Her Latest Creation

A quiet afternoon at Sugarcube Corner, an idle Pinkie Pie, and two tons of ice cream. More silliness than is healthy ensues.

Originally written for the One Word Prompt of Bananas, given by Dashie4Pres.
Pre-reading creds to these guys.
Sorrow872
arandompenguin
Peregrine Caged
Yokal
Midnight_Quill
Art by my good buddy The Great and Powerful Google used without permission.

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Skeeter The Lurker

Skeeter The Lurker #1 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

The hell did I just read?

Why did I like it?

Why did Pinkie Pie need a bear suit and toasters?

And most importantly...

Why do I suddenly want ice cream?

~Skeeter The Lurker

Themaskedferret

Themaskedferret #2 · Mar 20th, 2013 · 1 · 1 ·

Beautiful. Really good Slice of Life fics can be hard to come by but this is definitely top of the heap.

SuperGiantRobot

SuperGiantRobot #3 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

ICE CREAM HEADACHE!

AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!

ManlyDerp

ManlyDerp #4 · Mar 20th, 2013 · 1 · ·

... You bastard. You beautiful, heartless bastard. I'm lactose intolerant. I can't have milk. I will never know the joy of a sundae... but now I must have one. I must have this legendary treat, even though it will most likely cause me bodily harm. You did this to me, you. My delicious death is on your hooves. I hope you're happy, you monster.
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SuperGiantRobot

SuperGiantRobot #5 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

AGONY!

AGONYYYYYYYYYYY...oh wait, it's gone now.

Peregrine Caged

Peregrine Caged #6 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

And you were worried. Good job, Kartal.

DubleTruble96

DubleTruble96 #7 · Mar 20th, 2013 · · ·

2291115 FALSE! Pinkie Pie doesn't get ice cream headaches. Only gives them.

supermariomon

supermariomon #8 · Mar 24th, 2013 · · ·

pinkie pie is amazing never question pinkie logic

Learn for Life

Learn for Life #9 · Mar 30th, 2013 · 1 · ·

This is a pleasant read, Kartal. It has some good imagery, and some very nice characterization. I especially liked this part:

But just as she was about to add the second banana and thus make her creation one with all the ice cream in the known universe, the orange wimped out and jumped ship. Pinkie wasn’t normally one to judge, but this was obviously unacceptable under any circumstance. With a soft growl, Pinkie made sure the orange knew exactly how she felt about its disobedience. This gave the orange just enough time to think over its actions. It knew there was only one way to correct such an error and thus rolled itself shamefully into the kitchen trash bin. It earned itself a lot of respect from Pinkie and the rest of the kitchen in that one little action.

That part really made it seem like it was Pinkie Pie in this world, since inanimate objects reacted to her. Bravo!

Looking back over it, I know I said I'd offer suggestions for improvement, but I don't think I can offer that much. Perhaps the only thing I can suggest is to make it more "colorful" or something.

Second, she used her already accomplished nose to balance three tubs of ice cream.

Just three to create this tower? That must be a lot of ice cream; it may've enticed readers mroe if we knew what flavor it was, but oh well.

Now, the dirty deed was finally done. Now was the time for a heroine to rise. Rise, and conquer the dark dessert. The pink pony then reached for her favorite ice cream spoon--which she kept behind her ear for safe-keeping--and tied her best frilly napkin under her chin. Today was a proud day indeed. In fact, a day such as this deserved a song of some type. Pinkie tried to sing, but her mouth was full of ice cream. That did not however stop her from singing a very elegant and eloquent song involving herself and bananas while also tying in the fate of the known universe. In fact, it was so beautiful she teared up a bit. The stopwatch rang out at 1.5 seconds and Pinkie gave a cheer as she wiped the whipped cream from her face.

Here's probably where I would've liked to have seen more. Perhaps watch the ice cream being devoured in slow-motion, or to have seen her, after all of her gloriousness, just suck it in like a vacuum or dive into it. But that's just me.

Again, this is a nice slice of life. It's not distracting in its details, and it covers a good range of what makes a good ice cream sundae. Well done!

DreamWings