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I would agree with the Wiki if not for the fact that it seems Starlight Glimmer's appearance in the show has proven in her own spellcasting that all the rules in magic are not set in stone. She seems to be clever enough to find ways to alter spells to bypass those set rules in ways Twilight hadn't thought of...

Where's discord when you need him he'd take care of that mare problem lickety split ...... since it was a artifact the princess told twilight to study that brought him here you'd figure the princess would feel a bit more apologetic to his situation ... her conversation gave me the impression she didn't care since hes not originally a pony ...she threw a citizenship paper at him then left and now he has to fend for himself. Im betting if he took twi to court he'd win a mega lawsuit and since it was under celestia instruction he could go after her to. I know that's thinking to much into it but there attitudes suck it's like they don't care. Now he's a farmhand in her friends orchard they couldn't even provide him a house even when it's there fault he's there.

This story needs Horror and Dark tags, because it's already firmly in "OH JESUS FUCKING CHRIST" territory.

Honestly, Twilight and Celestia's behaviour is disgusting. Is gender dysphoria just not a recognised thing in Equestria?

This was a awesome. read.

"Keep an eye out for Pinkie, she'll be jumping at you as soon as she spots you."

"Why?"

"She has to throw a party for everything and everyone who comes through town, it's what she does."

"I'll keep it in mind."

"So... how do i know which one she is? how do I pick her out of the crowd"
"You'll know. She will pick you out."

"So... we're going to ask AJ to put you up for a little while until you'll be able to get a place to call your own. She can help you get used to Ponyville too, she's been here her entire life."

Well, not her ENTIRE life....

But Twilight wouldn't know that.

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really makes u think

Im going to need 2 things.
1. I will require MOAR.
2. Catbird Words
Oh yeah,
3. Dirty dirty filthy debauched smut.

Thank you for taking the time to write this. Its not said enough in my opinion but thank you for writing this entertainment.

If Twilight looking straight ahead meets Toffee's upper chest than she's bigger than Big Mac. Almost eye level with Celestia.

This is going quite well now that all that body horror and gender switch craziness is out of the way. Now all somepony has to do is teach Toffee to swear a little less, and she'll fit right in!

id like more chapters please. it curious what will happen next.

i breath

Take care of yourself, okay? I didn't see any errors in this chapter. I am puzzled why you chose to make her a very large mare, but there's no reason she wouldn't be. "I just like writing about big mares" is perfectly justifiable. Is Toffee trying to break the fourth wall, noticing that her cutie mark just appeared, retroactively? It's really no problem if you hadn't mentioned it before.

"I'm surprised you handled that so well," Twilight said pulling my attention away from the pink blur.

"Twilight, I was a stallion," I reminded her.

I think you need to clarify what Twilight's talking about a bit more. Like...

"I'm surprised you handled that so well," Twilight said pulling my attention away from the pink blur.

"Handled what, meeting Rarity?"

"No, handled being called a stallion!"

"Twilight, I was a stallion," etc...

Otherwise, I can't see anything wrong, and would like to

more chapters please

Here, have a fav.

Twilight rounded me and gasped, "Oh, I almost forgot to mention this." She poked my butt to draw my attention, "This is your cutie mark, a toffee apple, appropriate right?"

Not really. She destroyed his life and identity, and she GAVE him a cutie mark of just that. No special talent or deeper meaning, it means she destroyed his life.