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Been awhile since I wrote a pure romantic piece and with my old lyrical style too.

I wonder what I'll end up with doing this for a thousand words.

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Oh my god- this really... hrum, hrum, hrum...

This has been disputed over, hasn't it?


Odd, but oh so very true.


lol check out the random hater on the ratings.
haa... there's always one faggot...

But yeah there's been alot of theories regarding Luna as a dream walker. But I NEVER (I know surprising) never seen any discussion of Nightmare moon as a dream walker. Possibly causing Nightmare night.

Nightmare night being an event in my head as a moment when Nightmare moon had gathered enough stallions and brain washed them over dreams until she commanded them all one night to kill their families, so they all sever ties to their consciences and follow only her command.

i mean, if I had control of ppl's subconsciousness I'd jump at the chance use that to my tactical advantage.

Dark, but beautiful. Just like the night... *Shuffles towards knife on kitchen counter* Seriously though, best poetic piece I've read in a while.

Perchance I would dream of you. Perchance I hold your esteem. Perchance I champion you. Perchance I dream the reality of our dream.

Perchance that word is being used a tad too much. Other than having that word etched into my brain for the rest of the evening, the dark tone of the story is carried through brilliantly. Just writing down a thought: It doesn't seem like mind control but closer to brainwashing. The main character seems to lose his familial identity replaced by love for the Princess of the Night. Must be a strong love considering he was willing to stab his daughter.

Nightmare Moon bestows a Nightmare Night. Serve her well and earn her 'love' tonight.


repetition is not a taboo in writing... its a narrative device.

Surely you've seen it used in movies or comics where a person uses the repetition perhaps to convince/suggest or intimidate someone.

2561267 Yeah, I know repetition is a narrative device used in literature; just poking fun at it not being subtle.



funny you didn't mention the instance that was actual really obvious


nope. its a repeat that uses a huge chunk of the text at the start.

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