Replacement

by superpony55

Chapter 3- Different But the Same (Twilight)

This is Twilight. I'm back in Canterlot, now. Unfortunately.
"Twilight!" Princess Celestia came running.
"Yeah?" I said grumpily.
"Thank goodness you're here! I'm sure Shining Armor had told you why I need you." When she saw I still didn't really understand why I had to come back, she sighed. "Twilight, I'm sorry I had to take you away from your friends, but you're needed here."
I sighed then. "I'm sorry Princess. I just haven't seen them for so long."
"It's okay Twilight."
"What do I need to do?" I asked.
"The same thing you did in Ponyville," she answered.
"Okay," I said.
Later that day, I was on my way to see that the preparations were going along just fine. My first stop was in the Royal Kitchen.
"Hello?" I asked.
"Hi. You must be Princess Twilight Sparkle?" said a green unicorn with a short, wavy mane.
"Yes. I am. But please, call me Twilight. And you must be Chef Chef?" I said.
"Please, call me by my first name. It's-"
"Connie. I know." I smiled. "I see the food is coming along fine?"
"Yes, yes it is," said Connie.
"I'll have to go now, I have more preparations to check on."
"Alright, see you later," Connie waved.
I went to check on the weather preparations.
"Hey there," I said.
"Hi," said a grey Pegasus. "I'm Cloud Clearer."
"Hi Cloud Clearer. I'm Twilight Sparkle."
"Pleased to meet you, Princess. I was at your coronation. I cleared the skies," she said proudly.
"Wow. I'm sure you'll do just as good of a job as last time!" I smiled at her. "Well, I'd better go oversee the other preparations. Bye!"
"Goodbye, Princess!" she yelled.
"Just call me Twilight!" I called.
"All right then, goodbye, Twilight! She wanted me to call her Twilight!" The last part was just to herself.
"Next is the décor..." I muttered to myself.
"Hello?"
"Hold on. Yes, there should be a bow here, and there, and..."
"MOONDANCER?" I said.
"TWILIGHT?" Moondancer said.
"YOU'RE in charge of the DECORATIONS?"
"No crazier than Lyra doing music, or you being a PRINCESS!"
"I'm sorry how I acted last time I saw you!" I said. That had been on my last day in Canterlot before I went to Ponyville.
"Well, I wish we could talk longer, but I have to go see the music-"
"And Lyra!" Moondancer finished my sentence.
"Bye!"
"See you!"
I went to see how the music was going. Moondancer was right, I looked, and there was Lyra Heartstrings, just like she said.
"Hi Lyra," I said.
"Hi Twilight," she said.
"How's the music going?" I asked.
"Great!" she answered. "Listen." And she played a beautiful melody on the lyre.
"It's nice to see you, but I have to go," I said. "Bye!"
"Bye!"
I hoped I was done, and go back to Ponyville for at least a day or 2 (she had me check the preparations a few days early). But there was more to do.

Author's Note:

Note: I'm going on a short hiatus so I can work on some new stories.

Comments

[superpony55]

Please give me advice to make the story better!

[superpony55]

2600985

It was my first story, future chapters will be better.

[Page_Turner]

2585547
I Understand That This Is Your First Story But You Atleast Have Some More Description. Tell Us What The Characters Are Doing, Give Us Some Action. For Now I'm A Dislike But Once (IF) You Make It Better I Will Change

[superpony55]

2813771

Yeah, right now I'm editing it.

[superpony55]

2819619

The next chapter is Tie Dye's. I'll give more information about her in the next chapter, and of will be longer, too!

[superpony55]

2819627

No thanks, if you look at my other stories you'll see how much I've improved. Thanks anyway!

[superpony55]

2833036 Thanks!

[superpony55]

2819627

Rewriting it now.

Edit: Or not.

[JumpingShinyFrogs]

This story has officially been graded a Flawed Quartz by The Gem Hunters.

You need to work on your pacing and descriptions. For all we know, Tie-Dye could be a Timberwolf. There isn't much description. Also, you need to make your chapters longer, each one should be at least 1K words.

[superpony55]

3728520

Right. I will be (maybe) rewriting the story, and the chapters will definitely be longer, and I will add more detail. Thanks!

[Lunafilly]

I'd say that you should change your cover picture, it's a little odd looking with just two ponies floating in a white void. You could probably use a screencap from the show of Twilight Sparkle looking sad or something. It's just a suggestion, the art is still fine as it is.

[superpony55]

4246498

Yeah, I know. I need to go fix that at some point.