow down?
For the latter, my mind goes at 88,011 thoughts a second. I can't help but change fast (yet I don't have a need for speed).
Either way, thanks for the feedback!
i need the next chapter!
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And I need to get the Writer's Block out of the way.
At least you're liking it!
DO THE MOVEMENTS AND WORDS FOR A PINKIE PROMISE *shakes hooves* or its not a real one
and about applejack mlpchan.net/site/src/1346701072193.png
okay here is what i want to see
1. (C)ool ass necromacy spell to bring Apple Jack back to life
2. (A) big ass murder of the stallions
3. (M)ore of Celestia murdering the shit prisoners or killing something
4. (P)rincess Luna joining the group after feeling some of the abuse that happened to Berry Punch and getting all pissed of and angry as shit at Celestia
i have a pretty dark mind so i might end up contributing alot of dark idea to this! remember C.A.M.P (above)
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Well, thanks for the suggestions! I'll try to make sure that at least ONE of those happen (really, I'll fit them all in).
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Update please