It's been almost a month since the events of The After Party. The Hive has been attacked, a lovely pony by the name of Lily Peace has been ponynapped, and the attacker in charge was a student of mine. I set out on a journey with my friends and a few new members to find her and to bring the attackers to justice.
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I really think this story has some potential, but it could really benefit from some editing/proofreading. There are several grammatical errors, awkwardly phrased sentences, and other issues (eg. past vs. present tense) which correcting would greatly improve the quality of the work.
If you want, I am more than happy to offer you this editing/proofreading help (with chapter 0/prologue and any subsequent chapters). Alternatively, you could check out the Proofreader Group to find others who would be willing to offer this help.
Good luck with the story!