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Dark0592
Here lies the wistful delusions of the sleep addled mind. Actually wait, no, just me.
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Hmmm interesting.... u have my interest.
i thought you wert comming back to fimfiction???
2726660 you must have missed the past month then lol. That break I had got boring and I finally decided to write some more of it
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You have intrigued me.
im liking this
This has cought and peeked my interests, Wish you luck on your work, should you wish to do it.
2738344 oh I certainly wish to do it
that seems to have no effect on whether or not it gets done, though
2738945 Funny thing that, isn't it?
I still wish to show support where I can 
2726670 lol ive beeen preoccupied with work, also still trying to piece together that story i want to write, i need mroe ideas i think. still havnt decided what the hero will do to pass the time in the story till the big colamity of war/massacre.
2726670 oh and one more thing but do you have any plans to complete crimson dawn, l loved that story.
2749001 i definitely know that feel, and for crimson dawn I actually started the rewrite, but I haven't gone further than a page
perhaps when I get back into the vampire groove which will most likely happen eventually
Twilight is OP as all Tartarus. I like.
2761851 that's the idea here
Hello there, just wanted to mention that I did a review of your story.
2815482 well you can't just leave me hanging, I want a link!
and if it was this story you really shouldn't have, this isn't a real story nor is it finished and I don't see it being finished any time in the near future
reviews should be reserved for really popular or finished stories
2816790
The link is in the word 'review,' were you not able to access it?
2817818 ah, I didn't notice it.
This, am kinda lost as to what happened, but am looking forward in what your doing. I hope more explanation comes soon!
All I can say is...
Okay, I'll start with what is wrong with this chapter first: Timeline; creates glyph-> brands glyph onto eye-> destroys orphanage-> Works as a mercenary, collects large trees and boulders, and enough metal off of the seven people she killed to create a castle and farmland-> Goes to jail-> Begins collecting books from the Royal Library-> Is released to defeat Nightmare Moon
Item 1, Spike: In this chapter he is described as her younger brother and yet she is supposed to be from an orphanage. Now granted you can explain this issue with hardly any trouble since you've set the time line for this with her creating the glyph at the age of twelve. So that does leave some room to explain when it was that she was orphaned. The only issue with that being that you can no longer work it in that she was orphaned at an age younger than five, unless of course, you have her or Spike actively seek out their biological sibling at some time after the orphanage incident.
Item 2, Time: In a previous chapter you mentioned that she sought out the jail shortly after the orphanage. Now granted the wording wasn't the best in that area, and it could very well have been a typo, but that doesn't mean it shouldn't be resolved.
Now on to the fun part. the things I think OP Twilight should have and my reasons behind them:
Fire Breathing: Dragon Blood
Ability to Talk to Dragons(would work if they have a separate language): Dragon Blood(could even include having a reptilian tongue[wouldn't that be fun])
Matter Deconstruction on a Cellular Level: You've already gone into this but haven't yet used it on a person(could be part of a flashback)
... I'll think of more don't worry there will be more, without a doubt...
TWILIGHT IS SO OP! I LOVE IT!
As a Role player I should hate this, as a fan of anything powerful that has infinite potential to crush destroy and or save everything, I wish you luck on your future endeavors and to keep this entertainment that makes me smiles!
(so yes I like this story for reason beyond me, maybe its the magic! 
)
2833068 that's the whole point of this story
I never get to go fully op twilight with anything I do
2832913 Not everything has been explained, friend. It may not have been clear but it's not like she stayed in the prison for 7 years straight. that's too boring.
and I said she got a lot of the metal from people she's defeated
not just the ones she's killed
when you're a mercenary, you tend to beat a lot of people.
and also, as I've said many MANY times, this isn't really that much of a story. this is just where I dump my epic badass and dark ideas in combination with my love of OP twilight, so nothing should really be taken all that seriously
2833173
I really like this, and I keep seeing things that present potential problems. I only leave comments on things that I truly enjoy.
2833497 you think it's a potential problem because you're thinking about it in terms of a fully fleshed out story.
My recommendation to you, don't waste your time writing these big comments explaining every little wrong thing. if there's an explanation I missed or haven't gotten into yet, or there's something you want to know, just mention it. Not get into huge paragraphs about it. While I try to read every single comment fully, when they're that big I tend to want to skim.
2833068 and why would you being a role player have anything to do with you liking or hating this?
2833558
Ah, I suppose I can understand that, but I'm fully taking it into account that this is a story in progress and as such can move in ways as yet unseen, even by the author himself. I just bring stuff up because it concerns me as I'm looking at it and would like to poke the authors mind and maybe help contribute.
As to the whole issue of me taking this too seriously or going into too much detail about 'reviewing' each chapter. I'd just like to say that after my initial review of a story I stop taking it seriously and just enjoy the ride. What you have seen me put in the comments is just what I feel like doing for fun.
And yes I did make a long comment explaining this, I didn't intend to do so starting off, but now that I look at it I find this fairly comical.
2833645 just keep it short and sweet, buddy, and I don't mind.
and it is in progress, but story it is only by name.Like I said, this is an idea dump. The only reason it's not a series of oneshots an has even what little storyline it has now is because my mind is slowly piecing it together.
Perhaps in a few chapters or so- maybe when the prologues stop- it'll have enough to be called a real story
until then, though, don't think of it like a story
2833699
No can do, it's too good not to be a story.
2833558 Because being or making a over powered character should trigger some kind of "no" trigger but it hasn't so am happy to say I like this story very much.
2833710 *facepalm*
whatever...
2833752 and sometimes ridiculously overpowered works. I've literally never been able to do it, whenever I've wanted to do it people have always hounded me for it so I give her enemies that can and will beat her or at least make her just barely win.
with this one? I don't care. OP twilight is OP
"I better check on Twilight..."
2839089 don't get what part you're referring to
2839396 The face made me do it!
(It's ment after the 5th prologue.)
cool new picture
2840847 comes with a cool new chapter
2840850
indeed.
"she only for those I tell her she can"
I accidentally verb
i read backwards through the mirror its a good story
2841463 huh?
2842610 There is a word missing there
2842642 dunno how that happened but fixed it
NICE new story
liked, faved and followed a couple chapters back
nice chapter, I'll be looking forward to whatever you send our way
2846283 glad someone's enjoying reading this as much as I'm enjoying writing
2846803 What's not to like, your style is in my field of interest.
2846880 my name IS Dark, you know lol
2846954 Exactly!
This story is just epic to read