The Power of Fear

When a young Sombra gets bullied, he shows his bullies just how afraid he is.

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Arnjol

Arnjol #1 · Jul 23rd, 2013 · 2 · ·

I liked it.

spideremblembrony

spideremblembrony #2 · Dec 24th, 2013 · 2 · ·

I see so much potential in this.

I have had this idea in my own head for some time now and I'm glad I'm not the only one who sees that Sombra could be a master of fear.

Okay, I liked the scenario, I thought that was really good to see Sombra's fear as a child. I would love to see more of that. I would love to see how he grows up with this fascination with fear and how it affects him and how it turns him into the tyrant he's suppose to become. I would really like you to expand on this, if you wanted to, and see where you think it would all happen.

My only gripe is that it is too short. I would have loved to see more and I hope I do.

The descriptions were pretty solid, The story possibilities are extensive. This is a really good set up for something bigger and whether you do it or not, I really think that you know how to start a story. You know how to grab a readers attention and make them want to read more. I think you know how to do that and do it well.

Anyway, great start. I'd love to see more and I hope to see more from you in the future. Take care.