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cleverpun's Concise Critiques 22 stories
  • cleverpun's Concise Critiques 22 stories All these stories have been reviewed in two sentences or less. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3
    Created by cleverpun
    - January, 2016
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Total Words: 151,823
Estimated Reading: 10 hours

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  • CCC: cleverpun's Critique Corner 40 stories "Here's my latest report. I think you'll find it is quite excellent. I even collated it myself." I have critiqued/reviewed all the stories in this shelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Lengthy Comments 37 stories "Omigosh, let me tell you about this story I just read!" I wrote a longer comment on this story in place of a review. Chances are I didn't finish it or didn't have enough to say, and thus it didn't qualify for CCC. Or perhaps I read it before I started doing review blogs.


  • cleverpun's Description/Title Reviews 13 stories "Are you sure that's supposed to be there?" I have reviewed the descriptions/titles of all the stories in this bookshelf. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • cleverpun's Concise Critiques 22 stories All these stories have been reviewed in two sentences or less. Find the index here: http://tinyurl.com/h3ftsm3


  • Favorites 56 stories - 1 unread chapters "Oh man, this is so awesome! It's almost as good as Daring Do and the Shattered Sarcophogus' third printing!" Stories worth recommending.


  • Stories I Have Edited/Preread For 9 stories "Honestly, I think your characterization needs work. I liked the scene with the books, though." Stories I helped preread/edit for. Several of them I only edited parts of, others I edited in their entirety. Whether my input improved the final product is another matter.


  • Stories I Wrote Which Are Bad 9 stories "Honestly, dear, I know we all have our little lapses in judgement, but... What WERE you thinking?" Stories I wrote which are not very good. They might have one or two redeeming qualities, but I strongly recommend NOT reading them. Please read one of my other, better fics instead.


  • Pending Requested Review 0 stories "OMIGOSH Rainbow Dash you are so cool please pay attention to me look I wrote a story!" Requested for review. Higher priority than standard RIL. Check this blog to make your own requests: http://www.fimfiction.net/blog/590650/taking-review-requests


  • Tracking 2 stories - 0 unread chapters "Uhm, it looks like it might be nice? I mean, not that it looks bad! I didn't mean... Sorry, please don't be mad." Intriguing, but not favoriting quite yet.


  • Read Later? 474 stories "Eh, I'll do it later, I'm right in the middle of this thing right now." Stories which may or may not get read, at some time which may or may not be late.

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Dusk Light is the middle child of Twilight and Luna, and their only son. When he hears a rumor at school that his Mommies really didn't want him, he doesn't know what to think. When your Mommies are stressed and angry what is a four year old colt to do?

Commissioned by Dyslexic Foal

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There's an old book that's falling apart. Twilight wants to copy it down to preserve it. But it needs to be as accurate and precise as possible, to preserve the state of the original. That shouldn't be too hard. After all, it's not like the text will change whenever she looks away.

Right?

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Spike is depressed, and none of his old friends know what to do, let alone how to help him.

But maybe a new friend does.

[rated teen for talk about depression and suicide]

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Twilight, believing something has happened to her memory, seeks out Princess Celestia to see if she recognizes it and can offer a cure. But the answer lies far deeper in the root of her nature and her life as the Princess of Friendship than she would have ever expected.

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Upon her return to Ponyville, Applejack learns Big Macintosh crossdressed at the Sisterhooves Social to help his little sister Apple Bloom. Obviously, Applejack knows Mac's behavior doesn't mean he has gender issues. If anything, it just shows how much he cares for his little sister.

However, something else happened while Applejack was away that can't be so easily dismissed.

It's time to talk.

Written for The Writeoff Association's "Illusion of Choice" contest.

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Winter has come early this year, and after a long night out rounding up her animals in the face of Rainbow Dash's "awesome" snowstorm, Fluttershy is oh so cold.

But the worst of it is that Rarity knows exactly which pony Fluttershy wishes would come along to warm her up.

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Jonagold Apple made his family swear on their hats that they wouldn't come to see him, not in the state he is in after the accident.

But Granny Smith isn't about to let her only son die alone in the hospital.

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Princess Celestia had a good day. Luna had been going out more often and was becoming quite fond of nightclubs, her dear niece Cadance had formally announced her pregnancy—though, privately, Celestia felt she was too young to be a great aunt—and, of course, Twilight, her beloved former student, had taken on her first student and Celestia couldn't be prouder! Yes, it had been a good day.

Celestia Sol woke up much like she did every day the morning: sun waking her as it danced upon her eye lids. Wait, the sun? Celestia's eyes snapped open to reveal she was in Twilight's old room in the observatory. On the other side of the room was a smaller bed where a small dusky unicorn was drooling on her pillow.

Clearly, it must be Tuesday.

Preread and edited by Stahl, Kinsley, and Jumbled

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Princess Celestia has always been an incredibly busy pony who never has enough time in the day to do what she wants. Time seems to slip by as she struggles to get all of her work done.

One day, however, something terrible and unexpected happens, and more time than ever is lost to the sands. When Celestia reawakens, she'll find that her entire world is gone and that almost everything she knew and loved has long since disappeared.

A tale of sadness and of tragedy, the likes of which not often seen. Celestia, Princess of the sun...grand ruler of Equestria, and loving sister. Painful are the tears she will shed, and broken her heart will remain.

There is no greater pain than that of utter helplessness.

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