Derpy is a very sad pony. as well as Celestia. and another fine chap. when they meet up they try to get better.
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That picture, it makes me sad.
2182829 it makes me sad aswell
In your short description, you left the d out of Derpy.
I am not very good when it comes to criticism, so the best I can say is you need more detail( as in trying to expand on the plot, and emotional side) for the characters's background stories in order to appeal more vividly and clearly to the reader's empathy and emotions.
hope this will be useful somehow.
2183461 ok will fix soon
2183529 ok will try.
Not really " random"
2409090 i didn't know how to tag it... i was told to put random on it
2410021 eh.
2410147 ya prity much... why you no haz a pro file pic?
i have to get of and read a book bya
2410153 okay.
2183529 I like you.
2410189 no please don't. it was not my dest work for a day of doing just a fic and posting ponies.
i agree with him
to an extent
i don't think i need ed to expaned the carectors background story, becuase i don't like going into detal of others lives
2410408 is not like I aid I worship his every word. I just said I like him.
The story's still great.
2412035 (
i was angery and i misread the thing i think [cant remember
])
but okay.