Nice and slow, some feelings of unease from Twilight due to her slightly ulterior motive. Still loving this. Now we just wait to see if she becomes drunk with power...
Admittedly I can see Twilight losing her focus on the learning process of this and go right into full out control overload. Mainly saying fuck it to her waiting to help her friends and using her for her own sexual needs. From what I can gather she is already into the whole control aspect of it from the "Books" she as in her basement. Which now Spike can't go down there or more doesn't need to. From what I can guess. Spike is going to find it after Twilight goes to an 11 in the "She had gone crazy" o' meter and put two and two together. Telling the other girls which in turn to tell Celestia or Luna. From there I can see it go one of four ways. Twilight completely goes off the deep end and tries to control all of them more into a spectate story this being a prologue to it. Twilight goes off the deep end but gets ranged in by her friends and does to whole undo, making Dash forget the commands with everything going back to the way there were. The celestial sisters get involved having to use there magic to stop Twilight by one means or another. Or finally Dash is fine with it and gives Twilight to go ahead for more a TwiDash kind of story which a lot of Controlling to it. Keeping it more in the bedroom then out around. Maybe a more fun bit here and there on Twi's part with Dash. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter of this and to see the next season. If that happens next, but I can more see it be more out of the house story bits. Honestly I think those could probably be gleamed over with her looking forward to the next season and calling out Twilight about the whole masturbating thing. Which could launch into deeper thing. I understand the whole need to get the hypnosis stuff out of the way and keep the triggers just to cut down the retelling parts of that. But to see some of it come back a little would be a nice touch and to explain it as a reenforcing to the whole trance. Well off to wait for the next chapter *Woosh*
3606832 That might be my bad, actually. I kind of hammered the publish button, because it wouldn't load. That may have caused the issue several people are reporting. I'll try to avoid it in the future.
...huh well it sure didn't take her long to go into evil matermind mode... I gotta admit I really dislike when stories have Twil start to learn something and then go right off the deep end into crazy town and be mad with power.
Still im going to give this story a chance and see where it goes.
Hehe, this is turning out to be kind of cute. It seems like they both have a hidden crush on each other and the hypnosis sessions just allowed them to get together. I don't know much of anything about hypnosis but it was nice to see the first, basic trigger and how Rainbow Dash can use it on herself. This seems to pave the way for lots of entertaining chapters to come.
I wouldn't really say Twilight went "off the deep end" or "mad with power". She was, more or less, supposed to do what she did, she just took it a little further than planned (and hesitantly so). Sure, maybe she shouldn't have done what she did, but what would a romance story be without some stupid decisions and the resulting conflicts?
This story is just one of those things... One of those things that works as a perfect example of a thing that I fully approve of.
The induction was a good read, and the imagery was very good. Especially the part with the doll. I'll admit that that part gave me shivers it creeped me out so much.
I have a feeling that I know what this 'purple magic' could be, but I can't wait to read it myself nonetheless. Also, that bit about Thunderlane and oranges at the end was a nice touch. I guess she just likes lavender better.
This story has come a good way since it was unpublished, and I still can't wait for more!
You know, I easily see this going into Dark territory. I have nothing against this, just want to point out that in case that is the road you are considering. I would maybe suggest putting a Dark tag up. This story is very interesting and has me on the edge of my seat. I feel that there are so many ways in which this story can go and I am kinda scared for Rainbow. Keep up the good work.
I really wish I was a somnambulist. I had so many ideas for posthypnotic triggers that I wanted to try out, but my accursed subconscious is not nearly as malleable as I'd like!
3607352 The next chapter confirms this, but I'll put it out there that she did go according to plan. Remember, Twilight was aiming to tackle Rainbow Dash's intimacy problem right from the get-go. What she hadn't counted on was just how much fun she'd have while doing it, and how morally ambiguous it felt after doing it. 20/20 hindsight and all that jazz.
3607632 I learned my lesson from my last story, which had a singular dark chapter in it that caused several complaints, rage-quitters, and even riots! Okay, maybe not riots, but still, it got some people upset in a way I did want and other people in a way I most definitely did not. I even raised the rating to M on that and added a dark tag for a while, but that was just silly.
There will be dark times in this story, but no chapter will end on dark things happening, you'll see the consequences immediately without needless cliffhangers. This story will remain, for the most part, pretty light, with comedy spliced into mild erotic situations. It's not a full comedy because the situations are still fairly serious. There is a full comedy chapter coming, though, in the distant future. That one might have stood on its own as a oneshot, but in this story just makes for a crowning moment of funny... well, several. Teaser: Clopping is involved, and so are stilts. Think about that .
errors? seems to me like you described everything quite accurately here , i'd say the only error is the assumption that any of that shit works to begin with , but that's why fantasy fetishes exist lol.........
Interesting... I wonder how far Twilight will go, or how far Rainbow will let her, for that matter. Hopefully it will be a consensual thing in the end...
I gotta admit, I don't read many mature-rated fics (I tend to feel more obliged to avoid them) though I'm trying to warm up to the idea since fate seems to have other plans (i.e. my friends always recommending them), but I'm liking this. It's more tedious than what I'm use to, but in a positive way. The flow from one action to the next is very good, the character's personalities seem to very spot on in my opinion, and it's great to see what's going on in their minds as the story goes on (and I don't mean just Rainbow's). Very cool, this certainly has earned a favorite.
I gotta say though, I am kinda hoping it doesn't go as DFatman stated, that Twilight would go power-hungry in all this. It's kinda putting off to me. I mean, I'd still read it, it's your story afterall; but, meh..., the whole power-hungry angle just isn't my cup of tea. Going off the deep end though, and simply taking some advantage of the opportunity in front of her though, I can see happening.
Props for doing two things: First, you are writing a Mind control/hypnosis fiction that doesn't make me feel like a skeezy jerk for liking it. Erotic or not, there are vanishingly few examples of this kind of thing that don't essentially boil down to rape, but with the dick going in the brain instead of the genitals. Again, thank you.
Second, Thank you for taking the time in chapters 2 and 3 and presumably future chapters to show our heroines doing things related only tangentially to Mind Control or any burgeoning ships. It always seems like when an author writes something Fetishy, Cloppy or Romance-y that they treat any word count not directly about those things as fat to be cut out. So many authors would have skipped straight from the end of chapter 1 to Twilight bringing the salve to Rainbow, and so many fics suffer for it. I find it continually amazing how few of these 'sexualized' or 'romantic' stories can be bothered with literary foreplay. Wine and dine me with some back story! Titillate me with some motivations and interactions with background characters! Slow down and explore the setting or something, THEN commence with the heartwarming romance and/or nasty clop action. Jeeze, what's the Rush?! So, uh, thanks for doing that thing i just rambled on about too.
Just my opinions, of course. Really enjoying the fic!
Hypnotic inductions are boring? Ha! That's usually the best part of most erotic hypnosis stories. Most stories kind of lose the appeal immediately after because they get into a sex scene or something... honestly, I just realized that this might be the first time I read a hypnosis story where the subject actually knows what they are getting into (mostly) and isn't just outright meeting someone that hypnotizes them and then having no clue why they act differently. That fact alone puts your fic into at least the top 10 if not the top five of the stories I've read, especially with the quality and knowledge behind the writing.
Also, I was enamored with your description of Twilight's excitement, I know when I first did an induction with my girlfriend I felt much the same. All in all, thank you for this story.
6514880 You absolutely can hypnotize someone into hypnotizing someone else. Naturally, it depends on that first hypnotee and if it's something they are actually willing to learn to do.
OK. So, Twilight is a first-timer here, nervous, and over-eager. Like she's trying to make sure she does everything, or like she's getting carried away with what's possible.
That doesn't sound too far off from a pony that we got introduced to with something like 25 different spell effects mentioned in an early episode and she just kept on going.
I think she really needed to learn this from another pony, not just from a book. Oh well, lets see how much of a snowball this turns out to be.
Incredibly late comment, but I’m really loving this so far. It’s that perfect style where everything is technically accurate, but the process is streamlined to make it more fun to read (that, and I suck at hypnosis, so hearing about anyone having success with amnesia suggestions always makes me go “Seems implausible but okay”). Twilight’s nervous internal monologue is delightfully realistic as well.
I also loved the sensory thing with the tree sap; I’ve never heard that done in inductions before, and it’s a very clever idea! I’ll have to remember it.
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Should be fine now. It lagged when I tried to hit 'Publish', so it probably unpublished it again.
3606635 The hypnotic inductions were quite intriguing for me to read.
Nice and slow, some feelings of unease from Twilight due to her slightly ulterior motive. Still loving this. Now we just wait to see if she becomes drunk with power...
Admittedly I can see Twilight losing her focus on the learning process of this and go right into full out control overload. Mainly saying fuck it to her waiting to help her friends and using her for her own sexual needs. From what I can gather she is already into the whole control aspect of it from the "Books" she as in her basement. Which now Spike can't go down there or more doesn't need to. From what I can guess. Spike is going to find it after Twilight goes to an 11 in the "She had gone crazy" o' meter and put two and two together. Telling the other girls which in turn to tell Celestia or Luna. From there I can see it go one of four ways. Twilight completely goes off the deep end and tries to control all of them more into a spectate story this being a prologue to it. Twilight goes off the deep end but gets ranged in by her friends and does to whole undo, making Dash forget the commands with everything going back to the way there were. The celestial sisters get involved having to use there magic to stop Twilight by one means or another. Or finally Dash is fine with it and gives Twilight to go ahead for more a TwiDash kind of story which a lot of Controlling to it. Keeping it more in the bedroom then out around. Maybe a more fun bit here and there on Twi's part with Dash. I'm really looking forward to the next chapter of this and to see the next season. If that happens next, but I can more see it be more out of the house story bits. Honestly I think those could probably be gleamed over with her looking forward to the next season and calling out Twilight about the whole masturbating thing. Which could launch into deeper thing. I understand the whole need to get the hypnosis stuff out of the way and keep the triggers just to cut down the retelling parts of that. But to see some of it come back a little would be a nice touch and to explain it as a reenforcing to the whole trance. Well off to wait for the next chapter *Woosh*
And my favorites list decided this doesn't need to actually show up on it.
Then again, it's been telling me I have two updates than I really have for about a month now, so...
3606832
That might be my bad, actually. I kind of hammered the publish button, because it wouldn't load. That may have caused the issue several people are reporting. I'll try to avoid it in the future.
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Perhaps, but this is FAR from the first time this has happened. I don't really think it's your fault. Or at least, all your fault.
...huh well it sure didn't take her long to go into evil matermind mode... I gotta admit I really dislike when stories have Twil start to learn something and then go right off the deep end into crazy town and be mad with power.
Still im going to give this story a chance and see where it goes.
Hehe, this is turning out to be kind of cute. It seems like they both have a hidden crush on each other and the hypnosis sessions just allowed them to get together. I don't know much of anything about hypnosis but it was nice to see the first, basic trigger and how Rainbow Dash can use it on herself. This seems to pave the way for lots of entertaining chapters to come.
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I wouldn't really say Twilight went "off the deep end" or "mad with power". She was, more or less, supposed to do what she did, she just took it a little further than planned (and hesitantly so).
Sure, maybe she shouldn't have done what she did, but what would a romance story be without some stupid decisions and the resulting conflicts?
This story is just one of those things... One of those things that works as a perfect example of a thing that I fully approve of.
The induction was a good read, and the imagery was very good. Especially the part with the doll. I'll admit that that part gave me shivers it creeped me out so much.
I have a feeling that I know what this 'purple magic' could be, but I can't wait to read it myself nonetheless. Also, that bit about Thunderlane and oranges at the end was a nice touch. I guess she just likes lavender better.
This story has come a good way since it was unpublished, and I still can't wait for more!
You know, I easily see this going into Dark territory. I have nothing against this, just want to point out that in case that is the road you are considering. I would maybe suggest putting a Dark tag up. This story is very interesting and has me on the edge of my seat. I feel that there are so many ways in which this story can go and I am kinda scared for Rainbow. Keep up the good work.
I really wish I was a somnambulist. I had so many ideas for posthypnotic triggers that I wanted to try out, but my accursed subconscious is not nearly as malleable as I'd like!
Reading the hypnotic inductions was very hot and I love how it dived deeper into human brain.
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The next chapter confirms this, but I'll put it out there that she did go according to plan. Remember, Twilight was aiming to tackle Rainbow Dash's intimacy problem right from the get-go. What she hadn't counted on was just how much fun she'd have while doing it, and how morally ambiguous it felt after doing it. 20/20 hindsight and all that jazz.
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I learned my lesson from my last story, which had a singular dark chapter in it that caused several complaints, rage-quitters, and even riots! Okay, maybe not riots, but still, it got some people upset in a way I did want and other people in a way I most definitely did not. I even raised the rating to M on that and added a dark tag for a while, but that was just silly.
There will be dark times in this story, but no chapter will end on dark things happening, you'll see the consequences immediately without needless cliffhangers. This story will remain, for the most part, pretty light, with comedy spliced into mild erotic situations. It's not a full comedy because the situations are still fairly serious. There is a full comedy chapter coming, though, in the distant future. That one might have stood on its own as a oneshot, but in this story just makes for a crowning moment of funny... well, several. Teaser: Clopping is involved, and so are stilts. Think about that .
So far so... insanely awesome that there's someone making a well written hypnosis fic!
Glad to hear that this will neither shy away from a bit of dark nor jump off the deep end into grimdark.
Hypnosis. And light tone. And Twidash (?). This is most of my favorite things combined.
Somehow, I forgot to fav this when I read the original chapter.
Argh, all these updates that I didn't know existed!
Well, at least I've got lots of extra backlog to read!
errors? seems to me like you described everything quite accurately here , i'd say the only error is the assumption that any of that shit works to begin with , but that's why fantasy fetishes exist lol.........
also , pink magic?....
3608140 bah , cmc send people into riots all the time no matter what you do , fuck em....
Interesting... I wonder how far Twilight will go, or how far Rainbow will let her, for that matter.
Hopefully it will be a consensual thing in the end...
I gotta admit, I don't read many mature-rated fics (I tend to feel more obliged to avoid them) though I'm trying to warm up to the idea since fate seems to have other plans (i.e. my friends always recommending them), but I'm liking this. It's more tedious than what I'm use to, but in a positive way. The flow from one action to the next is very good, the character's personalities seem to very spot on in my opinion, and it's great to see what's going on in their minds as the story goes on (and I don't mean just Rainbow's). Very cool, this certainly has earned a favorite.
I gotta say though, I am kinda hoping it doesn't go as DFatman stated, that Twilight would go power-hungry in all this. It's kinda putting off to me. I mean, I'd still read it, it's your story afterall; but, meh..., the whole power-hungry angle just isn't my cup of tea. Going off the deep end though, and simply taking some advantage of the opportunity in front of her though, I can see happening.
Props for doing two things: First, you are writing a Mind control/hypnosis fiction that doesn't make me feel like a skeezy jerk for liking it. Erotic or not, there are vanishingly few examples of this kind of thing that don't essentially boil down to rape, but with the dick going in the brain instead of the genitals. Again, thank you.
Second, Thank you for taking the time in chapters 2 and 3 and presumably future chapters to show our heroines doing things related only tangentially to Mind Control or any burgeoning ships. It always seems like when an author writes something Fetishy, Cloppy or Romance-y that they treat any word count not directly about those things as fat to be cut out. So many authors would have skipped straight from the end of chapter 1 to Twilight bringing the salve to Rainbow, and so many fics suffer for it.
I find it continually amazing how few of these 'sexualized' or 'romantic' stories can be bothered with literary foreplay. Wine and dine me with some back story! Titillate me with some motivations and interactions with background characters! Slow down and explore the setting or something, THEN commence with the heartwarming romance and/or nasty clop action. Jeeze, what's the Rush?!
So, uh, thanks for doing that thing i just rambled on about too.
Just my opinions, of course. Really enjoying the fic!
Hypnotic inductions are boring? Ha! That's usually the best part of most erotic hypnosis stories. Most stories kind of lose the appeal immediately after because they get into a sex scene or something... honestly, I just realized that this might be the first time I read a hypnosis story where the subject actually knows what they are getting into (mostly) and isn't just outright meeting someone that hypnotizes them and then having no clue why they act differently. That fact alone puts your fic into at least the top 10 if not the top five of the stories I've read, especially with the quality and knowledge behind the writing.
Also, I was enamored with your description of Twilight's excitement, I know when I first did an induction with my girlfriend I felt much the same. All in all, thank you for this story.
3642518 youre speaking from my heart, fellow brony^^
Ooh I kinda want to try this hypnosis stuff now
5369328 What side?
Personally, I would end up flip flopping between the sides... I wonder if you can hypnotize someone to hypnotize someone else...
Sure you are.
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8 years later, how did it go?
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You absolutely can hypnotize someone into hypnotizing someone else.
Naturally, it depends on that first hypnotee and if it's something they are actually willing to learn to do.
OK. So, Twilight is a first-timer here, nervous, and over-eager. Like she's trying to make sure she does everything, or like she's getting carried away with what's possible.
That doesn't sound too far off from a pony that we got introduced to with something like 25 different spell effects mentioned in an early episode and she just kept on going.
I think she really needed to learn this from another pony, not just from a book. Oh well, lets see how much of a snowball this turns out to be.
Incredibly late comment, but I’m really loving this so far. It’s that perfect style where everything is technically accurate, but the process is streamlined to make it more fun to read (that, and I suck at hypnosis, so hearing about anyone having success with amnesia suggestions always makes me go “Seems implausible but okay”). Twilight’s nervous internal monologue is delightfully realistic as well.
I also loved the sensory thing with the tree sap; I’ve never heard that done in inductions before, and it’s a very clever idea! I’ll have to remember it.