Not everything that's been introduced is going to get the full exploration, and I know that'll disappoint some people. But it's necessary. I can't be distracting readers with every little subplot so far, so... some questions, you're not going to get a straight answer to in this story.
You mean we'll never hear the tale of Elmer's ability to find gems!?
But on the bright side, now that everyone knows this is true, there's sure to be some epic tales written based on it... eventually. I think 'The Chronicles of a CoCoCon visit' will be the more popular theme, but still...
I guess the issue I'm dancing around is: as it stands, the whole Scootaloo thing is resolved, but not completely. There are answers coming, but not in the way that'll please ScootaDash sister friendshippers, I think. It's a new take on things, though, so I'm pleased. It's everyone else who's wrong might have wanted more.
Another front hoof went to her chest, rubber on nipple giving off another squeak, this time coming with a squeal of delight.
If your ponies have nipples, they ain't on the chest. I say "your ponies" because some people loathe the whole "anatomically correct" jazz, but having her have breasts on her chest is a bit jarring.
3930863 Didn't we have this discussion, like, in the first chapter ? I'm using chest-mounted nipples, for several reasons. Scroll back a while, I think I ranted on the topic. Also, presence of nipples doesn't mean they have boobs. I've yet to see a horse with an udder... outside of a Kaidan fic, maybe. All I'm doing is following majority rule.
(Adding this 3510866 here, because it seems to be wonky at the moment.)
3930841 Eheh, funny you should mention that *scurries off to hastily add it to the final chapter* Seriously, though, there's a lot of stuff in this thing, and I can only use so much.
“It’s baking moulds shaped like your cutie mark,” Pinkie explained. “In case anypony ever wants your hot buns. Now they’ll look as awesome as they taste.”
“Oh yeah, ponies love sinking their teeth into those. Thanks, Pinkie,” Rainbow said with a smile.
Rainbow looked idly at the sky and pondered. “You mean questions like: ‘How do we get sunburn or blush when we’re covered in fur?’” Twilight’s ears flattened. “Please, Rainbow Dash, I said I’d answer important questions. I’m not a miracle worker.”
It finally feels right. I’m finally fixed. I’m normal.
That was the best way to end a chapter.
On that note, I think this would be an awesome place to end the fanfic. I know, many want it to go on, but it's like Calvin and Hobbes: if Watterson had kept it going, the very same people who wanted to bring it back would be the ones wanting it dead.
In my honest opinion, I would label this story as 'Complete', before it becomes stale or suffers from Cerebrus Syndrome.
"That happened the other time I changed species, the time we promised to pretend never happened."
Well, that explains a lot. Also, part of me can't help but suspect that a certain dreamwalking alicorn might have been involved in the sleep-preening. Might.
Rainbow Dash donned the blindfold and whacked the paper changeling, idly wondering if paper changelings and rubber alicorns had any sort of family relationship in the fetish world.
Compared to the whipped cream draconequi and the stainless steel minotaurs, they're practically siblings. But then, the fetish bestiary in a strange and disturbing thing. Let us not speak further on it.
The image I put in your head is self-reinforcing, it should get some real results in a day or two.
Huh. Well, that's cryptic...
“You mean questions like: ‘How do we get sunburn or blush when we’re covered in fur?’”
Fiber optic hair strands. What? They're magical talking ponies. Are you really going to tell me you'll accept training pigs to smell inorganic minerals but not that?
Carefully, she rubbed the rubber-coated hooves and legs together, producing the same squeaking sensation she’d felt while at CoCoCon, only more intense.
It is a very good thing that this is a written work of fiction. If there was an audio element outside of my own head, I would've burst into laughter at this point. Just the sound I imagined was enough to get me to snicker.
In all, a nice bit of closure on one of Dash's personal narrative arcs, and promises for more. Yay.
And I totally sympathize on stories growing out of control. "Oh, it'll only be two chapters," I said. "Up and down the narrative roller coaster," I said. Past me was an idiot.
3932898 I hadn't really considered that, because I'd started out expanding this thing with a certain ending in mind already. I get what you're saying, definitely, but if I did end the story there, I'd get swamped with requests for a sequel (again), and I'd just have wound up writing all the stuff I have in reserve already. There's certainly an argument in favour of ending it here, but in the long run it'd be pointless. So you could consider this the end of another stage in the story, but the final stage, to me, was always going to be still in this story and not in a sequel.
The final stage being: what does the outside world have to say about all this?
As for the author's comment, what can I say but that I am perfectly happy with the pacing this story has? Attention to subplots is sometimes given an understated quality in this fic and it only enhances the comedic elements like Applebloom secretly training a pig named Elmer to hunt for gems. It's hillarious and the less is said about it, paradoxically the funnier it becomes.
Thunderlane is a faceless stallion to me in this fic, and he represents some of Rainbow Dash's hangups, so it'll be cool to see him once in this fic, but otherwise I enjoy how much attention is given to Twilight and Rainbow Dash, both alone and together. Rainbow Dash's scene at the end was really nice and it's a major win for her. The rubber fetish is strong in this one.
Great chapter and I am loving this. Also, can't wait to see how Scootaloo is doing.
3935689 More like act two, no? We already had one major breakthrough when Twi nearly snapped. We've had discovery, exploration and acceptance of self, next comes acceptance by others (or rejection).
I suppose if I must, I must. Still haven't started on the final chapter, actually. Really need to set aside some time for it. I'm sure I can throw it in somewhere.
I must concur. People have different opinions about how much attention should be paid to minor details, ranging from ignoring them completely to Moby Dick-esque levels of elaboration. As usual, the right answer is somewhere between those two extremes, and largely dependant on how the author plays it. In the end, it's up to personal preference coupled with what works for the story, and all jokes aside, I think the level of elaboration you have is working quite well in context.
Not that I wouldn't enjoy a knock-off pig-training crackfic, though.
That was awesome I can't wait to see what they do together I hope we will see a scene like that soon. I'm glad she got the socks but now I'm interested in how their relationship goes deeper I WANT MOAR SOON! If that is alright with you
You mean we'll never hear the tale of Elmer's ability to find gems!?![:pinkiegasp:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiegasp.png)
3930457![:pinkiesad2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/pinkiesad2.png)
Nope.
But on the bright side, now that everyone knows this is true, there's sure to be some epic tales written based on it... eventually. I think 'The Chronicles of a CoCoCon visit' will be the more popular theme, but still...
I guess the issue I'm dancing around is: as it stands, the whole Scootaloo thing is resolved, but not completely. There are answers coming, but not in the way that'll please ScootaDash sister friendshippers, I think. It's a new take on things, though, so I'm pleased. It's everyone else who's
wrongmight have wanted more.the hints of preening assisting scenes later make me happy
If your ponies have nipples, they ain't on the chest. I say "your ponies" because some people loathe the whole "anatomically correct" jazz, but having her have breasts on her chest is a bit jarring.
Still, loving this.![:ajsmug:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajsmug.png)
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Didn't we have this discussion, like, in the first chapter ? I'm using chest-mounted nipples, for several reasons. Scroll back a while, I think I ranted on the topic. Also, presence of nipples doesn't mean they have boobs. I've yet to see a horse with an udder... outside of a Kaidan fic, maybe. All I'm doing is following majority rule.
(Adding this 3510866 here, because it seems to be wonky at the moment.)
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Eheh, funny you should mention that *scurries off to hastily add it to the final chapter* Seriously, though, there's a lot of stuff in this thing, and I can only use so much.
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Ack!
Yeah, we did. Sorry 'bout that. eh, blame the nitpicker in me.![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
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It's okay. As long as you enjoy it, it's fine. And hey, if it hadn't been for nitpicking, think of all the problems we'd have with lice
I need to know more.
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I'll let you know once I see the movie myself?
Also, I've kinda thrown out my rule about responding to fans, haven't I? Ah, well, wouldn't be a chaoist if I didn't change my mind from time to time![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
I loved the chapter but at the very least wouldn't Flutters know what a wing-boner is even if she's to she to bring it up in front of the other girls.![:rainbowhuh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowhuh.png)
I approve of this chapter. Because of the humor.![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
*pomf*
Okay okay, and because of the clop. Stupid realistic rubber wings...![:twilightblush:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightblush.png)
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But... those are important questions.
That was the best way to end a chapter.
On that note, I think this would be an awesome place to end the fanfic.
I know, many want it to go on, but it's like Calvin and Hobbes: if Watterson had kept it going, the very same people who wanted to bring it back would be the ones wanting it dead.
In my honest opinion, I would label this story as 'Complete', before it becomes stale or suffers from Cerebrus Syndrome.
Well, that explains a lot.
Also, part of me can't help but suspect that a certain dreamwalking alicorn might have been involved in the sleep-preening. Might.
Compared to the whipped cream draconequi and the stainless steel minotaurs, they're practically siblings. But then, the fetish bestiary in a strange and disturbing thing. Let us not speak further on it.
Huh. Well, that's cryptic...
Fiber optic hair strands.
What? They're magical talking ponies. Are you really going to tell me you'll accept training pigs to smell inorganic minerals but not that?
It is a very good thing that this is a written work of fiction. If there was an audio element outside of my own head, I would've burst into laughter at this point. Just the sound I imagined was enough to get me to snicker.
In all, a nice bit of closure on one of Dash's personal narrative arcs, and promises for more. Yay.
And I totally sympathize on stories growing out of control. "Oh, it'll only be two chapters," I said. "Up and down the narrative roller coaster," I said.![:ajbemused:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/ajbemused.png)
Past me was an idiot.
In any case, eagerly looking forward to more.
It finally feels right. I’m finally fixed. I’m normal.![:twilightsmile:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsmile.png)
Says the pony wearing black condom socks given to her by her mistress, yep totally normal hehe.
Why do they have to hide this from their friends? It's so sad that they can't be themselves with all their friends.![:fluttershysad:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttershysad.png)
3932898
I hadn't really considered that, because I'd started out expanding this thing with a certain ending in mind already. I get what you're saying, definitely, but if I did end the story there, I'd get swamped with requests for a sequel (again), and I'd just have wound up writing all the stuff I have in reserve already. There's certainly an argument in favour of ending it here, but in the long run it'd be pointless. So you could consider this the end of another stage in the story, but the final stage, to me, was always going to be still in this story and not in a sequel.
The final stage being: what does the outside world have to say about all this?
3933240
Give it time...
That book will be very helpful for RD to be able to help/understand Scoots a bit more. And yay for condom socks. <3
Poor Twi can't control her wing boners. XD
Maybe RD can preen Twi's wings when they have some time alone together, I'm sure Twi would enjoy RD's soft lips on her wings.![:rainbowkiss:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowkiss.png)
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This made me laugh. Best comment.
As for the author's comment, what can I say but that I am perfectly happy with the pacing this story has? Attention to subplots is sometimes given an understated quality in this fic and it only enhances the comedic elements like Applebloom secretly training a pig named Elmer to hunt for gems. It's hillarious and the less is said about it, paradoxically the funnier it becomes.
Thunderlane is a faceless stallion to me in this fic, and he represents some of Rainbow Dash's hangups, so it'll be cool to see him once in this fic, but otherwise I enjoy how much attention is given to Twilight and Rainbow Dash, both alone and together. Rainbow Dash's scene at the end was really nice and it's a major win for her. The rubber fetish is strong in this one.![:rainbowlaugh:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/rainbowlaugh.png)
Great chapter and I am loving this. Also, can't wait to see how Scootaloo is doing.
3933917 this is the end of act one is what your saying.
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More like act two, no? We already had one major breakthrough when Twi nearly snapped. We've had discovery, exploration and acceptance of self, next comes acceptance by others (or rejection).
Twidash + mention of preening = it is now mandatory that you write a preening scene with the two of them.
3939865![:twilightangry2:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightangry2.png)
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![:raritycry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/raritycry.png)
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Fine![:facehoof:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/facehoof.png)
I suppose if I must, I must. Still haven't started on the final chapter, actually. Really need to set aside some time for it. I'm sure I can throw it in somewhere.
3939997
You can always take the Steven King approach to endings...
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Thanks.
I must concur. People have different opinions about how much attention should be paid to minor details, ranging from ignoring them completely to Moby Dick-esque levels of elaboration. As usual, the right answer is somewhere between those two extremes, and largely dependant on how the author plays it. In the end, it's up to personal preference coupled with what works for the story, and all jokes aside, I think the level of elaboration you have is working quite well in context.
Not that I wouldn't enjoy a knock-off![:applecry:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/applecry.png)
![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
pig-training crackfic, though.
That was awesome
I can't wait to see what they do together I hope we will see a scene like that soon.
I'm glad she got the socks but now I'm interested in how their relationship goes deeper
I WANT MOAR SOON!
If that is alright with you ![:fluttershyouch:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/fluttershyouch.png)
OK I know this cant be the oddest comment you have received in regards to this story, the end made me cry.
3939997 *pats your back* Don't worry...It could be worse could be a Pinkie Pie preening Twilight scene...![:scootangel:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/scootangel.png)
suprisingly complex reason she has. Then again, Dash is overall a suprisingly complex pony
4017952 that... Is a lot worse.