“’Daring Do and the Glaring Fetish’, sounds like the old series to me. If all she does is chase after a magic statue that stares, I’m okay with it,” Rainbow offered.
The idea that Rainbow Dash jumps to the non-dirty interpretation of the title is somehow humorous. It's just so far from how I expect her reaction; I would have thought she'd keep giggling while a red-faced Twilight tries to explain to her the non-dirty meaning of fetish.
And how did you even cast that spell if it was unfinished?”
“You know, I’m honestly not sure. I didn’t put that much power into it, I just said the words. Never had a spell that worked like that before,” Twilight offered.
Thank! You! very much.
That's the one friggin thing about that episode I just can't bear!
Sixty-four episodes long magic has been something intricate and mysterious, yet wonderfully simple. Read about a spell, practice, cast, repeat. Now suddenly there are spells that have to rhyme, and are cast by saying them out loud, intentionally or not? What's next? Badly translated latin? (no offense meant to fans of the Harry Potter series. The books, that is. If you only watched the movies you have no right to complain, period)
I'm loving this opening chapter. Thank you for sharing this with me, Wise Cracker. I'll read the second chapter probably some time tomorrow and write up a more detailed feedback post.
Somehow I found the secret about her hooves to be really adorable. It goes a long way to explaining (from a fanon point of view) why she doesn't wany anypony touching her hooves.
The part where Twilight is secretly hypnotizing her seems a bit dark though. I was hoping this would be some cute Twidash, but meh, even if it is a bit darker that won't stop me from reading on if you post more of this.
3310302 THANK YOU I HAVE READ THE BOOKS AND SEEN THE MOVIES AND THE MOVIES DO THE BOOKS NO JUSTICE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NO FUCKS ARE GIVEN TO THE POTTERHEADS THAT ONLY WATCH THE MOVIES
“’Daring Do and the Glaring Fetish’, sounds like the old series to me. If all she does is chase after a magic statue that stares, I’m okay with it,” Rainbow offered.
Is good story. Feelink obligated to point out however...
She nuzzled and licked at Daring’s chest, seeking out the little nips beneath that short fur.
...that chest mounted mammary glands are not a recurring equid feature. But a primate one.
Strangely enough, you'd been perfectly fine saying "arms" instead of "forelegs". As that's what a horse's forelimbs are referred to as. (They also have cannons, to add to the anatomical confusion.).
But other than that one little anatomical anomaly, is good story. Hope to see more.
35098743536701 I'm going to follow the same rule regarding replying to comments as I did on my previous fic (ie not going to do too much of it) but I will make this slight P.S.A.:
I'm going by anthropomorphised anatomy, which means mammaries would be chest-mounted. I'm aware this is not correct for horses, but I had some reasons to consider.
-my pre-fimfiction days mostly involved furry fiction (and hypnosis, so expect that to be closer to accuracy than average). I'm more familiar with furry sex scenes than I am with ferals, which is what ponies would be. Please don't ask for my FA name, if you can't figure out who I am, you don't know me very well. And my FA is kinda dead anyways.
-the ponies we know can stand stably on their hind legs, which regular horses cannot do. They also seem to twist their shoulderblades somehow, which has made making 3D models of the damn things a living nightmare. I swear, if I ever write a book about converting cartoons to 3D models, I'm adding a whole bloody chapter called 'The Disappearing/Reappearing Shoulder Problem'. Bottom line there is that they not only assume the posture of a human, but their anatomy, their bone structure, actually shifts to fit that of a human. As far as I can tell, at least. I'm probably wrong.
-to the best of my knowledge, horse genitalia aren't quite built for masturbation. Then again, neither are hooves. If I want to write a lovemaking scene of any description, I will have to skimp on realism to some degree. Of course, that also means I'm free to add little quirks regarding wingboners and the like . Skipping on anatomical correctness can actually open up some comedic potential.
-the main reason I prefer to take this anthropomorphisation, even if they aren't anthros in the story, is because of the scenes that would unfold. Put nipples on the chest and you get the basic range of erogenous zones, a nice and even distribution. Put them down lower and what do you get? Earnip, kiss lips, lick neck, nothing, nothing, maybe stroke ribs, then find the nipples when the other one's snout is in smelling range of the genitals. While I can see how that would work to some extent, I'm just not good enough to make that appealing, and it would conflict with some future scenes if I remained correct (ie: the smell needs to be farther away for some scenes to work). A lot of the story is still undecided at this point, but suffice to say rubber will be involved in copious quantities in a future chapter, and not in the way you think. Trust me, whatever you're thinking of, it's worse. Or better, depending on your point of view. Bottom line: I need that to be there for this story, not lower.
Also, it was originally 'arms', then someone told me ponies don't have arms. Serves me right for listening, I guess. I'll try to just use 'arms' in future chapters, then, thanks for that.
3509488 Really? Huh. It's funny, you know. That's actually a screenshot from one of the most hated episodes of the show, and by extension one of my favourites.
suffice to say rubber will be involved in copious quantities in a future chapter, and not in the way you think. Trust me, whatever you're thinking of, it's worse. Or better, depending on your point of view
I would like to take this opportunity to apologise to everyone who commented on the second chapter of the story before it was published. I deleted the chapter to ensure it would show up on notifications when posted.
I really am sorry I had to do this, but it was a judgment call between upsetting early fans and and people missing updates. For more information on the problem at hand, I wrote a blog post here detailing a similar thing that happened with Changeling Blood, the first fic (I'm told) of mine that got featured. Chapter updates weren't coming through, and as such I lost a lot of exposure and, more importantly, I may have lost a good chunk of reader attention early on.
I said I'd update weekly. I inted to do my best to hold that promise. It wouldn't do if my first update made it look like I was breaking that promise already.
So again, sorry for the inconvenience, check the blog to make sure you're aware of how the update system works and you can avoid losing views. Do not abuse the fix for it.
That wasn't Rainbow speaking in the beginning, that was you ranting about the Season 3 finale. Anyways, enjoying this so far, can't wait to find out what happens next.
Me and dash have similar sleep habits We sleep anywhere, anytime, any how (napped on a gravel road with just a thin blanket and a feather pillow yesterday) We drool And talk in our sleep. Loudly Lyra too but she has wet dreams most of the time
Twilight stopped, shocked but keeping her composure. “Say that again, slowly.”
I had a bad landing once and I skidded over some gravel and broken glass. It chipped up my hooves really badly and hurt my legs. And I know you can’t really feel on your hooves but when they pulled out all that stuff it really felt bad. And even after it healed up it still hurts when it’s touched by anypony, like something that’s not supposed to be there,” Rainbow Dash admitted, breath coming in little gasps like she was sobbing.
Are you serious? I just read it while it was bunched up and then you space it out! GAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!
Twilight stopped, shocked but keeping her composure. “Say that again, slowly.”
I had a bad landing once and I skidded over some gravel and broken glass. It chipped up my hooves really badly and hurt my legs. And I know you can’t really feel on your hooves but when they pulled out all that stuff it really felt bad. And even after it healed up it still hurts when it’s touched by anypony, like something that’s not supposed to be there,” Rainbow Dash admitted, breath coming in little gasps like she was sobbing.
You can't be fucking serious! I took like five minutes to space those words out and then you space them out for me! Asshole.
“’Daring Do and the Glaring Fetish’, sounds like the old series to me. If all she does is chase after a magic statue that stares, I’m okay with it,” Rainbow offered.
That is actually the original definition of “fetish”. Rainbow’s more well read than I thought!
We are so glad thou shared thy secret scroll. We very much like thine story and writing style hoof servant.
The idea that Rainbow Dash jumps to the non-dirty interpretation of the title is somehow humorous. It's just so far from how I expect her reaction; I would have thought she'd keep giggling while a red-faced Twilight tries to explain to her the non-dirty meaning of fetish.
Thank! You! very much.
That's the one friggin thing about that episode I just can't bear!
Sixty-four episodes long magic has been something intricate and mysterious, yet wonderfully simple. Read about a spell, practice, cast, repeat. Now suddenly there are spells that have to rhyme, and are cast by saying them out loud, intentionally or not?
What's next? Badly translated latin? (no offense meant to fans of the Harry Potter series. The books, that is. If you only watched the movies you have no right to complain, period)
I'm loving this opening chapter. Thank you for sharing this with me, Wise Cracker.
I'll read the second chapter probably some time tomorrow and write up a more detailed feedback post.
You know what? Buck it. Thumbs up for the idea alone.
Too bad I'm not in the mood for clop right now.
Well thank you for publishing it.
It is very visually stimulating, I can see why Rainbow was effected so easily.
Thanks for writing it.
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Yes...
More...
“Spoilers, Rainbow."
SQUEEE
Spoilers
I await the next chapter eagerly
Somehow I found the secret about her hooves to be really adorable. It goes a long way to explaining (from a fanon point of view) why she doesn't wany anypony touching her hooves.
The part where Twilight is secretly hypnotizing her seems a bit dark though. I was hoping this would be some cute Twidash, but meh, even if it is a bit darker that won't stop me from reading on if you post more of this.
This proves the nigh limitless power of the Mind Control group!
3507499 SO MUCH DOCTOR WHO IN THAT PICTURE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I LOVE IT!!!!!!!! I eagerly await the next chapter my good author
3310302 THANK YOU I HAVE READ THE BOOKS AND SEEN THE MOVIES AND THE MOVIES DO THE BOOKS NO JUSTICE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! NO FUCKS ARE GIVEN TO THE POTTERHEADS THAT ONLY WATCH THE MOVIES
2526395 Love the Olde English
ME WANTS MOREZ
3508764yes so many much doctor makes me a happy person it does
Oh, the dramatic irony.
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Well, really, if there's any group that should be adept at controlling public opinion...
Oh my god that face on the cover is so goddam cute I squealed.
Is good story. Feelink obligated to point out however...
...that chest mounted mammary glands are not a recurring equid feature. But a primate one.
Strangely enough, you'd been perfectly fine saying "arms" instead of "forelegs". As that's what a horse's forelimbs are referred to as. (They also have cannons, to add to the anatomical confusion.).
But other than that one little anatomical anomaly, is good story. Hope to see more.
this is very relevant to my interests. and i didn't even no that.
I'll be quite honest, I'm not quite sure what was going on after the Daring Do part.
...
Not quite sure if Twilight really mind controlled Dash, or just heard the scene play out (By order of dash's talking)
Either way, this story has great potential, and I can't wait for more.
You release this right as I'm in the midst of a resurgence of my hypno fetish...
One of these days I'm going to write a hypno-fic...
Will read later when I'm not stuck cooking my dinner.
3509874 3536701
I'm going to follow the same rule regarding replying to comments as I did on my previous fic (ie not going to do too much of it) but I will make this slight P.S.A.:
I'm going by anthropomorphised anatomy, which means mammaries would be chest-mounted. I'm aware this is not correct for horses, but I had some reasons to consider.
-my pre-fimfiction days mostly involved furry fiction (and hypnosis, so expect that to be closer to accuracy than average). I'm more familiar with furry sex scenes than I am with ferals, which is what ponies would be. Please don't ask for my FA name, if you can't figure out who I am, you don't know me very well. And my FA is kinda dead anyways.
-the ponies we know can stand stably on their hind legs, which regular horses cannot do. They also seem to twist their shoulderblades somehow, which has made making 3D models of the damn things a living nightmare. I swear, if I ever write a book about converting cartoons to 3D models, I'm adding a whole bloody chapter called 'The Disappearing/Reappearing Shoulder Problem'. Bottom line there is that they not only assume the posture of a human, but their anatomy, their bone structure, actually shifts to fit that of a human. As far as I can tell, at least. I'm probably wrong.
-to the best of my knowledge, horse genitalia aren't quite built for masturbation. Then again, neither are hooves. If I want to write a lovemaking scene of any description, I will have to skimp on realism to some degree. Of course, that also means I'm free to add little quirks regarding wingboners and the like . Skipping on anatomical correctness can actually open up some comedic potential.
-the main reason I prefer to take this anthropomorphisation, even if they aren't anthros in the story, is because of the scenes that would unfold. Put nipples on the chest and you get the basic range of erogenous zones, a nice and even distribution. Put them down lower and what do you get? Earnip, kiss lips, lick neck, nothing, nothing, maybe stroke ribs, then find the nipples when the other one's snout is in smelling range of the genitals. While I can see how that would work to some extent, I'm just not good enough to make that appealing, and it would conflict with some future scenes if I remained correct (ie: the smell needs to be farther away for some scenes to work). A lot of the story is still undecided at this point, but suffice to say rubber will be involved in copious quantities in a future chapter, and not in the way you think. Trust me, whatever you're thinking of, it's worse. Or better, depending on your point of view. Bottom line: I need that to be there for this story, not lower.
Also, it was originally 'arms', then someone told me ponies don't have arms. Serves me right for listening, I guess. I'll try to just use 'arms' in future chapters, then, thanks for that.
3509488
Really? Huh. It's funny, you know. That's actually a screenshot from one of the most hated episodes of the show, and by extension one of my favourites.
I would like to read more
Incomplete? COUNT ME IN.
This looks like it's gonna be something goooood!
MOAR!!!
"Most of the feedback could be summarised as "More, please." "
i think it can be more accurately summarized as this.....
3513245
...Not quite sure what I just read, but I'm interested enough to see where this might go.
Proceed.
So... it was all a dream in RD's head?
And Twilight heard it, even though it didn't actually happen?
But she's going to screw with RD anyways?
Awesome.
I can see the next chapter now...
Ready for chapter 2?
Sure! Uh, what's that on the table there?
Oh, just some ointment. In case someone gets stiff.
...
3509453 Yes! First it was the featured list, next, the world!
[Credit goes to the writer of the story and not the groups promoting it]
the ending was hillarious
3510866
Good sir, you have my insanely focused interest.
3518866 I agree. I nearly choked laughing.
I would like to take this opportunity to apologise to everyone who commented on the second chapter of the story before it was published. I deleted the chapter to ensure it would show up on notifications when posted.
I really am sorry I had to do this, but it was a judgment call between upsetting early fans and and people missing updates. For more information on the problem at hand, I wrote a blog post here detailing a similar thing that happened with Changeling Blood, the first fic (I'm told) of mine that got featured. Chapter updates weren't coming through, and as such I lost a lot of exposure and, more importantly, I may have lost a good chunk of reader attention early on.
I said I'd update weekly. I inted to do my best to hold that promise. It wouldn't do if my first update made it look like I was breaking that promise already.
So again, sorry for the inconvenience, check the blog to make sure you're aware of how the update system works and you can avoid losing views. Do not abuse the fix for it.
Aren't they located a bit lower than on the chest? Whatever, nice start and dang RD has some amazing dreams! <3
Before i read it i was like " i think im going to love this fanfic! "
That wasn't Rainbow speaking in the beginning, that was you ranting about the Season 3 finale. Anyways, enjoying this so far, can't wait to find out what happens next.
Me and dash have similar sleep habits
We sleep anywhere, anytime, any how (napped on a gravel road with just a thin blanket and a feather pillow yesterday)
We drool
And talk in our sleep. Loudly
Lyra too but she has wet dreams most of the time
>chest nipples under the fur
they aren't dogs
Are you serious? I just read it while it was bunched up and then you space it out! GAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!
You can't be fucking serious! I took like five minutes to space those words out and then you space them out for me!
Asshole.
That is actually the original definition of “fetish”. Rainbow’s more well read than I thought!