The perfect plan is hatched. All the necessary pieces are in place. With one assassination a brighter future for Equestria will be secured. That is at least what the aspiring hero telling the story is hoping for, but there are signs of a strange epidemic emerging that's baffling the doctors.
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It's not the kind of thing I would normally read, but it is rather well written.
Your grammar and spelling were good and my only major criticism would be your over-fondness for the enter key. I'm not particularly sure if hitting enter twice after each paragraph, makes the text any more readable.
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As far as the paragraphs are concerned, I find stories written this way more readable compared to those structured like a traditional book, so I'm sticking with it for now.
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Same as Brass, I can't exactly read right now, but I favorited, so I will read it later. But everything looks good